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有些人觉得可以靠自己或家人帮助解决重要问题，因此不需要政府帮助

观点：反对
1.政府有责任解决问题
2.有些问题自己不能解决需要依靠政府
3.政府能更有效解决问题

I believe that most of the daily problems can be solved by ourselves, or with the help of our families, but whether it means that we don’t need the help of government is still to be determined. As I see it, the government’s help is necessary to some extent. My arguments for this point are listed as follows.

First of all, the government does have a responsibility to help solve the society’s problem. As is known to all that the government collects various kinds of taxes every year. They should take from the people and use for them. Things like providing better working opportunities, social welfare, and educational conditions are all should be focused on by the government. Of course one can get a good job and work in the comfortable environment through his or her own effort. However, if the government doesn’t make laws to protect the workers’ rights, they will still have the risk of losing what they get. In this sense, the government’s help is useful to everybody.

In addition, there are still some problems can’t be solved by individuals, such as the economic crisis and the disasters. Most Chinese people should remember clearly the serious earthquake of Wenchuan in 2008. Lots of people lost their homes, relatives, and even lives overnight. Their desperate expressions and tears were so impressed and heart breaking. Thanks to the government, they transported large amount of medical stuff and materials to the disaster area to save the injured people immediately. It’s really hard to imagine what these victims will become without such emergent measures. This indicates that government’s help is necessary in certain conditions.

Finally, government can deal with our problems in a more efficient and essential way. For instance, the price of residence is so high that large numbers of people cannot afford it in China. Many people , the so-called “slave of house”, they borrow money from the bank and work very hard to pay their loans. In order to lower the price, the government makes limit on the amount of houses one could buy. In this way, more residences are available to the ordinary people. Compared to the ways in which people solve the problem by themselves, it’s obviously that only the government can get to the root the problem.

To sum up, even those people who always have good approaches to their problems, they cannot avoid the help of government totally. People should look for better ways to solve their problems instead of just solving them. I believe that with the effort of both the government and the people, life will become more colorful and comfortable.

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托福作文再悲剧就完了啊，各位走过路过不要错过，随便提点意见吧，跪谢！！！

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貌似书面语不能出现诸如 don't, can't, isn't, it's这种缩写，而应该用全称 do not, cannot, is not..等等。这是我在许轶那本《挑战TOEFL iBT作文满分》里看来的...至于别的么，我自己作文水平也不行，等高手解答吧。不过我推荐楼主多看看OG啊，TPO这些里面的阅读文章，遇到好词好句赶紧记下来，读得多了，写作也可以在一定程度提高...另外就是注意词汇、句式的变换。我自身水平有限，知道的就这么多了，希望对楼主有用

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3# choifore
感谢楼上， 我看了你说的那本书了很有用啊，还有你的建议也很好，谢谢！！！

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Agree or disagree? If children want to do well in school, parents should limit the hours of watching TV programs or movies.

观点：反对
1.看电视不是影响在校表现的主要原因
2.看电视可以给予孩子很多知识
3.孩子学习紧张需要放松

In modern life, a growing number of children tend to spend their free time watching TV programs or movies. Some people hold the point that children should be limited on doing these in order to improve their performance in school. However, will it be a good solution to solve this problem? I’m afraid the answer is totally not.

If we make a further consideration about the problem, we’ll easily find that there is no certain cause and effect relationship between the televisions and the bad performance. Some children who study well in school, they do like watching TV and movies. It is possible that they have good study methods which can help them understand and think more efficiently, while others don’t. Also, some children do really bad jobs simply because they have no interest in study. Obviously their bad performance has nothing to do with the televisions.

In addition, not only lots of entertainment could the television bring us, it could also provides us with large amount of knowledge. TV programs related to science, history or art, they can both broaden the children’s eyes and inspire them by introducing various experiments, background or masterpieces. Not everything could be learned in school or from the parents. Children should get more approaches to learn about their society and develop their own thought. In this sense, television is really good media to give children information about the outside world.

Last but not least, parents should realize that most children has got tired with their busy studies already. They need some relax instead of being exhausted. In China, most students spend more than eight hours at school, concentrating on different subjects. Though their study or performance should be the priority to some extent, students could never be the working machine. Proper rest contributes to both metal and physical health. On the contrary, the limit of entertainment will only bore the children with the endless studies.

To sum up, no evidence shows a certain connection between children’s performance and watching TV. Moreover, children should take advantages of the benefits that television bring us rather that lose themselves in various programs.