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发表于 2012-3-6 22:58:03 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
一楼留坑,写得好慢,思路好混乱>_<!!!!!!!!
木有想法而且打字好慢>_<
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3.6 机经(独立) wangqianrius

3.6 110319 do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

Movies and television programs prevail all around the world these days and offer people an easily available way to relax and enjoy themselves. However, I believe that for young people, movies and television programs may lead to more harm than good, as they are always biased in the following three ways.

Firstly, movies and television programs focus mainly on the dark side of life. For young people who have limited life experience, they may think that's how the world really are and thus lose their faith in a loving and friendly world. For example, the news programs reports deception, murder and similar events on a daily basis and this will affect young people's attitude as well as their behavior towards others in a negative way.

Secondly, movies and television programs display violence which seldom happens. Lack of judgment, combined with curiosity, may lead to imitation behavior among young people. According to the news, several kid actually get themselves hurt trying to display some "cool" movie scenes.

What's more, although movies and televisions are very entertaining, most of them ignored the truly beautiful and meaningful things in life. It is commonplace that people who have money or possess power are worshiped in a movie, and this will influence young people behave in a negative way.

One thing to be admitted is that movies and television programs do have their bright side. They broaden our knowledge and add flavor to our life as well. However, one attribute of young people is that they are apt to be influenced by extrinsic factors. With so many negative aspects mentioned before, I agree with the statement that movies and television have more negative effects on young people behave.

写了一个小时才写了280个字,泪奔....
木有想法而且打字好慢>_<

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发表于 2012-3-7 20:26:49 |只看该作者
改好啦~~

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希望以及为了希望所付出的醉生梦死般的努力,才是我们青春存在的意义。

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发表于 2012-3-7 20:44:33 |只看该作者
谢谢sodapeng同学的修改~ 我会努力提高打字速度,扩充例子~

PS. 第一段我本来是想用biased表示电影和电视有偏见,可能中式英语了。
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发表于 2012-3-7 21:05:13 |只看该作者

3.7 机经(独立) wangqianrius

Famous teachers and advanced facilities arethe two indispensable components of first-class schools,but most schools normally don’t have enough funds to acquire both at the same time. So there comes the question: whichshould come first, famous teachers or facilities improvement? According to myknowledge and experience, facilities improvement may be more beneficial for the development of school on the longrun.

While only a small proportionof students can be guided by famous teachers, everyone can benefit fromimprovements of basic facilities, such as airconditioner and water supply system. Take me for example, when I was inmiddle school, classrooms were so cold in winter and it had been extremelydifficult for me and my classmates to concentrate on study. Two years later,our classrooms geared up with air conditioners. That's when classroom became oneof our favorite
places and study becameinteresting for us again in winter.

The advanced laboratory equipments alsoprovide students the opportunity to see and even test some of the mostthrilling experiments in biology, chemistry and physics. Famous teachers may beproficient in conducting these experiments, but how can they do that withoutproper equipments? In fact, researches about memory have shown that compared towhat people are told, they remembers more about what they actually practiced.So when knowledge regarding scientific experiments is under concern, the advancedfacilities are more valuable than famous teachers.

Another reason I favor facilitiesimprovement is that without proper facilities schools would not be able to maintain famous teachers. Famous teachers may comefor higher salaries in a short term, but when the facilities fail to support theirteaching or research plans, they will leave in the end. In fact, excellent facilitieshave been used by many universities to attract famous teachers. There was alsoa tragedy example that when a new founded Japanese university didn't pay attention to its basicfacilities, its faculties left in an increasing pattern in ten years and thatuniversity eventually fallsbehind other universities which are founded at the same time.



Certainly, there are several advantages a school can enjoy by hiringfamous teachers, such as making the school well-known by the population, andattract hardworking students who admire these teachers, but when the budget is tight, which is true for most schools under the financial crisis all around the world currently, aninvestment in facilities may be more effective and have a higherreturn rate. Based on the above arguments, I vote for the opinion that schoolshould pay more attention to improve facilities.
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发表于 2012-3-7 21:05:53 |只看该作者
红色的是各种拼写错误 囧……
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发表于 2012-3-10 18:25:45 |只看该作者
改好了~~lz过目~~

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