【Daily Writing作文特训小组】Lusota的作业贴

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Lusota今天第一日加入小组，明天正式开始我的100天考T计划，目标110+
5.12日考试，总觉得有点诡异。。。没事儿啦，希望我们都有前所未有的爆发力达到目标，实现梦想~一起加油吧~
Lusota会认真对待每一次的写作的，拿出去年杀6G的毅力，出发吧~

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2012/2/3  第一篇独立作文

题目：
110815NA One of your classmates needs help with some schoolwork. Which solution would you recommend your classmate should do: to ask you for help or to find a professinal tutor for help. Include reasons and details to in your response.

成文：
With the increasingly accelerating of living and learning pace, the issue of finding effective ways to help students solve their variety of problems has been highly discussed among many educators and students themselves. Nowadays, many students prefer asking their classmates directly rather than turning to their tutors. However, asking their peers for help through thinking over the problems in totally different angles may add more benefit sometimes.

In pockets, majority of students are more willing to get direct solutions from their tutors in order to save valuable time for other things. After all, most tutors always know more than us students do, specifically in the results of students' schoolwork. What's more, only by asking tutors for the answer can students obtain the finally official resolution. Once students fail to choose the most effective solution or fail to think out the precise answer, the direct help from tutors is definitely proper way to achieve the goal.

On the contrary to the benefit mentioned above, turning to tutors for help may not always work well enough. There is an old saying goes like that two minds are always better then one. Discussing the problem with classmates or other peers in depth rather than directly turning to tutors may help build students' ability of analyzing and reasoning. After all, Students attend to school are not only to obtain knowledge but also to form a right habit in dealing with problems, in the term of which it may be more practical to solve problems among students.  

Furthermore, sometimes there are conditions that tutors may not give you the proper solutions which even you are not quite with them in any way. Under these circumstances, students may as well think about the problems in different angles and talking with more classmates instead of giving up to tutors directly. For example, many scientists eventually invent valueless things through hard computing and practicing by themselves without knowing the exact results of the problem and often there is no one for them to refer.

In effect, different problems need different ways to solve. The two methods mentioned above can be used properly as follows. Asking tutors for help when you want to ensure the final answers or to search for more useful learning methods, and turning to your classmates or other peers when you are not sure about the results from tutors or just be willing to find more effective solutions to open you minds. In addition, no matter in what way you choose to turn to help, rational analyzing and careful reasoning are of great significance. After all, proper reasoning is the source of creation.

请大家从各种不同的角度、各种不同的语气、各种不同的素材例子、各种论证方式、各种语法。。。方面狂批、建议，这是lusota的第一篇独立作文，谨以此为做往后100天攻坚日子的纪念吧~（虽然考完G有大半年了，但是还是会一不小心就把句子写的又拧巴又烂长，看来还是得多看看范文~）

不过总觉得这个题目有点不太正式，也是jj本身的欠缺吧~

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2月3日的~

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3# wqr619
蹲着的猫，首先lusota要多谢你的各种修改喔~
但是还有一些不太清楚的地方要和你讨论一下啦：
1、我用nowadays引出一般情况下同学们喜欢的一种方式，然后用however转折表示如果同学找我问问题的话我会有如下所列的建议，即：用大众的找同学咨询的方式外加找tutor的方式会更加锦上添花，看情况而定，然后后三段中第一段先肯定一下找tutor的方式，后两段说明有些情况下tutor并不能很好的解决问题或者不能很令你满意，而这时大众化的找同学的方式就很有好处。（主要是视不同问题的情况而定）
2、觉得你改的第三段的衔接句很点睛，谢啦~第三段的那个长句意思是：前半句说明一种情况，即学生上学不仅是为了获得知识，更主要的是为了养成一种良好的解决问题的方法；根据这一点来看，同学们之间互相帮助解决问题就更有实践性了。
3、“Furthermore, sometimes there are conditions that tutors may not give you the proper solutions which even（为啥用even捏？tutor解答不了，甚至你也解答不了？？！！） you are not quite with them in any way.”这句我想说的是学生问tutor的问题有时候他也并不一定清楚，或许他只会给你一个解决的大概想法，还需要你去和其他人一起要讨论研究一下；even后是说有时候可能甚至你自己由于某种原因并不满意tutor 的说法，此时愿意自己再琢磨琢磨等等。
4、最后一段结尾猫给的建议太好了，当时写完就觉得有点小别扭，有点最后才总结的意思，改正啦~
5、总的来说，全文好像是题目确定结构有些异议，希望你能看看我第一点写的是否合理，那就是我全文大概的主旨；另外，我还是不太清楚文章结构怎么样才比较符合T的方式，求指导~

