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[优秀习作] issue136,就是缺少选择的情况很少的那道题,大家帮我看看能得3分吗?多谢多谢 [复制链接]

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发表于 2003-8-16 17:20:37 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
136."the absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare."

It is fraught with choice in our modern life. You select which shirt or skirt to put on; you determine how to go to work; you choose what kind of pen to use; you also tell yourself whether to take the GRE test.

As far as I am concerned, it is the rapid development of the society that gives us more and more chances of choice. For the reason of absence of choice is the restraint of the conditions. For instance, in the era that there is no any vehicle, the people can only use their foot to some place, while today people can choose take plane, train, ship or on foot to where they want to arrive. With the time going on, we will have more and more chances to choose what we want.

As the choice increasing, many people are afraid of choosing especially in important things. They are easy to regret what they consider to be wrong choice. They regret why choose another at that time. In my opinion, one's choice embodies and depends on his/her characters. Just like some people like red and some people like blue, this must affect their choice when they decide which shirt to buy. One's characters decide which one to choose almost in every thing, whether it is important or unimportant. Even if you choose another which does not fit your characters one time, you will unconsciously choose back which will lead to the same result in another choice.

In conclusion, the absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare. Nevertheless, the people's choice will not affect their destinies largely. After all, it is the characters not the choice that decide one's destiny. So, choose what you like, in spite of which choice, it is your own choice.
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发表于 2003-8-16 20:30:15 |只看该作者
因为我打字太慢,而且思路不是很连贯,所以只写了300字,估计考场上也就这水平了:(
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发表于 2003-8-16 20:40:02 |只看该作者
呵呵,总之的一贯主张是可以牺牲文章的文采,但一定要有清晰合理的逻辑层次。我觉得你文笔很不错,但可能是过分重视语言,思路和观点就稍显模糊。

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发表于 2003-8-16 20:48:31 |只看该作者
语言是不错咯,立意上太浅了些。

以前有人写过讨论过,你可以看看https://bbs.gter.net:8080/bbs/sho ... t=absence+of+choice
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发表于 2003-8-16 20:54:25 |只看该作者
我感觉GRE主要看内容 不是结构 因为有篇6分范文连ETS都说那篇文章没写完
这可能和托付不一样吧 毕竟是研究生入学考试 要考你的思维 所以重点在论证 也就是论据 我认为 比如 EXAMPLES STATISTICS CITING ATUHORITIES 等等 不知道我的 见解对不对
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RE: issue136,就是缺少选择的情况很少的那道题,大家帮我看看能得3分吗?多谢多谢 [修改]

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issue136,就是缺少选择的情况很少的那道题,大家帮我看看能得3分吗?多谢多谢
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