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发表于 2003-8-13 23:06:16 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
issue 41 such nonmainstream area of inqury as astrology, fortune-telling, psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream sciences.

I strongly disagree with the speaker's statement that those so-called nonmainstream area inqury can do its work on behalf of humans at any rate. In my point of view, if such pseudoscences as astrology, fortune-telling, psychic and paranormal pursuits play a role in the human lives, then it must be a distructive one, so it is our responsbility to fight against them.

First of all, the speaker has wrongly put these superstitions that appear in the opposite site of sciences in the position parelleling to that of mainsream sciences. According the statement of the arguer, it seems to me that he has characterized superstition as a complement of science. However, since the history of human society, man has consistently been going along a endless war against superstitions. In a word, superstitionists turn to some inscrutable supernatural forces instead of rational methods that sciences seek.

One main allegation of some people is that they can get pleasure out of these practices. However, if solace and comfort are how we judge the worth of something, then consider that tobacco brings solace and comfort to smokers, alcohol brings it to drinkers, and drugs brings it to addicts, and as such, superstition can do great harm to those who seek pleasure from it. For example, those who believe in magical methods of preventing and curing diseases often do not turn to proper methods till it is too late; those who blieve that disasters are results of some invisible power do not search for raional ways of preventing and ameliorating their effects.

Also, many strongly argue that it is nevertheless their body, their health, and their life to do with as they wishes, not someone else's. Then, what of the superstition believers who lure others to give themselves up to the supernatural forces; what of those paranoiacs who insist on helping people to release from suffering by killing them. Clearly, it is not only those practitioner's body, health, and life involed.

In sum, it is obvious that such superstitious area of inqury can perform serious damages to both the practitioners and other people. As a result, we have a call to carry out a war against it and never give up.
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发表于 2003-8-14 00:25:49 |只看该作者
issue 41 such nonmainstream area of inqury as astrology, fortune-telling, psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream sciences.

I strongly disagree with the speaker's statement that those so-called nonmainstream area inqury can do its work on behalf of humans at any rate. In my point of view, if such pseudoscences as astrology, fortune-telling, psychic and paranormal pursuits play a role in the human lives, then it must be a distructive one, so it is our responsbility to fight against them.第一次看到这么写的。
麻烦你自己方到word上看看,很多拼写错误哟。

First of all, the speaker has wrongly put these superstitions that appear in the opposite site of sciences in the position parelleling to that of mainsream sciences. According the statement of the arguer, it seems to me that he has characterized superstition as a complement of science. However, since the history of human society, (历史怎么证明?)man has consistently been going along a endless war against superstitions.(具体怎么说,你只是空洞的说迷信和科学两不相立,为什么呢?) In a word, superstitionists turn to some inscrutable supernatural forces instead of rational methods that sciences seek.记住,issue是你要说服别人(用逻辑或例子),而不是你说一些你的assumption来给别人听的。

One main allegation of some people is that they can get pleasure out of these practices. However, if solace and comfort are how we judge the worth of something, then consider that tobacco brings solace and comfort to smokers, alcohol brings it to drinkers, and drugs brings it to addicts, and as such, superstition can do great harm to those who seek pleasure from it. For example, those who believe in magical methods of preventing and curing diseases often do not turn to proper methods till it is too late; those who blieve that disasters are results of some invisible power do not search for raional ways of preventing and ameliorating their effects.这段好比较,但是类比是不是有点问题?迷信和鸦片以及酒精很新鲜,呵呵。哦,你前面如果加一个“带来一时间的solace”的话会更好,毕竟迷信只是暂时解决人们表面的认识问题。

Also, many strongly argue that it is nevertheless their body, their health, and their life to do with as they wishes, not someone else's. Then, what of the superstition believers who lure others to give themselves up to the supernatural forces;(这是个观点啊,神话迷信使人们停止探索自然,因为它们使人们觉得一切都是超自然的力的作用)what of those paranoiacs who insist on helping people to release from suffering by killing them. Clearly, it is not only those practitioner's body, health, and life involed.这段我没看懂,是不是有问题??

