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Stay Alone When People relax
21st century witnesses the quickening living tempo and prosperity of inventions, however, people become increasing anxious living in the forest of skyscrapers and desire being alone when they relax. Sometimes isolation is capable to cure the anxiousness and promote the healthy condition of modern people.

First and foremost, loneliness make modern people get rip off the competitive situation, relive their body physically and mentally. Nowadays people commonly suffer from the modern social condition which is distributed by many factors such as competitiveness, quickening living tempo, polluted environment. Isolation help raise the peace inside our heart contributing to the relief of our body. When I get home after the total day’s chaos, I prefer to lock the door isolate myself from my colleagues and my job just stopping chasing the frame and profits. I choose to return to the real-me, which make me feel good.

Second, loneliness spare the time for people to do things I like to do. For most of introvert individuals, enjoyed habits by themselves such as reading, writing, playing video games are necessary part of their. They tend to do things, which should be disturb by others. Take my friend for example, he is very introvert person who enjoy reading. He is willing to stay in home spending all today on reading, if someone call on him without making an appointment, he will be upset and uncomfortable.

Last but most important, loneliness help us supervise our mental world and contributes a profound mind. You may observe that many monks of Buddhism will stay still whole day doing nothing and just sit with their eyes closed. This situation, called “ruding” by Chinese people, separates them from the physical world and lead them to observe their inner world. The process does not only build a basement of being peaceful, but also enhances their profound understanding of the Buddha’s intelligence.

In sum, for all the mentioned reasons above, I definitely recommend that for modern people, it is more suitable to enjoy loneliness when they relax.