第一次写大作文，希望牛人们指点下，小女子谢谢了

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题目：An increasing number of students choose to go to another country for their higher education. Do you think the benefits outweigh the problems associated with it?

At present, with the development of our country, the number of people who plan to continue their education abroad is increasingly. Some individuals agree with it, but others cast doubt on it. Personally, I believe that it may be a wise choice.

As we know, students can benefit a lot from studying abroad. Specifically, in this way, they can broaden their horizons through visiting some historical places of other nations and communicating with some native residents. Furthermore, by doing this, these young men can synthesis the western countries’ cultures with their own country’s culture. For instance, if a boy can enter into a famous university in the UK, he may be affected by the culture of Britain and then he can find a proper junction of these two cultures. Last but not least, the experience of studying abroad can help them get pretty jobs more easily than others. Although the capacity plays a significant role in searching for an occupation, the diploma is also very important, which can let the employers know that they got a excellent education background.

Admittedly, there are some disadvantages of this. The main reason is that it may cost a great deal of money, and many parents cannot afford this because of their low salaries. For example, I have a friend named Wayne, who performed very good at his major and when he was a senior student, he received an offer of Standford Universiy. In order to support him to make his dream come true, his parents selled their house since they were both laid-off workers. In addition to this, in some cases, choosing to go to other country for their high education has a detrimental influence. Specifically, some students are too young to tackle some emergency things.

To sum up, I assert that studying abroad is a excellent choice for those who have become adults. But, for some young students, it should be considered carefully.

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5.5 部分跑题
请问用了谁的模版？

jxaa028377UID: 2999887

先谢过了，但为什么只有5.5呢？还有请问哪里跑题了？我没有用模板哦 2# bqiana

jxaa028377UID: 2999887

我又改了下，麻烦大家再看看哈。。。


题目：An increasing number of students choose to go to another country for their higher education. Do you think the benefits outweigh the problems associated with it?

At present, with the development of our country, the number of people who plan to continue their education abroad is increasing. Some individuals agree with it, but others cast doubt on it. Personally, I believe that it may be a wise choice.

As we know, students can benefit a lot from studying abroad. Specifically, in this way, they can broaden their horizons. This is due to the fact that they can visit some historical places of other nations and communicating with some native residents. Furthermore, by doing this, these young men can synthesis the other countries’ cultures with their own countries’ cultures. For instance, if a boy can enter into a famous university in the UK, he may be affected by the culture of Britain and then he can find a proper junction of these two cultures. Last but not least, the experience of studying abroad can help them get pretty jobs more easily than others. Although the capacity plays a significant role in searching for an occupation, the diploma is also very important, which can let the employers know that they got excellent education backgrounds.

Admittedly, there are some weaknesses of this. The main reason is that it may cost a great deal of money, and many parents cannot afford the tuitions because of their low salaries, which means they need to sell their own houses to support their children to complete their studies. In addition to this, in some cases, choosing to go to other country for their high education has a detrimental influence upon these youngsters. Specifically, some students are too young to tackle some emergency things.

To sum up, I assert that studying abroad is a excellent decision for those who have become adults, but, for some adolescents, it should be considered carefully.

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5.5 还是跑题
你平时看了什么范文？

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请问我那个地方跑题了呢？不跑题的话几分呢？
5# bqiana

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不跑题的话，运气好是6分