8月1日daily writing 独立写作

heying1010UID: 3139153

A job with more vacation time is better than a job with high salary
but less vacation time
    It is a complex issue concerning whether a job with more vacation time is better than a high-paid job but less vacation time. Some will prefer to have more holiday to do what they want to do, while others are willing to sacrifice rest to attain high salary. From my point of view, a job with more vacation time is more suitable for me.
A job with more vacation time will make my life more enjoyable. To be honest, my hobbies are very wide, including travelling, watching movies, playing soccer......and so on. If i have more vacation time, i will be able to travel with my friends all over the world. If i have more  vacation time, i will tend to spend more time staying with my lovely girlfriend to watch movies. If I have more vacation time, i would like practice so hard to perfect my soccer skills . Since i am not that rich and have to work in order to earn for living, a position allowing me to have much free time is a perfect one.
A high-paid job with less vacation time means more stress, which is harmful to my health. When i was in high school, i faced great pressure for entering colleges. Therefore, study became the most vital activity that i engaged in everyday. Finally, i could not stand the tremendous pressure and was sick. Since then, i had suffered from insomnia for years. My life was painful at that time. Fortunately, the college life is not that stressful.I am getting better now. However, stress is still a ghost,which scares me all the time.
To sum up, maybe high-paid job is quite attractive for some employees, but it does not work for me. Personally, i will be in favor of a position with more vacation  time. Because it enables my life to be more easy and more free.

草莓刨冰UID: 3141036

It is a complex issue concerning whether a job with more vacation time is better than a high-paid job but less vacation time. Some will prefer to have more holiday (holidays) to do what they want to do, while others are willing to sacrifice rest to attain high salary. From my point of view, a job with more vacation time is more suitable for me.' a- Z' x. o; r% d" b
A job with more vacation time will make my life more enjoyable. To be honest, my hobbies are very wide (in a wide range), including travelling, watching movies, playing soccer......and so on. (这块最好不要有……省略号)If i have more vacation time, i will be able to(be able to 是有能力做某事的意思，所以这块最好用I can) travel with my friends all over the world. If i have more vacation time, i will tend to spend more time staying with my lovely girlfriend to watch movies. If I have more vacation time, i would like (would like to do) practice so hard to perfect (improve)my soccer skills . Since i (I) am not that rich and have to work in order to earn for living(have to work for money), a position allowing me to have much free time is a perfect one.- H:
(感觉这句话逻辑不对，需要赚钱为什么一个更多假期的工作更适合？)
A high-paid job with less vacation time means more stress, which is harmful to my health. When i was in high school, i faced great pressure for entering colleges. Therefore, study became the most vital activity that i engaged in (不要这个in) everyday. (engage..感觉有点怪)Finally, i could not stand the tremendous pressure and was sick. Since then, i had suffered from insomnia for years. My life was painful at that time. Fortunately, the college life is not that stressful. I am getting better now. However, stress is still a ghost(用词不当), which scares me all the time.
To sum up, maybe high-paid job is quite attractive for some employees, but it does not work for me. Personally, i will be in favor of (in) a position with more vacation time. Because it enables my life to be more easy (easier) and more free.

1. 字数偏少，所以中间写得不够详细。
2. 句式感觉有点简单，但是个别词却用了高级词汇，感觉有点不搭。
3. 有一些语法错误，希望下次可以避免。
4. 总体感觉写的有点简单，希望可以再写的有深度一点。