【NINE小组】第6次作业-by 陈懂

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求拍啊！！

We have been advised to participate in all kinds of activities since our childhood, for purpose of becoming a well-grounded individual. However, whether college students should devote attention to that many courses, including imaginative literature, deserves further evaluation. What is more, some protagonists of the statement argue that people should try as much to manage the weaknesses as to develop their strength, which I find dubious anyway.

There are many reasons to be a well-rounded person, and the first is that our dreams changes constantly. It is often heard from a 4-year-old child that he wants to become a scientist or soldier when he is grown up, but few of them keep their original dream when he really becomes an adult. Many realize that their talent and interest lies elsewhere as they grow up and because of that, it is wise to keep one's option open. Moreover, acquiring the basic living skills is crucial for one's survival. According to recent news, a Chinese Olympic golden medalist makes a living by begging in the subway stations. Since he has devoted all his past life to gymnastics training and no time to any other abilities that is needed to survive the contemporary society, there is no choice for him other than going begging

These reasons may be good enough to persuade students in primary or junior schools to take part in music, community service and other extra-curricular activities, but becomes pointless when it comes to a college student. After 12 years (in china) of learning, they are supposed to have obtained most of the basic surviving abilities, and know themselves clear enough to pick one specific course as their major.After all, differences are rarely made by those who possess skills in a wide variety of disciplines.Instead, the world often remembers individuals who have one strong obsessive focus, focus strong enough to change the world. Although Einstein's talent in music is known to a lot of people, we may never hear of this genius if it were not the relative theory, which really made a difference in our world. In this sense, it is absurd to require the students to take courses in imaginative literature, if poetries, novels and mythology are irrelevant to their major, what the students are going to be remembered for.

Some people, however, claims that learning experiences in all areas are indispensible for one's success, since knowledge from different areas interact with each other and thus inspires new ideas. Imaginative literature, they argue, is more likely to bring new thoughts to students. Consequently, regardless of some students' dislike in poetries, compelling the learning is beneficial for them in the long run. Cogent as it seems, it ignores the fact that only between strengths of an individual does an inspiring interaction emerges, as for the weaknesses, it is just a waste of time. It is true that some Einstein’s success might be attributed to his love in music and violin, but it cannot be denied that music and physics are both his great strengths, not what makes him sick. On the other hand, countless people, including myself, hate literature and novels, and as a result, never bother borrowing any ideas from such fields. Recognized as the weaknesses, imaginative literature gives no inspiration to us, and studying it is nothing but a pain.
唉，高中语文，怨气啊~

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1# winterfine

We have been advised to participate in all kinds of activities since our childhood, for purpose of becoming a well-grounded individual. However, whether college students should devote attention(感觉用attention不好，应该是“投入精力”too much energy或者其他说法) to that many courses, including imaginative literature, deserves further evaluation. What is more, some protagonists of the statement argue that people should try as much to manage the weaknesses as to develop their strength, which I find dubious anyway.(最后一句有点突兀，题目并没有提到这个观点，感觉是为了攻击对手
自己在把
不存在的论点
强加在对手身上)
我们从小就被要求参加各种活动以成为一个全面发展的人。然而大学生是否需要投入精力到那么多课程，包括想象力文学，还有待商榷。(这两句之间感觉逻辑连接不明显，没有明显的转折关系，最好有个过渡，比如改成说：甚至在大学，学生还被要求参加包括想象力文学在内的各种与专业无关的课程，这是否合理还有待商榷。)
There are many reasons to be a well-rounded person, and the first is that our dreams changes(change) constantly. It is often heard from a 4-year-old child that he wants to become a scientist or soldier when he is grown up, but few of them keep their original dreams when he really becomes an adult. （人称单复数有点混乱）Many realize that their talent and interest lies elsewhere as they grow up and because of that, it is wise to keep one's option open. Moreover, acquiring the basic living skills is crucial for one's survival. According to recent news, a Chinese Olympic golden medalist makes a living by begging in the subway stations. Since he has devoted all his past life to gymnastics training and no time to any other abilities that is needed to survive the contemporary society, there is no choice for him other than going begging.
第一个原因是因为我们的理想一直在改变；第二个原因是我们需要多方面的技能在社会上生存。
总感觉第一个理由有点牵强，总感觉有点问题，但是却又说不出来 - -
These reasons may be good enough to persuade students in primary or junior schools to take part in music, community service and other extra-curricular activities, but becomes pointless when it comes to a college student. After 12 years (in china) of learning, they(前面用的是a college student,后面用的they) are supposed to have obtained most of the basic surviving abilities, and know themselves clear enough to pick one specific course as their major. After all, differences are rarely made by those who possess skills in a wide variety of disciplines. Instead, the world often remembers individuals who have one strong obsessive focus, focus strong enough to change the world. Although Einstein's talent in music is known to a lot of people, we may never hear of this genius if it were not the relative theory, which really made a difference in our world. In this sense, it is absurd to require the students to take courses in imaginative literature, if poetries(poetry集合名词), novels and mythology are irrelevant to their major, what the students are going to be remembered for.
认为上述理由足够说服中小学生学习各种课程，但是对大学生来说这两个理由比较空洞。在大学以前已经学习了大多数基本生存技能，并了解自己足够清楚，可在大学中选择自己的专业课程了。然后说明取得巨大成就的、令世界铭记的的大多是那些专注在某一方面研究、改变了世界面貌的人，而不是那些在很多领域同时研究的人。如果不是爱因斯坦的相对论，我们可能根本不会知道他的音乐天赋。……
感觉这里例子和前面的论述有点脱节。（我觉得这个例子改写为：如果爱因斯坦不是把精力主要投入物理/相对论的研究，而是投入相当多到音乐上，那他就不会取得如此大的成就……）
Some people, however, claims that learning experiences in all areas are indispensible for one's success, since knowledge from different areas interact with each other and thus inspires new ideas. Imaginative literature, they argue, is more likely to bring new thoughts to students. Consequently, regardless of some students' dislike in poetries, compelling the learning is beneficial for them in the long run. Cogent as it seems, it ignores the fact that only between strengths of an individual does an inspiring interaction emerges, as for the weaknesses, it is just a waste of time. It is true that some Einstein’s success might be attributed to his love in music and violin, but it cannot be denied that music and physics are both his great strengths, not what makes him sick. （查了一下，貌似关于爱因斯坦拉小提琴，这只是他的爱好，他也只是一个业余爱好者，感觉这样举例会有点小瑕疵）On the other hand, countless people, including myself, hate literature and novels, and as a result, never bother borrowing any ideas from such fields. Recognized as the weaknesses, imaginative literature gives inspirations to us, and studying it is nothing but a pain（做精神上的痛苦，pain不可数）.（感觉这句话有点逻辑混乱。。。也有可能是我没理解）

