issue113

qhywUID: 136716

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113. “It is through indentification with social groups that we define ourselves”.
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I strongly agree with the claim that it is through indentification with social groups that we define ourselves. For without consideration of relative groups we can hardly give an accurate location for us on progress or backwardness, qualified or unqualified, rich or poverity and the like..

Firstly,Identifying with social groups is an absolute necessary way for us to define ourselves. It is unconvinced and useless for an individual to give himself a remark without checking the social groups. When a graduate claim himself excellent before an employer, he has to provide some information such as which university he comes from, how many students are there in his class and what is his degree position between them and the like. All these information is much important for a company to make the final decision wheather he will be employed or not. Similarly, when a company wants to absorb the talents, it is routine to show people the salary, the working and living environment, the warfare of company. But only when people see the prominent advantages over other companies can talents really show their intrests on it. All these indicate that the way by indentifying with social groups to define a person or a corporation or even a country have always been adopted and proved to be persuadable.

Moreover, it is an effective and helpful way for an individual to locate himself. Otherwise it is easy for an individual to overestimate or underestimate his true ability. Through scrutinize the social groups he can more clearly understand himself than ever and accordingly make a reasonable plan. For the country China, she classified herself as an developing country just after a large number of analysis the whole world’s economic situation and make sure the difference between China and the the developed country. Only through this objective location can one country establish the appropriate policy for further development. In addition, Common sense tells us that a person hardly finds his/her defects or shortcomings until others thoughts, ideas or suggestion are taken into account. Many people may have the experience that it is difficult to find a seemly very easy mistake even after several days’s deep consideration, but immediately be solved after communation with others or refer to their solution. As a matter of fact, it is a good way to realize breakthrough when confronting difficulties.

However, people should not emphasis too much on the position in the social groups for its incomplete and changeable feature. A developing country can not be always be a developing coutry if she insists on the development of economy. A company can not be always top 10 if it no longer pays attention to the innovation of technology. A person can not be always be excellent or an forever victory if he is indulged in achievement instead of improves himself time to time. In addition,sometimes some inforatation from the social groups is not complete or misleading. Only a right  and helthy attitute towards the positions can be beneficial for a person.

Sum up, indentifying with social groups provides an accurate and objective and persuadable way for a person to better define himself, at the same time contributes to his defects’s discovery. But moderate degree should be controled. Otherwise we will be restrained by this comments instead of our better development.


如果是你会怎么考虑呢？虽然快考试了，却还在苦苦的摸索中。。。。。。

blake_wangUID: 9871

1,"on progress or backwardness, qualified or unqualified" seems irrelevant with social identity. why did you mention them?

feier521UID: 109747

I strongly agree with the claim that it is through indentification with social groups that we define ourselves. For without consideration of relative groups we can hardly give an accurate location for us on progress or backwardness, qualified or unqualified, rich or poverity（？）(并列的不对) and the like.

Firstly, identifying with social groups is an absolute necessary way for us to define ourselves. It is unconvinced and useless for an individual to give himself a remark without checking the social groups. When a graduate claim himself excellent before an employer, he has to provide some information such as which university he comes from, how many students are there in his class and what is his (degree删掉) position between(among) them and the like. All these information is much important for a company to make the final decision wheather（whether） he will be employed or not. Similarly, when a company wants to absorb the talents, it is routine（natural如何？） to show people the salary, the working and living environment, the warfare of company. But only when (people see改为seeing如何？) the prominent advantages over other companies can talents really show their intrests（？） on it. All these indicate that the way by indentifying with social groups to define a person or a corporation or even a country have always been adopted and proved to be persuadable.

Moreover, it is an effective and helpful way for an individual to locate himself. Otherwise it is easy for an individual to overestimate or underestimate his true ability. Through scrutinize（scrutinizing） the social groups he can more clearly understand himself than ever and accordingly make a reasonable plan. For the country China, she classified herself as an（？） developing country just after a large number of analysis（复数数analyses把） the whole world’s economic situation and make sure the difference between China and the developed country. Only through this objective location can one country establish the appropriate policy for further development. In addition, Common sense tells us that a person hardly finds his/her defects or shortcomings until others（’） thoughts, ideas or suggestion are taken into account. Many people may have the experience that it is difficult to find a seemly very(这么多副词？删掉一个) easy mistake even after several days’s（？） deep consideration, but immediately be solved after communation（？） with others or refer to their solution. As a matter of fact, it（指代不清） is a good way to realize breakthrough when confronting difficulties.（国家也可以举例嘛？感觉题目说的是人）

However, people should not emphasis too much on the position in the social groups for its incomplete and changeable feature. A developing country can not be always be（？） a developing coutry（？） if she insists on the development of economy. A company can not be always top 10 if it no longer pays attention to the innovation of technology. A person can not be always be（？） excellent or an forever victory if he is indulged in achievement instead of improves（improving） himself time to time. In addition, sometimes some inforatation（？information？） from the social groups is not complete or misleading. Only a right and helthy attitute （healthy attitude）towards the positions can be beneficial for a person.

（To）Sum up, indentifying with social groups provides an accurate and objective and persuadable way for a person to better define himself, at the same time contributes to his defects’s（？） discovery. But moderate degree should be controled（？）. Otherwise we will be restrained by this comments instead of our better development.
总体来说写的不错，思路清晰。
但是很多拼写错误，
？表示拼写错误
identify 而不是 indentify
呼…..累死偶了，仅有的中午的一段时间，改了好多文章，嘿嘿，感动吧（煽煽情）：）

qhywUID: 136716

太感动了，feier,不知如何表达谢意,
bow!

对了，你提到举国家的例子合适否的问题，我写的时候有考虑，主要是想把从它个人定位引申到一个公司，甚至一个国家。我也不知道这样是否合适？请大家指教！

还有blake_wang说得对，第一段第二句确实是个败笔！

qhywUID: 136716

大家写issue一般如何起笔？
我每次写第一段除了亮明观点就不知该说什么了，总是花去很长的时间。有谁帮帮我能在最短的时间内写一个不错的开头，谢谢先！

feier521UID: 109747

题目说的是we 在 social  groups里 的，说国家感觉有点不大合适。

唉！看老外280篇的开头，我现在也学会了，一开头也就是I agree with the speaker 了，真是没有新意。同样苦恼ing
不管了，反正想出好的开头要浪费时间，干脆就 I agree 算了，呵呵

qhyw MM 好像快考了，你的文章是不是限时的？

qhywUID: 136716

还没有限时啊，郁闷ing!

对了，agree之后该怎么写呢，好多人第一段就写好长的，佩服阿

feier521UID: 109747

我都是：先让步或者提出一个反对观点，在提出自己的观点，呵呵，也是不长...

9.10 号？我依稀记得？

qhywUID: 136716

这样啊，我要借鉴一下！

你记得时间没错，你早我一天考，没错吧，呵呵
大家都加油阿！

blake_wangUID: 9871

feier521的开头有道理