In sum, it is obvious that such superstitious area of inqury can perform serious damages to both the practitioners and other people. As a result, we have a call to carry out a war against it and never give up.
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发表于 2003-8-14 01:01:44 |只看该作者
I strongly disagree with the speaker's statement that those so-called nonmainstream area inqury can do its work on behalf of humans at any rate. In my point of view, if such pseudoscences as astrology, fortune-telling, psychic and paranormal pursuits play a role in the human lives, then it must be a distructive one, so it is our responsbility to fight against them.你不同意就不同意吧,没有必要fight against them

First of all, the speaker has wrongly put these superstitions that appear in the opposite site of sciences in the position parelleling to that of mainsream sciences. According the statement of the arguer, it seems to me that he has characterized superstition as a complement of science. However, since the history of human society(病句吧?), man has consistently been going along a endless war against superstitions. In a word, superstitionists turn to some inscrutable supernatural forces instead of rational methods that sciences seek.你只说了how但是没有解释why论证不到位

One main allegation of some people is that they can get pleasure out of these practices. However, if solace and comfort are how we judge the worth of something, then consider that tobacco brings solace and comfort to smokers, alcohol brings it to drinkers, and drugs brings it to addicts, and as such, superstition can do great harm to those who seek pleasure from it. For example, those who believe in magical methods of preventing and curing diseases often do not turn to proper methods till it is too late; those who blieve that disasters are results of some invisible power do not search for raional ways of preventing and ameliorating their effects.这段还可以

Also, many(many 什么?) strongly argue that it is nevertheless(什么意思) their body, their health, and their life to do with as they wishes, not someone else's. Then, what of the superstition believers who lure others to give themselves up to the supernatural forces; what of those paranoiacs who insist on helping people to release from suffering by killing them. Clearly, it is not only those practitioner's body, health, and life involed.还是太简单,和第2段一样的问题

In sum, it is obvious that such superstitious area of inqury can perform serious damages to both the practitioners and other people. As a result, we have a call to carry out a war against it and never give up.
字数不够,而且错别字很多,论证方面总感觉就没有说什么只是交代了一下情况没有分析原因,
语言方面……我有很多没看明白,不知道是你的问题还是我的问题,呵呵
似这山河如墨,只是无眠……

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发表于 2003-8-14 23:15:13 |只看该作者
谢谢各位大虾, 我忘了在word里面改一下,不好意思,我现在略微作了一下改动.
I strongly disagree with the speaker's statement that those so-called nonmainstream areas of inquiry can do its work on behalf of humans at any rate. In my point of view, if such pseudo-sciences as astrology, fortune-telling, psychic and paranormal pursuits play a role in the human lives.

First of all, the speaker has wrongly put these superstitions that appear in the opposite site of sciences in the position paralleling to that of mainstream sciences. According the statement of the arguer, it seems to me that he has characterized superstition as a complement of science. However, during the history of human society, man has consistently been going along an endless war against superstitions. Superstition tends to prevent truth and realty from people while science wants to reveal them to the public. In a word, superstitions turn to some inscrutable supernatural forces instead of rational methods that sciences seek. (是太空洞了,我也想找个例子,但我实在想不出来)

One main allegation of some people is that they can get pleasure out of these practices. However, if solace and comfort are how we judge the worth of something, then consider that tobacco brings solace and comfort to smokers, alcohol brings it to drinkers, and drugs brings it to addicts, and as such, superstition can do great harm to those who seek pleasure from it. For example, those who believe in magical methods of preventing and curing diseases often do not turn to proper methods till it is too late; those who believe that disasters are results of some invisible power do not search for rational ways of preventing and ameliorating their effects.

Also, many may strongly argue that it is nevertheless their own bodies, their own health, and their own lives to do with, as they wish, not someone else's. Who are we to be ‘big brother’ to condemn their way of life. Then, what of the superstition believers who lure others to give themselves up to the supernatural forces? What of those paranoiacs who insist on helping people to release from suffering by killing them? Clearly, it is not merely the practitioner's body, health, and life involved. (这一段可能有点模糊, 我想表达的是不仅他们自己受到伤害)

In sum, it is obvious that such superstitious area of inquiry can perform serious damages to both the practitioners and other people. As a result, we have a call to carry out a war against it and never give up.

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