关于学校要求学生出国交换的issue，求拍~

月的心灵故乡UID: 3065354

As the development of today's world, the exchange of students between different countries is becoming more and more popular. Obviously there are some advantages for studying abroad, but it does not indicate that universities should require all of their students to do so. And in my point of view, this policy should be based on the student's own intention and reality.

Studying abroad will be very benefitial for students in some degree. First of all, they will have the opportunity to communicate with the students and professors from other countries where education and science can be more developed. They can acknowledge the lattest inventions of science and have the opportunities to listen to the speech given by the most influencing mentors of economic and other social science. What's more, studying abroad can not only have a deeper sight of your own major but also you can broaden your horizon and learn the culture, customs and ideology of other countries. It is the core of studying abroad., as you have a deeper and wider sight of the world.

However, though the policy sounds really great, but there are many problems need to be solved at first. It is a good idea for students to experience more, but the cost of exchanging will also be a great deal. If universities require all of their students to study abroad for a semester, who should pay for that? I do not think all of the university have the ability to afford all of the spending. And if they can not pay for all of it, can students afford that? There are still some students who are not rich enough for even have a trip in the country. What's more, not all of the students want to study abroad and they may have their own arrangements of the four years. When the policy has a conflict with the students own arrangement, who should domain?

And in my opinion, what the universities should do is to mandate the policy in reality and the students' intention. Of course universities should encourage their students to study abroad for a semester but this should not be a requirement. Students should decide whether to study abroad and when and where they want to go. And universities should give a comprehensive information about the exchang programs to help the students make a better choice. And universities should pay for some of the spending and let the students make a choice of the universities they want to go considering the spare spending.

To sum up, though studying abroad is becoming an overwhelming tendency and the students who have the experience of exchanging will seem to have better opportunities for the job hunting later. But as it is becoming a fashion, universities should overcome the fervor of sending but make a better arrangement of the policy and encourage the students rather than require.


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希望大家给出修改意见，谢谢！

chasedream2012UID: 3238888

作文结构安排得不错，
Studying abroad will be very benefitial for students in some degree.  这里的benefitial for 应改为benefitial to，这是固定搭配哦。
They can acknowledge the lattest inventions of science and have the opportunities to listen to the speech given by the most influencing mentors of economic and other social science.这个怎么感觉论证的怪怪的。
It is the core of studying abroad., as you have a deeper and wider sight of the world.有点chinglish了。
后面论证的还行！总体不错！！！
楼主3.31考吗，加油！！！！！！！

shinian1987UID: 2797009

As the development of today's world, the exchange of students between different countries is becoming more and more popular. Obviously there are some advantages for studying abroad, but it does not indicate(mean) that universities should require all of their students to do so. And in my point of view, this policy should be based on the student's own intention and reality.

Studying abroad will be very benefitial for students in some degree. First of all, they will have the opportunity to communicate with the students and professors from other countries where education and science can be more developed(advanced). They can acknowledge(what’s mean?) the lattest inventions of science and have the opportunities to listen to the speech given by the most influencing mentors of economic and other social science. What's more, studying abroad can not only have a deeper sight of your own major but also you can broaden your horizon and learn the culture, customs and ideology of other countries. It is the core of studying abroad. As you have a deeper and wider sight of the world.

However, though the policy sounds really great, but there are many problems need to be solved at first. It is a good idea for students to experience more, but the cost of exchanging will also be a great deal. If universities require all of their students to study abroad for a semester, who should pay for that? I do not think all of the university have the ability to afford all of the spending(cost). And if they cannot pay for all of it, can students afford that? There are still some students who are not rich enough for even have a trip in the country. What's more, not all of the students want to study abroad and they may have their own arrangements of the four years. When the policy has a conflict with the students own arrangement, who should domain(what’s mean?)?

And in my opinion, what the universities should do is to mandate the policy in reality and the students' intention. Of course universities should encourage their students to study abroad for a semester but this should not be a requirement. Students should(could)decide whether to study abroad(or not)and when and where they want to go. And universities should give a comprehensive information about the exchang programs to help the students make a better choice. And universities should pay for some of the spending and let the students make a choice of the universities they want to go considering the spare spending(what’s mean?).

To sum up, though studying abroad is becoming an overwhelming tendency and the students who have the experience of exchanging will seem to have better opportunities for the job hunting later(you’d better make the conclusion base on the examples mentioned above). But as it is becoming a fashion, universities should overcome the fervor of sending but make a better arrangement of the policy and encourage the students rather than require.

这篇文章思路还算清晰，不过基本语法还是存在很多问题，连接词过于单调，基本都是and，but什么的。在其他用词方面也还有很大提升的空间。最后结尾的时候应该要紧扣前文。不要忽然冒出无关的结论。建议LZ适当断句。

月的心灵故乡UID: 3065354

非常感谢详细指导:) 我会认真总结 3# shinian1987

ZTreeUID: 3165682

我的问题是：

如果对方国家不如学生的母国发达，还有没有必要出国？
-对于很多美国学生来说这是个很大的问题，但事实上他们还是去了包括广大第三世界在内的各个国家，这是为什么？你可以说文科学生周游世界是开拓眼界，那么理工科学习高精尖技术的又应不应该出国呢？为什么？

经费的论点和政策建议不错，但是语言表达仍然有提高空间。