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Issue 48 the study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten.
对历史的研究把太多的重点放在对某些个人上。而历史上一些重大的事件和发展趋势不是由个别名人决定的，而可能是由那些已经被人们淡忘的人制造的。

Certainly it is true that the most significant events and trends in history were made possible primarily by the masses rather than the famous few. But when historians place emphasis on the few celebrities, certainly there are some sound justifications for them to do so.

For one thing, it is always few individuals rather than a group of people that played the most influential effects on the most significant events and trends in history. Though we couldn’t deny the critical role of those whose identities have long been forgotten and in fact their aggregated power is far more than that of any famous individual for the most part, it must be admitted that any single infamous person couldn’t exert the same influence as a famous one does. That is, compared with any individuals, the famous few are unquestioningly of the first-rate importance in determining historical events and trends. The underlying reason is very simple: anyone who has played a critical role in significant events in history is certain to become a famous one, no matter how humble his/her identity was at first. Due to the prominent role of the famous individuals, undoubtedly the study of history should place emphasis on them. It is a universal principle for any area of study to focus on the most important, far more than the secondary one. Therefore, in the nature of academy, it is reasonable for historians to concentrate on few individuals.

Secondly, historians should pay more attention to those few individuals for the practical purpose. The value of history study exists not only in the exploring what took place in the past, but also in the providing contemporary people with useful guidance to deal with their daily concerns. Purer and purer study is of no meaning. If historians fail to satisfy common people’s needs for illuminating wisdom, the study of history is certain to lose its direction and origins to advance. Therefore, it is one of the responsibilities of historians to concentrate on those historical events and figures that can bring common people useful experience, illumination and wisdom. Apparently, the famous individuals, for their legendary experiences either successful or unsuccessful, can greatly throw light on people and guide them to dispose of their daily work with wisdom. In a word, placing emphasis on individuals in the study of history has some practical values that can greatly benefit common people.  

At last, even for the purpose of pure academic study, the scarcity of historical documents also makes it impossible for historians to deep into the historical role of social groups with low identities. When the documents about few celebrities in history are very rare at present, one couldn’t expect historians to find out enough historical records of these unknown. Therefore, if the study of history often ignores groups of people with low identities and places too much emphasis on those famous people, it is not a mistake for historians. If only historians don’t unduly omit any important individual in historical events, they have successfully achieved whatever work it is in them to do, given the condition of the scarcity of historical documents.  

In conclusion, it is easy for outsiders to make some complaints about the study of history, but no sooner had we careful taken into consider why historians always lay their emphasis on individuals, then one would understand that we couldn’t require historians to record all the people who have affected some historical events, which is really too hypercritical for historian. (579 words)

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Certainly it is true that the most significant events and trends in history were made possible primarily by the masses rather than the famous few. （觉得certainly 开头有点不正式）But when historians place emphasis on the few celebrities, certainly （更何况用两遍）there are some sound justifications （justification 本来就是sound)for them to do so.

For one thing, it is always few individuals rather than a group of people that played the most influential effects on the most significant events and trends in history. Though we couldn’t deny the critical role of those whose identities have long been forgotten and in fact their aggregated power is far more than that of any famous individual for the most part, it must be admitted that any single infamous person couldn’t exert the same influence as a famous one does. That is, compared with any individuals(any common individuals), the famous few are unquestioningly of the first-rate importance in determining historical events and trends. The underlying reason is very simple: anyone who has played a critical role in significant events in history is certain to become a famous one, no matter how humble his/her identity was at first(no matter how humber his/her initial identity was). Due to the prominent role of the famous individuals, undoubtedly the study of history should place emphasis on them. It is a universal principle for any area of study to focus on the most important, far more than the secondary one. Therefore, in the nature of academy, it is reasonable for historians to concentrate on few individuals.

Secondly, historians should pay more attention to those few individuals for the practical purpose. The value of history study exists not only in the exploring what took place in the past, but also in the providing contemporary people with useful guidance to deal with their daily concerns. Purer and purer study is of no meaning. (purer and purer?) If historians fail to satisfy common people’s needs for illuminating wisdom, the study of history is certain to lose its direction and origins to advance. Therefore, it is one of the responsibilities of historians to concentrate on those historical events and figures that can bring common people useful experience, illumination and wisdom. Apparently, the famous individuals, for their legendary experiences either successful or unsuccessful, can greatly throw light on people and guide them to dispose of their daily work with wisdom. In a word, placing emphasis on individuals in the study of history has some practical values that can greatly benefit common people. (Why not give some detailed examples such as Washington or other famous leaders? As is so often pointed out,  the inspiration these celebrities gave to the offsprings are infinite.)

At last, even for the purpose of pure academic study, the scarcity of historical documents also makes it impossible for historians to deep into the historical role of social groups with low identities. When the documents about few celebrities in history are very rare at present, one couldn’t expect historians to find out enough historical records of these unknown. Therefore, if the study of history often ignores groups of people with low identities and places too much emphasis on those famous people, it is not a mistake for historians. If only historians don’t unduly omit any important individual in historical events, they have successfully achieved whatever work it is in them to do, given the condition of the scarcity of historical documents.


In conclusion, it is easy for outsiders to make some complaints about the study of history, but no sooner had we careful (carefully)taken into consider why historians always lay their emphasis on individuals, then one would understand that we couldn’t require historians to record all the people who have affected some historical events, which is really too hypercritical for historian. (579 words)


其实我觉得有一点你没有深入，历史学家的确忽略了mass大众的意义，因为作为个人，他们也很容易被某一时代的名人所吸引，而忽视了从这些大事，名人背后去挖掘更具时代代表性的大众。
语言很好，加油！

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多谢QQ糖GG or JJ的评改！致谢ing!
关于你的意见，我的确没有论述历史学家对the masses的忽略。其实，在我的作文中我是承认历史学家有这个倾向的。没有论述的原因是，我认为作文应当集中论述我的主要观点，即历史学家的这个倾向是有其合理的原因的。而其他不是我关注的东西，能一笔代过我就决不多说。这也是我的一惯写法，你觉得这种写法行吗？
certainly我几乎在每篇作文开头都用到它，多谢你的提醒！你觉得surely如何？
盼指教！

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呵呵，surely我觉得也有点口语话，undoubtedly, admittedly 会好一些。