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With the increasingly accelerating of living and learning pace, the issue of finding effective ways to help students solve their variety of problems has been highly discussed among many educators and students themselves. Nowadays, many students prefer asking their classmates directly rather than turning to their tutors. However, (这里转折感觉很勉强啊。前后都是支持 ask peers for help directly, furthermore additionally比较合适吧)asking their peers for help through thinking over the problems in totally different angles may add more benefit sometimes. V
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In pockets, majority of students are more willing to get direct solutions from their tutors in order to save valuable time for other things. After all, most tutors always know more than us students do, specifically in the results of (去掉results of )students' schoolwork. What's more, only by asking tutors for the answer can students obtain the finally official resolution. Once students fail to choose the most effective solution or fail to think out the precise answer, the direct help from tutors is definitely proper way to achieve the goal.. m+ i* t# ^9 t$ {) g7 |

On the contrary to the benefit mentioned above, turning to tutors for help may not always work well enough. There is an old saying goes like that(觉得前面的句子改为as the old saying goes, 这个形式会比较简洁) two minds are always better then (than) one. Discussing the problem with classmates or other peers in depth rather than directly turning to tutors may help build(建议 foster 或cultivate ) students' ability of analyzing and reasoning. After all, Students attend to school are not only to obtain knowledge but also to form a right habit in dealing with problems, in the term of which it(去掉it ,但是还是不太懂lz这个从句想表达啥) may be more practical to solve problems among students.  
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Furthermore, sometimes there are conditions that tutors may not give you the proper solutions which even you are not quite with them in any way.（这句神马意思= =） Under these circumstances, students may as well think about the problems in different angles and talking with more classmates instead of giving up to tutors directly. For example, many scientists eventually invent valueless things through hard computing and practicing by themselves without knowing the exact results of the problem and often there is no one for them to refer.
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In effect, different problems need different ways to solve. The two methods mentioned above can be used properly as follows. Asking tutors for help when you want to ensure the final answers or to search for more useful learning methods, and turning to your classmates or other peers when you are not sure about the results from tutors or just be willing to find more effective solutions to open you minds. In addition, no matter in what way you choose to turn to （for）help, rational analyzing and careful reasoning are of great significance. After all, proper reasoning is the source of creation.
楼主文字很不错，有些句子很精彩~~学习学习~
就是感觉论点不够明确，ets觉得一篇30min 300词的文章能完整阐述一方面的观点已经很不错了，就是说更偏向于一边倒的论点。当然这也是个人观点，仅供参考~一起加油~！！！

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5# sodapeng

谢啦~你说的问题我会注意哒~一起加油吧~

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2012.2.4 独立文


题目：
100619NA

When people need to discuss upsetting or controversial problems with others, some people prefer to use e-mail or text messaging, other like to use telephone or voice messaging. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to support your answer.

成文：
Choosing a proper way for communicating will definitely develop the efficiency of working and studying. Especially as discussing about some upsetting or controversial problems with people, in my view, directly dealing with it through the telephone or voice message is the first choice.

