【9.28复议求助，欢迎拍砖】综合写作杯具了

jamneeUID: 2584226

103=30+27+S24+W22

09年8月考过一次，102=28+27+S23+W24，这两年间欧洲交换过半年，考过GMAT和GRE，所以对S和W的期望会高一些，对这个分数有些失望...对综合写作尤其失望...


Speaking：

两次对比：
09年Speaking：Fair Fair Fair = 23
11年Speaking：Fair Good Good = 24

这次的Task2本人卡壳了，最后大概10秒钟的时间是空白，加上T1声音颤抖，中间还歇了两秒平复心情，所以Fair完全可以接受，但问题是为什么后面T3-T6有了质的飞跃却只多了1分...莫非是因为T2得了一个巨低巨低的分？不知道复议有没有希望？（虽然对申请无大碍只是有一丝不甘心...请大家泼我冷水！！！！）



Writing：

两次对比：
09年Writing：Fair Good = 24
11年Writing：Fair Good = 22

综合写作09年那一次拿了Fair就已经很不解，感觉自己跟大牛的范文也没差多少啊...这一次是照着一个29分大牛的范文准备的，而且考场上时间还有多的。我把考前习作贴出来大家看看有没有什么问题（两次都败在integrated 上让我隐约觉得是自己总结的套路很有问题），我猜想可能是听漏了点吧，如果是的话，大家帮我看多少篇习作也没有用...

TPO6 timed, 296 words



Providing a series of reasons, the professor casts doubt on the idea in the passage that the on line encyclopedias are not as valuable as the traditional ones.



First, the professor points out that the errors made in the on line encyclopedia are not severe enough to affect their usefulness, and traditional ones are never close to perfect either. While the passage states that on line contents are edited by users who lack academic credentials and are less accurate than those in traditional pedias, the professor thinks right the opposite. The on line pedias are easy to be corrected, while the traditional ones usually contain errors that can only be reversed when revised.



Second, the professor addresses that the hacking should not be a problem, which contradicts the point made in the passage that the contents can be easily fabricated or deleted by unscrupulous users or hackers. She provides two strategies that can be used to make protect crucial on line contents. The first is a format of texts that will ensure the security of the centrally important texts in the on line pedias. The second is to hire special editors, who are exclusively entitled to the operations of editing or deleting.



Finally, the lecturer asserts that the passage author's accusation that the on line pedias tend to neglect the important while focus on the trivial is not true. She argues that with unlimited space on line, the pedias' emphasis is decided by the users' communal interests and the consequent diversity of the contents is actually the strongest feature of on line pedias.



With all three points supported by strong evidence and a rigorous line of reasoning, the professor attacked the passage and concluded that on line encyclopedias are more effective than traditional ones.






最后的问题：复议作文吗？口语（有任何人）推荐复议吗？



（其实这个分数申我想去的program都够用了。写作22不是大问题，我申的专业要写无数的writing sample。还有面试也能证明口语交流无碍。只是个别希望渺茫的top school会达不到吧... 还有爸妈真的很希望能上110（乃们太望子成龙了），我自己也希望能上105...一切都是虚荣心，虚荣心啊！！！大家狠拍我吧！！！！！）

n_buonaparteUID: 2753409

我觉得写作根本没必要复议。。也没啥用。除非你是学文科的

jamneeUID: 2584226

2# n_buonaparte

......电影制片算不算文科...？我也不清楚...

n_buonaparteUID: 2753409

3# jamnee 好高级啊！！！你先问问学校吧~制片也不是写剧本的吧？应该写作不会太纠结的

jamneeUID: 2584226

4# n_buonaparte

制片啥都要写，角色设定，故事大纲，拍摄日程啥的...读书的时候啥都要学，要写剧本，影史研究、视听语言分析之类也有很多论文要写...
不过还是想暂时不纠结复议了，过线即可。面子嘛，不值钱~
除非有学校跟我说，这位同学啊，以你22的写作，我们是不是要担心你赶剧本的功力？那我立马复议。


大家有任何建议欢迎回复，LZ很容易动摇的！

n_buonaparteUID: 2753409

5# jamnee 恩 还是问问学校靠谱

appairUID: 2247055

既然分數夠用,寫作部分我建議樓主不要複議了,坦率講一句,樓主貼出來的習作我覺得問題還挺大的,倒不是說不通順,但邏輯上比較難follow,感覺似乎跳來跳去的,而且句子間的邏輯關係許多都有點奇怪,如果樓主想要提高寫作部分,最好要練習練習英文的思維方式, think in a logical way. 當然,寫劇本跟普通的academic writing肯定是有差別的,所以我想你要申的學校未必強調這種邏輯性,不妨去問一問

另外,我想說樓主的語法錯誤還是不少的,屬於不是那種一眼就可以看出來,但讀著讀著會突然間卡住,覺得不對,然後需要再從前面開始讀一遍,比方"two strategies that can be used to make protect crucial on line contents"這種,"used to protect"就可以了,make protect是什麼? 再比方說 "the on line pedias tend to neglect the important while focus on the trivial is not true", should be "focusing" instead of "focus", 另外,online不是分開的,我也從來沒見過人家把encylopedia簡稱成pedia (如果他原文裡面就是那麼講的,恕我孤陋寡聞了),再有一個,這個可能是我個人的preference,如果是我寫的話我會寫neglect the important "issues" while focusing on the trivial "things",個人覺得這麼看上去比較正式;又比如說,我從來不會寫the passage author, 而會用the author of the passage,至於其他的,樓主可以自己去體會一下,口語跟寫作其實分別很大的,如果想要提高寫作,還是需要多讀些書的

至於口語麼,6個good也有28,29的,可見每道題都有個精確的分數,等級一樣不代表分數一樣,可能是你之前的fair是fair中最高的等級,而這次的的good卻是good中最低的等級,如果那樣的話兩者相差其實不太多,我朋友5個good一個fair,最後拿了26分,樓主可以依次推理一下,4個good 2個fair,24分也不是不合理的分數,如果樓主對後面幾題非常自信的話那也可以去複議一下,不過我覺得未必會有提高,不妨多放點心思在ws跟interview上

jamneeUID: 2584226

除了"make protect"很确定是改句型后漏删之外，其他的真是水平问题，多谢指点！
顿时感到自己弱爆了...还是不要用复议投机取巧的好啊

7# appair