issue160，公众意见与有效领导，45min（窃喜ing）

imongUID: 140258

按照上午的思路，不管三七二十一先写最好写的，抢在45min之前做完了。

160"The most essential quality of an effective leader is the ability to remain consistently committed to particular principles and objectives. Any leader who is quickly and easily influenced by shifts in popular opinion will accomplish little."

I agree with the speaker on the claim that the very essence of being an effective leader is to remain consistently committed to particular principles and objectives. Effective leaders listen to the masses, but they are never easily influenced.

To remain committed to particular principles has been proven of great significance for an effective leader by some well-known examples. For instance, the prosperity in China nowadays, inconceivable in the impoverished past, should be attributed to the resolute execution of Reform and Opening up policy, established by the great leader Deng Xiao Ping. Admittedly ever since its birth, the policy has been consistently questioned and censured, sometimes the consensus even tends to resist since certain degree of social unrest came along. Nevertheless, Deng Xiao Ping always believes that the policy is correct, and problems arise from specific issues like procedures, legislation, propaganda, and so forth. This principle is therefore preserved by his confidence and faith, and the details are gradually perfected so as to meet the needs of the masses. Great changes have taken place in China in the twenty-five years of reforming and the situation has been significantly improved, with the leader's conviction that to reform and open up is the only way to revive China. His effective leadership roots in his conviction, and has resulted into visible feat. Hence, it becomes clear that to hold particular principles is indispensable to ensure effective leadership.

Conversely, leaders quickly and easily influenced by popular opinion will accomplish little, and sometimes they may even bring negative consequences. There is also a concrete example, of the subway construction in China. Right now only three cities in China have urban subway: Beijing, Shanghai, and Guangzhou, all of which are big and somewhat of international importance. In this sense, it comes to some citizens that to own urban subway becomes the demonstration of status, and some urban dwellers petition for subway in their own city. Under the pressure of the masses some twenty cities has applied for permission of subway construction. However, some of these mayors are influenced by fallacious consensus and will possibly do no good to their city by constructing city subway, as the situation reveals in several northern cities. According to the geological conditions, the soil in those cities is incapable of supporting the tunnels. Lack of strength determines that subway construction is impracticable. Besides, a further study in the distinct distribution of underground water showed that the water resource would be endangered if the subway were to be built, since the project will inevitably involve damaging the underground water and consequently the ecosystem. While the mayors easily slides into the fervent mass opinion with obscure objective regardless of the scientific study result, hardly can they be really effective in promoting the local development. The reason is that the opinion of the mass is not always correct and sometimes mere thoughtless but fanatic conjecture, and those leaders who unwisely support these ill proposals with no objective judgment will not be effective at all. Therefore, leaders easily influenced by the public cannot be effective.

In conclusion, to remain committed to particular principles and objectives is the core of being effective leader. A leader is not merited by consistently following the consensus, but by having his/her own convictions.

问题还是有很多的。比如说，整体都有堆砌例子的感觉，说理力度并不够，停留在表面的陈述大于问题的深入讨论。而且例子本身也并不是最贴切的。
有没有什么建设性意见，在照顾时间的同时改善这些方面？

imongUID: 140258

突然想起来paisley说一天不要贴得太多文章，可是上午已经贴过一个了~
那就不要管文章了，考虑一下后边的那个问题咯？

paisleyUID: 64183

你是热心又积极的人物，有特权啊，呵呵，我来给你看看。少等。

paisleyUID: 64183

Reform and Opening up policy这个up的u也要大写的。

into visible feat. in就可以了。不用into的

Conversely, leaders quickly and easily influenced by popular opinion will accomplish little。leaders后面少了先行词who。这里是不能省略的。

Under the pressure of the masses some twenty cities has applied for permission 这个some twenty是什么意思？


Lack of strength determines that subway construction 。。。这里最开头应该加给the。

呵呵，问题你自己都意识到了啊，跟我的想法非常一致呀。我的建议：补充这个观点：1。领导者必须分清楚来自不同利益集团的声音。2。领导者必须有长远的目标和塌实的作风（也就是题目所说的consistently committed to particular principles and objectives），而不是只顾及自己任内的短期政绩。

第一点，其实所谓shifts in popular opinion 不过是某一特定时期可能特定一个利益集团的声音占了上风，而绝对不可能是大众众口一词的心声。如果盲从，就是忽视了其他社会群体的需要，也就是没有仔细分析过到底哪个目标才是最需要解决的，尽管可能目前“声音”不大。

第二点也很明显了。突然改变自己立场和政策的领导者一般都是为了求得自己的政绩而不是全心为了长远利益的。


其实45分钟里能把文章写的这么流畅已经很不容易了，就是不要放纵自己只拣好写的写。以你的思考能力，其实还可以稍微多花点时间列提纲然后多写点理论的

imongUID: 140258

多谢啦，那几处的确是有欠考虑
那个some twenty是要说20多个的意思。（我记得是这样的，？）subway的这个例子是被我稍微tailor了一下的~

关于政绩的看法我倒是一开始没有想到，有道理

对了，那个leaders quickly and easily influenced by popular opinion will accomplish little没有问题吧？influenced做分词修饰leaders，我觉得不用加who啊（或者leaders who are ... influenced...）

blake_wangUID: 9871

1,I agree with the speaker on the claim that the very essence of being an effective leader is to remain consistently committed to particular principles and objectives. ---->unentity of meaning, plus" .....without shifting by different popular opinions."
2,paragraph 2 may have focused more on the shifts of popular opinions which leaders of China have faced.
3, examples of the third paragraph may be more convincing if representatives of the city in which subway has aborted are specified.
4, quite good response.

imongUID: 140258

多谢啦
para2的问题我写到一半的时候就认识到了，但是当时决定草草结束para2（因为主体example都写好了），就没有再往回扣了
subway的例子是前几天看到的，但是被我稍微改了一改，应该说是一个inherent defeciency吧