Most importantly, clearly exchanging thoughts about problems with other people is the prerequisite of satisfactory final result. After all, text messages often just present literally meanings, which may lead to misunderstanding of the other side. It's well known that Chinese language is often ambiguous except that people use different tones to present it in different conditions. And thus, plain text message may mislead people sometimes if they use the opposite tone to read it, which will even lead to a terrible result.
What’s more, under some circumstances, people can adjust their strategy in dealing troubles through understanding other’s attitude, by paying attention to his tones and onomatopoeia. So, through the talk both sides may effectively save from a further trouble.

Taking timeliness into consideration, the second reason for my choice is that in dealing with some troublesome things, talking with people on the phone or leaving a voice message can create a more real atmosphere for communicators to talk directly instead of literally communicating than literally message can do. For example, after having expressed your own thought, the other on the phone can have the opportunity to ask your explanation in depth without delay, which will quickly avoid some unnecessary misunderstanding.

In effect, no matter how controversial or upsetting the problem is, if you directly talk with the other side or leave a voice massage first may be of great significance in reducing some unnecessary trouble during the communication. In addition, paying more attention to the other’s attitude in the talk will effectively relieve increasingly activated atmosphere.


欢迎大家狂批、板砖~~~~~~这篇文章的论证写的我都无语了，太尴尬了，觉得可写的不多啊,整300字，实在写不下去了。。。你觉得呢？？

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8# phoebe121

俗话说two minds are better than one. 感谢phoebe的修改建议，这些地方都很值得再推敲，一起加油吧~~~看了你的文后，觉得好像还是text message 的例子能多些，这个telephone我觉得理由好少。。。借鉴啦~

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When people need to discuss upsetting or controversial problems with others, some people prefer to use e-mail or text messaging, other like to use telephone or voice messaging. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to support your answer.

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Choosing a proper way for communicating will definitely develop the efficiency of working and studying. Especially as discussing about some upsetting or controversial problems with people, in my view, directly dealing with it through the telephone or voice message is the first choice.7 Q2 _+ |5 A) D5 T0 b- W. w

Most importantly, clearly exchanging thoughts about problems with other people is the prerequisite of satisfactory final result. After all, text messages often just present literally meanings, which may lead to misunderstanding of the other side--好. It's well known that Chinese language is often ambiguous except that people use different tones to present it in different conditions. And thus, plain text message may mislead people sometimes if they use the opposite tone to read it, which will even lead to a terrible result.-得这个论点狠好哇哈。

What’s more, under some circumstances, people can adjust their strategy in dealing with troubles through understanding other’s attitude, by paying attention to his tones and onomatopoeia. So, through the talk both sides may effectively save from a further trouble.

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Taking timeliness --哇，这个也好啊。。。into consideration, the second reason for my choice is that in dealing with some troublesome things, talking with people on the phone or leaving a voice message can create a more real atmosphere for communicators to talk directly instead of literally communicating than literally message can do. For example, after having expressed your own thought, the other on the phone can have the opportunity to ask your explanation in depth without delay, which will quickly avoid some unnecessary misunderstanding

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In effect, no matter how controversial or upsetting the problem is, if you directly talk with the other side or leave a voice massage first may be of great significance in reducing some unnecessary trouble during the communication. In addition, paying more attention to the other’s attitude in the talk will effectively relieve increasingly activated atmosphere.  X7 e- o0 `2 o; _
我帮楼主分配一下，
1.电话是一种直接的表达方式，有效率的传达感情，比如说语调上，text没有办法表达，造成误会
2.并且通过电话，听话的人，可以根据说话者的语气，给予更准确的安慰
3.只有通过电话，说话的人才能得到最快的安慰。
我觉得楼主的观点都好好。。。感慨啊。。。。看来好多遍，语法上面没有找到什么问题。一起加油啊。
红色-advice
紫色-excellent

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10# lovely_hippo123
多谢lovely的认真总结。。。望以后多多来lusota这里拍砖啊~~~~加油加油~~~

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2.6 独立  
大家不要客气，拍砖吧~

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过目下~~

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2.7
Lusota的独立作文 望批~

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