另外感觉两段里面举例都用的爱因斯坦，感觉第二个例子换一下会更好。举一个的的确确在两个方面都有成就，且这两个方面都是他擅长领域的人。

第一次改别人的作文，都是自己的观点，仅供参考~有不对的请指正~

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word排好了版，复制过来怎么就成了这样。。

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We have been advised to participate in all kinds of activities since our childhood, for purpose of becoming a well-grounded individual. However, whether college students should devote attention to that many courses, including imaginative literature deserves further evaluation. What is more, some protagonists of the statement argue that well-rounded individual is very likely to be inspired by his knowledge in different areas, which I find dubious in certain conditions.

There are many reasons to be a well-rounded person, and the first is that our dreams changes constantly. It is often heard from 4-year-old children that he wants to become a scientist or soldier when he is grown up, but few of them keep their original dream when he really becomes an adult. Many realize that their talent and interest lies elsewhere as they grow up and because of that, it is wise to keep one's option open. Moreover, acquiring the basic living skills is crucial for one's survival. According to recent news, a Chinese Olympic golden medalist makes a living by begging in the subway stations. Since he has devoted all his past life to gymnastics training and no time to any other abilities needed to survive the contemporary society, there is no choice for him other than going begging

These reasons may be good enough to persuade students in primary or junior schools to take part in music, community service and other extra-curricular activities, but becomes pointless when it comes to college students. After 12 years of learning, they are supposed to have obtained most of the basic surviving abilities, and know themselves clear enough to pick one specific course as their major.  After all, differences are rarely made by those who possess skills in a wide variety of disciplines.  Instead, our society often remembers individuals who have one strong obsessive focus, focus strong enough to change the world. Although Einstein's talent in music, demonstrating his versatility, is known to a lot of people, we may never hear of this genius if it were not the relative theory, which he devoted most of his energy to and caused a stir in our world. In this sense, it is absurd to require the students to take courses in imaginative literature, if poetry, novels and mythology are irrelevant to their major, what the students are going to be remembered for.

Some people, however, claims that learning experiences in all areas are indispensible for one's success, since knowledge from different areas interact with each other and thus inspires new ideas. Imaginative literature, they argue, is more likely to bring new thoughts to students. Consequently, regardless of some students' dislike in poetries, compelling the learning is beneficial for them in the long run. Cogent as it seems, it ignores the fact that only between strengths of an individual does an inspiring interaction emerges, as for the weaknesses, it is just a waste of time. It is true that some Einstein’s achievement in physics might be attributed to his love in music and violin, but it cannot be denied that music and physics are both his strengths, not what makes him sick. On the other hand, countless people, including myself, hate literature and novels, and as a result, never bother borrowing any ideas from such fields. Recognized as the weaknesses, imaginative literature gives no inspiration to us, and studying it is nothing but pain.
提的意见挺好的~