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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy and less satisfied than people in the past?
2011年8月30日18:29:42

  
  There is a really high-developed world in much of this planet nowadays, and we can enjoy much more things than ever before, we can buy anything we want as long as there is enough money and won’t go against the law. But do we feel happier than before? Do we feel more satisfied than ever? I don’t really think so.
  What is happiness and satisfaction indeed for our human beings? It is a rather difficult question than even the most sophisticated person can not answer completely. But it doesn’t matter because actually we feel happy when our goals are meted , or we can company around our dearest friends or families, I think that is the most simple sort of happiness. So the question now is that, the fast changing world can meet our demandings as mentioned above? With the first glance, we would say yes, but inner thinking, no.
  Why? Aren’t we enjoying all the benefits from this changing world? Aren’t we gain a lot from the modern technique? There are so many transportation companies offering us so many kinds of way to meet our dearest people, maybe just an hour or two you can fly to LA from NY. There are lots of electronic games and equipments that can be played at any time we want, on the bus or at home, either with friends or alone. There is much delicious food showing at the nearby shops, Chinese Sichuan food, Japanese sushi or Italian noodles. It seems that we should really be thankful with all these thinks.
  However, much of us are engaging in this modern, high-efficient, and even chaotic world, which leads us more tired than ever before, and then making us more unhappy and unsatisfied than ever. We can fly home an hour or two, but high pressure in business last long enough may urge you go back to work in spite of your time with family being as short as a meal time. You may play the latest apple products at any time, but do you feel it can bring you the happiness that you spent along the river in the countryside with your little friends? You can buy any food in any shop, but do you think it is more delicious and precious than the one made by your dear mother or wife?
  Yes, we can enjoy more material life and products in this changing world, but we can seldom feel as happy as before. It is the time and money changes the world, and it is the time and money ruins us. We pursue a lot in material, we count every second to make money, but at last find nothing but more loneliness.
2011年8月30日19:00: