【daily writing 作业】Arthur2012作文贴

Arthur2012UID: 3275426

3月19日 101211 do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People think it is more enjoyable to work three days a week for long time than work five days a week for shorter time" N' I. ^! k9 a" h  Z  f

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Topic sentence: it is less cheerful to work three days a week for long time than work five days a week for shorter time.

Three supporting idea:
1 Finishing the jobs quickly brings more changes and money and people can enjoy better life.
2 Relative continuing works a week makes higher efficiency.
3 People fail to achieve enough goals to work three days a week

Excellent as it looks at first glance, working three days a week for long time does not help bring joy with greater efficiency in most cases; or it could sail towards the opposite orientation which leads unsuccessful jobs and endless pains.

First and foremost, it is better to finish the job faster in this fast-changing world in order to seize the opportunities and enjoy better life. My professor, Dr.John who graduated in the Peking University which is one of the most famous colleges in China, has led a team to develop a kind of mechanistic model named Wow3. They worked five days a week and finished the model before the deadline. Eventually, the clients were apparently satisfied with their work and gave more attractive orders to the team. If they just worked three days in week, there is no doubt that they would fail to finish the job and won other profitable orders, and they wouldn't have more cheerful and productive life because less income.

In addition, because relative continuing work experience could enhance the efficiency of developers' work instead of troubling them, it is obviously enjoyable to keep long work period during project, such as developing the database management system. Andrew, the best software programmer in my university, had developed a database management system of my school archive. When the project was just started, he only worked three days a week with two other students and enjoyed the soap opera show named Gong which is the most prevalent TV show in those days when he was free. Yet every time they restarted the work on Monday, they found the program upset them and it was too unacquainted to understand after four days without work. Therefore, they should read the code they finished last week at first then developed other work. With the decreasing efficiency of work, Andrew changed the strategy of developing the project. He worked five days a week with project members and restarted the job immediately after the rest of two day. Cheerful and efficient work experience came back and they created a successful database management system.

Last but not least, longer durative job a week make staff feel good because more goals and achievements could be finished a week. Bill Gates has said:" A person is unable to finish a job without passion." When one works three days a week for long time, the end would be hopeless and in the indefinite future. IBM had developed an operating system in the mainframe. At first everyone thought it was a piece of cake and worked less time a week. However, with the increasingly number of bugs and dark future, developers found coding brought badly pain and they could do nothing three days a week. What's more, the longer work time drive the people in the project crazy. Finally the unfinished job became the rubbish.

In a nutshell, with all the dimensions mentioned above incorporated, I strongly veto that it is more cheerful to work three days a week for long time than work five days a week for shorter time.

(513 words)

Thank you!

Arthur2012UID: 3275426

3.20 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? people now are easier to become educated than in the past.

Outline:
1 People like studying more because the stress of life.
2 The security and development of society enables more people to become educated
3 High-tech provides people more effective tools for learning knowledge

When it comes to the education opportunities for people, the debate between the young and the old has come to a vogue. Did people, in every corner of the world, attach much more importance to the education and easily gain access to be educated? As asserted by the last generation; or do human beings enjoy more various and affluent resource in today's life? The young hold. As for me, people actually are easy access to become educated than in the past.

The major reason for my propensity for the dwellers' advantages in education now is an increasingly stress of lives drives people, no matter children and adults, to acquire more knowledge and skill today. To get a better job, employees have to learn second language. To keep pace with the changing-fast society, workers should seize every second to read a lot. To enjoy more colorful life, kids try their best to prepare a variety of test instead of having a job with low income. In a word, intrinsic intention helps people realize the importance of education and choose the life path of being educated.

Another reason why I advocate for more chance to be educated now is the security and development of society enables everyone to become educated. In China, individuals, no matter the poor or the rich, enjoy the opportunity to get education because remarkable economic growth. My grandfather, who had went through the Second World War, said" When he was a child, the chance to become educated was forbidden for poor and war. However, the peace and a grow economy brings the education opportunity to every child now."

Last but no least, high-tech provides inhabitants in this planet more effective tools for learning knowledge from the astronomy to atomy. Have you ever clicked the button of the Google to search the articles which introduce the knowledge you need to finish your homework? Have you ever sent emails to professors in universities to get more authoritative answers of your question which have plagued you for a couple of days? Have you ever contemplated the life without these helpful tools some day? In conclusion, advanced technology enables us to get more resources of knowledge and become educated.

Overall, if there is anyone out there who still doubts that we are making full use of every day to be educated by the aggressive heart, who still wonders that the economic growth is helping the education for us, who still questions that high-tech is making the dream of education come true, this essay is my answer.

(423 words)

Thank you!

FlyingFieUID: 3251779

1# Arthur2012

写得很好，很多地方值得学习，只有些微的改动。

gtlddsUID: 3228712

Excellent as it looks at first glance, working three days a week for long time does not help bring joy with greater efficiency in most cases; or it could sail towards the opposite orientation which leads unsuccessful jobs and endless pains.

First and foremost, it is better to finish the job faster in this fast-changing world in order to seize the opportunities and enjoy better life. My professor, Dr.John who graduated in the Peking University which is one of the most famous colleges in China, has led a team to develop a kind of mechanistic model named Wow3. They worked five days a week and finished the model before the deadline. Eventually, the clients were apparently satisfied with their work and gave more attractive orders to the team. If they just worked three days in week, there is no doubt that they would fail to finish the job and won other profitable orders, and they wouldn't have more cheerful and productive life because less income.
实际上我觉得题目的意思是工作量是一样的，只是工作天数问题。这个例子很详细。
In addition, because relative continuing work experience could enhance the efficiency of developers' work instead of troubling them, it is obviously enjoyable to keep long work period during project, such as developing the database management system. Andrew, the best software programmer in my university, had developed a database management system of my school archive. When the project was just started, he only worked three days a week with two other students and enjoyed the soap opera show named Gong which is the most prevalent TV show in those days when he was free. Yet every time they restarted the work on Monday, they found the program upset them and it was too unacquainted to understand after four days without work. Therefore, they should read the code they finished last week at first then developed other work. With the decreasing efficiency of work, Andrew changed the strategy of developing the project. He worked five days a week with project members and restarted the job immediately after the rest of two day. Cheerful and efficient work experience came back and they created a successful database management system.& C  S" r" H' l" L) c% b% L, m: U
这个例子很好哦，我很喜欢。我也写到这一点了，不过一比你的有这个例子真的很好诶。稍微有点罗嗦可以精简一下。比如看什么节目啊都不用写了。就说他每周工作三天，然后发现很难restart然后改变工作方式，工作效率高了。
Last but not least, longer durative job a week make staff feel good because more goals and achievements could be finished a week. Bill Gates has said:" A person is unable to finish a job without passion." When one works three days a week for long time, the end would be hopeless and in the indefinite future. IBM had developed an operating system in the mainframe. At first everyone thought it was a piece of cake and worked less time a week. However, with the increasingly number of bugs and dark future, developers found coding brought badly pain and they could do nothing three days a week. What's more, the longer work time drive the people in the project crazy. Finally the unfinished job became the rubbish., Z* t5 D0 x' {0 k& x
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In a nutshell, with all the dimensions （这个词这样用对么？如果只看意思好像不太对）mentioned above incorporated, I strongly veto that it is more cheerful to work three days a week for long time than work five days a week for shorter time.
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Thank you!
语法我不太好，所以语法错误没法调啦。不过题目理解可能有问题。我的理解是3天但是每天工作很多，5天每天工作量很少。不过论证真的很好哟~都是关于编程的例子，哈哈。

gtlddsUID: 3228712

希望尽快回改哟https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1335973-3-1.html

猫屎咖啡加冰否UID: 3214093

Excellent as it looks at first glance, working three days a week for long time does not help bring joy with greater efficiency in most cases; or it could sail towards the opposite orientation which leads【to】 unsuccessful jobs and endless pains.! i5 U- b( A, I; F" \2 x& h; {) R
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First and foremost, it is better to finish the job faster in this fast-changing world in order to seize the opportunities and enjoy better life. My professor, Dr.John who graduated in the Peking University which is one of the most famous colleges in China, has led a team to develop a kind of mechanistic model named Wow3. They worked five days a week and finished the model before the deadline. Eventually, the clients were apparently satisfied with their work and gave more attractive orders to the team. If they just worked three days in week, there is no doubt that they would fail to finish the job and won other profitable orders, and they wouldn't have more cheerful and productive life because less income.
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In addition, because relative continuing work experience could enhance the efficiency of developers' work instead of troubling them, it is obviously enjoyable to keep long work period during project, such as developing the database management system. Andrew, the best software programmer in my university, had developed a database management system of my school archive. When the project was just started, he only worked three days a week with two other students and enjoyed the soap opera show named Gong which is the most prevalent TV show in those days when he was free. Yet every time they restarted the work on Monday, they found the program upset them and it was too unacquainted to understand after four days without work. Therefore, they should read the code they finished last week at first then developed other work. With the decreasing efficiency of work, Andrew changed the strategy of developing the project. He worked five days a week with project members and restarted the job immediately after the rest of two day. Cheerful and efficient work experience came back and they created a successful database management system.
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Last but not least, longer durative job a week make staff feel good because more goals and achievements could be finished a week. Bill Gates has said:" A person is unable to finish a job without passion." When one works three days a week for long time, the end would be hopeless and in the indefinite future. IBM had developed an operating system in the mainframe. At first everyone thought it was a piece of cake and worked less time a week. However, with the increasingly number of bugs and dark future, developers found coding brought badly pain and they could do nothing three days a week. What's more, the longer work time drive the people in the project crazy. Finally the unfinished job became the rubbish.* @: a& Q2 s8 X% u. E[[[{{[[[[[{{【【
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In a nutshell, with all the dimensions mentioned above incorporated, I strongly veto【vote】 that it is more cheerful to work three days a week for long time than work five days a week for shorter time.
【第二段跟第三段感觉在论述一个观点】
同学，感觉你的句子要加强。。可以在高级点的词汇互换，还有句式的多样化上面多积累，共勉~

Arthur2012UID: 3275426

3# FlyingFie 十分感谢，辛苦了，我马上回改。

Arthur2012UID: 3275426

5# gtldds 非常感谢，已回改

Arthur2012UID: 3275426

3# FlyingFie 已回改，非常感谢，没想到你改的这么仔细，再次谢了

Arthur2012UID: 3275426

6# 猫屎咖啡加冰否 十分感谢，已回改

FlyingFieUID: 3251779

已改，我把comments 写在附件里了 :victory: 加油！！！

FlyingFieUID: 3251779

从目前来看，写作小组还没有更新作业，我这里有一份2011年北美独立写作部分的寂静，从12月倒序排到1月的。如果你也有时间练笔的话，我们可以从12月份的开始写，一天一个，之后互改。

第一个就是那个"completely honest with your friend" 题目。

写作目录看附件

Arthur2012UID: 3275426

12# FlyingFie 呵呵，不用急，放心，斑竹可能现在比较忙，会回来的，毕竟她也是义务给大家做贡献嘛。可以跟着xydxuyidan(每天学14小时！！)一块写嘛

FlyingFieUID: 3251779

哎，就俺这个写作水平下个月就烤了，怕彻底给烤糊了。。不能有一天不练阿。。你其他几项复习得怎么样？我是哪项都不出彩，跟别人比，人家可能专项突击就好了，我这边却是一个都不能少啊！！！

Arthur2012UID: 3275426

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话题：2010.2.11-parents should allow their children to make mistakes and let them learn from their own mistakes.


"Failure is the mother of success." This was said by people in every corner of the world. Reading the moving stories about celebrity who have overcome the difficulties, witnessing the real narratives about conquering a bunch of problems to reach the success of destination, I can't agree with the adage any more. Therefore, I strongly vote that parents should give opportunities to their kids to make mistakes and allow them to learn from their own mistakes which lead to their mental growth for accepting failure, increasingly knowledge to keep away from the same mistakes and success of their future career.

When it comes to making mistakes, children always are plagued by considerable pressure. If a kid has never made any mistakes just for the reason that the parents don't allow, he or she would break down without parents' help one day because of the advent of failure caused by mistakes. My classmate Linda, a lovely princess in her family, often followed the parents' instruction to do her assignments and finished perfect job. However, a mathematic quiz really hurt her because she didn't pass this exam. She became blue all day and eventually was sent to hospital to cure her mental sickness. In this case, not only did her parents protected her from mistakes, but also stolen her confidence for facing problems.

Another reason I veto the importance of parents' help in this issue is that the same mistakes which adolescents have made might upset them again if they didn't confront and coped with these problem by themselves. Knowledge is always based on personal experience. A juvenile might get injury when he or she ride bike at first time, however it is the indispensable path to acquire this skill. A kid might face a couple of own mistakes of physical experiments, yet the real knowledge is obtained at the same time. A child might want to quit sometimes because mistakes never disappear, but the interests of attaining wisdom would support him or her forever.


Last but not least, mistakes are the teachers who enable children to achieve their career success in the future. My professor, Dr.Jhon who is really skilled at composing poem and prose, was not interested at literary at all when he was a kid. He hated writing anything because it is not exciting like playing football. However, one day he failed to finish his homework, an original poem, so he was unable read his assignment in front of 51 classmates in that morning. Then he felt obliged to learn the basic knowledge of literacy. After three months, he found the beauty of poem and fell love in the world of words. Eventually he becomes the most famous writer in my university. Therefore, that mistake has played a significant role in his career.

In a word, with all the dimensions mentioned above incorporated, I strongly agree parents should be confident about the advantages of experience coming from the mistakes made by their children.

(493 words)

Thank you!