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发表于 2012-2-18 17:19:19 |只看该作者
2.17 已改完

2.17 棉棉 revised by laozhanguotoefl.doc

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发表于 2012-2-18 19:41:11 |只看该作者
本帖最后由 harrypottuu 于 2012-2-18 19:42 编辑

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today can solve many important problems so they do not need help from the government. Use specific reasons to support your answer.
Some people claim that they could solve many problems so they do not need help from the government. However, I strongly believe that the society would be chaotic without the government, let alone solving problems. When it is peaceful, people live with the(去掉the) comforts of(in) an organized community under the potential supervision by(of) the Government. When huge emergencies like war take place, we individuals would have to(it is) depended on the government to unite the citizens and fight for the interest of all. We can not live out of the government for the following reasons.

Firstly, the nature of government decides that as one cell of the social body, we can't neglect the existence of government for the welfare of our own. The government is organized by (the) people (and) for the people. The tentacles of the government could reach out to various detailed parts of our lives with us being conscious of it
Secondly, the functions of government are aimed to help make people's lives easier. The political function makes sure that the government defends the country, interact with other nations through diplomatic ways, insert stability on the country, and seek democracy. The economic function makes sure each trade is carried out fairly, and make tax and currency policies accordingly. And also the government build up schools for education, institutes for scientist to do experiment, and regulations for sports and entertainments.

Last but not the least, the relation between individuals and the government is interdependence. We need help from the government, and they need our support, feedback, suggestions, (and) aid too.

Like the famous saying from the renowned philosopher (goes), "What is rational is actual and what is actual is rational" ,the g(G)overnment exists for various reasons, and we should learn how to make(take) advantage of it as much as possible.
我感觉楼主写得很不错了,有一些小的地方我觉得可能没有注意,也不知道有没有必要呵呵,还有,我不会改变颜色。。。
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发表于 2012-2-18 19:56:20 |只看该作者
昨天的作文刚刚改好~

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发表于 2012-2-19 15:43:42 |只看该作者
改好啦~期待狠狠回拍~

0219 棉.doc

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