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2010/12/11 NADo you agree or disagree with the following statement:
It is more enjoyable to have a job and work long hours for three days in a week than to work shorter hours for five days in a week.

We have entered in an age of rapiddevelopment of technology and economy, people have to face various pressure andchallenge, but we never forget to find a way to enjoy ourselves. For thatreason, some people choose to work long hours for three days in a week, othersprefer to work shorter hours for five days in a week. In my opinion, if we wantto be more enjoyable, we should choose the latter.

An obvious advantage of working shorterhours for five days is that we don't have to deal with tons of business inevery single day; we can divide the workload into five parts, so we can paymore attention on each part. By this way, the task will be finished more efficiently.At the same time, it can really relieve stress.

What's more, there is a phenomenon;people always have a drooping spirit when they come back to work after a longtime weekend. The reason is that they can't maintain themselves in a goodworking order. For example, if you have worked long hours for three days, thenin the rest days of a week, you probably relax yourself completely, and youwill become accustomed to those laid-back atmosphere, as a result, It may takeyou more times to adapt the work.

Last, working shorter hours for fivedays is also good for people to keep a well relationship with others. For onething, people can see each other every day in the work place, so they can knoweach other better, and share their idea together , enabling them to deal withworks more efficiently. For other, people can become good friends, even loversin such situation. That is the reason why office romance happens frequently.

Therefore, it can be conclude that working shorter hoursfor five days a week is the best way to be more enjoyable.

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We have entered in （删in）an age of rapid development of technology and economy, people have to face various pressure andchallenge（单复数）, but we never forget to find a way to enjoy ourselves. For thatreason, some people choose to work long hours for three days in a week, othersprefer to work shorter hours for five days in a week. In my opinion, if we wantto be more enjoyable, we should choose the latter.



An obvious advantage of working shorterhours for five days is that we don't have to deal with tons of business inevery single day; we can divide the workload into five parts, so we can paymore attention on each part. By this way, the task will be finished more efficiently.At the same time, it can really relieve stress.



What's more, there is a phenomenon;people always have a drooping spirit when they come back to work after a longtime weekend. The reason is that they can't maintain themselves in a goodworking order. For example, if you have worked long hours for three days, thenin the rest days of a week, you probably relax yourself completely, and youwill become accustomed to those laid-back atmosphere, as a result, It may takeyou more times to adapt the work.

首先就是人称用的有问题 一会they 一会 we 一会又是you....
看起来好辛苦 两个单词连在一起了，楼主有没有发现
也没有例子支撑，文章会显得空泛



Last, working shorter hours for fivedays is also good for people to keep a well relationship with others. For onething, people can see each other every day in the work place, so they can knoweach other better, and share their idea together , enabling them to deal withworks more efficiently. For other, people can become good friends, even loversin such situation. That is the reason why office romance happens frequently.


Therefore, it can be conclude that working shorter hoursfor five days a week is the best way to be more enjoyable.

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2# 奔跑蜗牛 额····谢谢版主大人了··作文小组 我太笨 加了几次好像都没加上····:L

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楼主可以自己开一个组 参见版面的小组
既能督促自己交作业
也可以在互相批改中进步良多