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这篇作文真不好写。。加油~~

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改的好快啊~~哈哈 ~~谢谢！！我会好好改~~我还没做完别的~~可能得明天或很晚才能改作文~~~我要向你们学习~~感觉你们很快就能完成任务呢！！~:$ 15# iBT20120304

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O(∩_∩)O谢谢猫猫的用心批改 我晚些改你们的~~那个~~没看见分组啊~~ 16# wqr619

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哇。。。还木有写灭~~~

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As modern society develops, people would move to a new town or a new country for many reasons. In this particular case, -->In modern society, people move to a ..... for many reasons....such as...  (这样会不会简练点)they
will meet many new conditions ,such as living  in a new environment ,facing a new culture ,missing their hometown ,being fa" U7 k, u: P" R* j
r away from friends and so on .Among these ,I consider ,it is not reasonable to say it’s not a good thing for people to move to ' Z0 O4 Y# F3 }
a new town or a new country for losing their friends可以更简单的概括.3 z" q8 c0 x/ J6 H* _+ U可以
First of all, people move on to a new place重复太多次 可以尝试换同意词组 may because they need to go out for a higher quality education or for a better job.
Graduated from high school or collages, a great many students go a long way to pursue their dreams.  So for many people, % `9 |5 R7 X. }" _1 \" v
personal development or a better offer is extremely significant. Many elements decide whether it is good or not for people to
move to a new place so it ‘s not wise to judge it only by losing friends. 毕业生在原居住地没有找到合适的工作。。。。 例子内容匮乏

Additionally, real friend stories never have endings. Distance does not matter for real friends because they treat each other
by their hearts.If one moves out to a new place, the others can phone him or send e-mails. Via so many modern ways, distance
is no longer the obstacle between real friends. For this reason, moving to a new town or a new country, they will not lose their0 q# R+ X; H  d! A" Y2 V' [
real friends.2 {! I$ s1 b: o  }
Last but not least, removing to a new place, people can make many new friends. In the new environment, people need to have
new friends to help themselves to quickly integrate new surroundings. So they won’t lack friends.
In a word, we can’t estimate arbitrary only by losing friends and real friends can not be separated only by distance. For this! J7 S1 X# V6 F
reason, it’s not completely to think over the benefits of moving to a new place only by losing friends.

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2月20日 独立作文

laozhanguotoeflUID: 3246339

2.20 已改好

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2月20日 110211NA Do you agree or disagree with the followingstatement? Parents should allow their children to make mistakes and let them learnfrom their own mistakes.

As the modern society developed considerably rapidly, 75% Chinese families haveonly a child, which makes a phenomenon（
，）that parents always think all the things for their “baby”.Some people hold the view that people should teach their children hand byhand（感觉很形象，喜欢） for fear that their childrenwould make mistakes because children now are the red apples in the eyes of theirfamily.
（这个比喻感觉挺好的，是自己写的还是有这种说法？）On the contrary, someconsist that people should allow their children to make mistakes and let themlearn from their own mistakes. I totally agree with the second one.

Children’s making （making该去掉吧）small mistakes can makethem far away from the bigger mistakes in the future. Being young, childrenprefer to try everything attractive for them and make many mistakes. In fact,they are understanding their own world by themselves. After making thismistake, he will seldom make it again for he has remembered it. Also, whenfacing the same situation, the children can deal with pretty well and they won’tmake mistakes any more. However, if they were taught hand by hand by theirparents when they are young, they still will be confused when facingdifficulties. Thus, it is fairly necessary for the parents to allow theirchildren to make mistakes and let them （to） learn from their ownmistakes.

The children allowed to make mistakes are usually braver and more independent thanthe others. There’s no doubt that the children with independence will gain success considerable easier than the ones who are accustomed to relying ontheir family. Children who make mistakes often will have a strong mind, a brave heart and a clever brain. From this point, making mistakes may benefit children’sstrong will and their future success.
感觉上面这一段还可以在扩充一下，文章会丰富
We shouldn’t be angry or worried when the childrensometimes make mistakes, instead it is a great virtue for them the（换成to ）understand why they’re wrong and how to do it the next time.In conclude, I am extraordinarily in favor of that parents should allow theirchildren to make mistakes and learn from their own mistakes.

因为我刚接触托福写作，不知道怎么改。不太敢写意见，怕写了不对= =，我的语法也不好，具体是否有错我也不太清楚。我就只是说说我读这个文章的感受。有不对的地方就无视吧，括号里改的内容~
我找不到附件在哪里。不知道为什么复制上来标记的那些颜色都没有了，所以改的地方没有全部标上颜色，有需要的标了。

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谢谢！！你谦虚了，你作文真的很好呢~~ 23# gtldds

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那个是掌上明珠的意思~ 23# gtldds

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恩恩 确实是 我想好了3个观点 但是给自己限时却怎么也写不完 请教一下，怎么能让自己在有限时间里写的多多呢。。。我都无语了~ 22# laozhanguotoefl

yangwanggaussUID: 3251991

已改好，不会传附件。。。。

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22号作文  请狠批  很想知道这几天没写作文 理思路 是否有进步

陶太郎UID: 3066263

整体结构思路都没问题，可以适当注意一下每段内部的论证，我也是经常说着说着就不清楚了……

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嗯~~有时候就有点乱乱了~刚膜拜了你的文章 太精彩了！！ 29# 陶太郎