Daily Writing.Cambrige3.Test1.Writing Task1. Waiting Comments and Criticism.

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I began to prepare for the ielts yesterday.And i will attend the exam on 22th.OCT. I have about 2.5 hours hours to study everyday.'ve decided to put my writing here as a record of learning process.
And if u are willing to give me comments and help me to improve it.
I'd be very appreciated.and hope we can improve together.
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C3.T1.WR.T1
    As we can see in the diagram above,more and more people chose to travel abroad to spend their holidays.In 1985,there were 5 million Japanese travelling abroad and this statistic went all the way up to 15 million,in 1995.It was three times of the number in 1985.
    And the second diagram showed us how the Australian's share of Japan's tourist market changed during the 10 years from 1985 to 1995.The curve showed that there were almost no Japanese coming to Australia and it rised up to nearly 5 percentage in 1988. Then there was a decrease in 1989,resulted in about 4 percentage.After that, the share of Japan's tourist market steadily growed up year by year,ending up with over 6 percentage in 1993,and it decreased a little bit to 6 percentage in 1994.We don't have the data of 1995.