【daily writing 作业】Arthur2012作文贴

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"Failure is the mother of success." This was(用is吧) said by people in every corner of the world. Reading the moving stories about celebrity who have overcome the difficulties, witnessing the real narratives about conquering a bunch of problems to reach the success of destination, I can't agree with the adage any more.（这句话出问题咯，这句的意思是说你不同意啊， 应该是写成I can't agree with the adage more吧~~就是再同意不过的意思） Therefore, I strongly vote that parents should give opportunities to their kids to make mistakes and allow them to learn from their own mistakes which lead to their mental growth for accepting failure, increasingly knowledge to keep away from the same mistakes and success of their future career.
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When it comes to making mistakes, children always are （are always）plagued by considerable pressure. If a kid has never made any mistakes just for the reason that the parents don't allow, he or she would break down without parents' help one day because of the advent of failure caused by mistakes. My classmate Linda, a lovely princess in her family, often followed the parents' instruction to do her assignments and finished perfect job. However, a mathematic quiz really hurt her because she didn't pass this exam. She became blue all day and eventually was sent to hospital to cure her mental sickness. In this case, not only did her parents protected(protect) her from mistakes, but also stolen(steal) her confidence for facing problems(difficulties).
（个人觉得这一段的主旨应该更明确，更早地出现在段首，一句话说明，然后后面慢慢分析，因为米国人的思维就是这样~~段首句一定要干脆明确）
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Another reason I veto the importance of parents' help in this issue is that the same mistakes which adolescents have made might upset them again if they didn't confront and coped with these problem by themselves. Knowledge is always based on personal experience. A juvenile might get injury when he or she ride(rides) bike at first time, however it is the indispensable path to acquire this skill. A kid might face a couple of own mistakes of physical experiments, yet the real knowledge is obtained at the same time. A child might want to quit sometimes because mistakes never disappear, but the interests of attaining wisdom would support him or her forever.

Last but not least, mistakes are the teachers who enable children to achieve their career success in the future. My professor, Dr.Jhon who is really skilled at composing poem and prose, was not interested at literary at all when he was a kid. He hated writing anything because it is not (as)exciting like(like换成as) playing football. However, one day he failed to finish his homework, an original poem, so he was unable（加to） read his assignment in front of 51 classmates in(去掉in) that morning. Then he felt obliged to learn the basic knowledge of literacy. After three months, he found the beauty of poem and fell love in(fell in love with) the world of words. Eventually he becomes the most famous writer in my university. Therefore, that mistake has played a significant role in his career.+ S5 r9 P, z

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In a word, with all the dimensions mentioned above incorporated, I strongly agree parents should be confident about the advantages of experience coming from the mistakes made by their children. 7 i7 K0 K7 Y8 o: Y:
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楼主词汇比较丰富，学习了~帮你改了些小小的语法错误，思路还是很清晰的，一起加油~还有谢谢你的批改，一字一句都对我帮助很大^^

FlyingFieUID: 3251779

已改，个别地方有些表达比较像是直译过去的，lz的遣词造句偶有惊艳，学习了。。

FlyingFieUID: 3251779

非常感谢，批改很认真，你的建议非常好，语法就是俺的si穴，拼了。。
坐等你的美文 。。

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14# FlyingFie 呵呵，那得抓紧时间了，加油，只要每天有进步就行。我四项就阅读不太难看，路还挺远的。

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18# FlyingFie 这个。。。不敢，不敢，写的不被拍死就行了。今天听留学讲座去了，不知有没有时间写，尽量吧。你先写吧，我只要有时间，就帮你改改。加油，4月的也快了，放心，你行的。

FlyingFieUID: 3251779

多谢鼓励. 看写作小组里,你也开始综合写作的练习了. 不知道大家都是哪里下的tpo, 你有模考版或是软件版的吗。不知道为什么，我下的都是没有音频的，悲催了。。求指教。。

对了，你什么时候考？

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3.22 独立 110815NA One of your classmates needs help with some schoolwork. Whichsolution would you recommend your classmate should do: to ask you for help tofind a professional tutor for help. Include reasons and details to in yourresponse.

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21# FlyingFie 呵呵，我是上次考前写的，这次是5月。TPO在寄托，太傻都有网盘下载吧，应该很方便。你的作文，等我吃完饭回来再改了。

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22# Arthur2012
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3.22 独立 110815NA One of your classmates needs help with some schoolwork. Whichsolution would you recommend your classmate should do: to ask you for help tofind a professional tutor for help. Include reasons and details to in yourresponse.

What we have been debating here about theway to find help with some assignments in school will affect the efficiency oflearning for considerable pupils all across the world. This debate over a bunchof schools, colleges or universities is about more than just numbers on a page;it's about more than just a few easy questions. It is about the road to the skyof knowledge what we really want. It is about the truth of skills that webelieve in. And that is what I desire to spend time insisting in the essay.
I, a common student who is hard-working, am the firstchoice for classmates to help them finish schoolwork.

Unlike the out-of-date teaching skillscoming from some old tutors or endless specific terms which we fail to follow,I, the closest friend who gets the same classes with my classmates, enable themto get easily access to the mountain of knowledge. When it comes to schoolworkabout coding programs, I would like to talk with my friends in school about thedifficulties in this task at first , and then teach them the solutions with myreal coding experience about the assignments that the tutor fail (fails) to have. Due to the same mistakes studentsmight make and the same problems pupils might confront, my experience couldplay positive roles in this issue.

In addition, regardless of the region,country, and the distinct dissimilarities among cultures, some tutors are busyforever. They have to teach numerous students, work for hundreds of family (family?不是吧)and drive car from onehouse to another all the time. Therefore it is hard to imagine how much timethey could spend with us about some really easy questions. In the contrary, I,a simple student in the college who have (has)afew chance to rescue the whole world(会以为你拯救地球), have lots of time with my classmates to tackle the problems in thelearning.

Admittedly, because I might not know theexact answers of the questions, my classmates and I have opportunities to thinkby ourselves and discuss carefully. At the same time, some brilliant ideasmight come to life with our hard work. There is no doubt that the professionaltutors know the precise questions, yet they also steal our joy to
find or search(觉得是这个joyof finding or searching) knowledge by our own hands. Asfor mathematic schoolwork, the tutors might tell students only one way to copewith it, but after they discuss with me, we might be able to find two or moreapproaches to get the answers that is more significant in our future life. (展开很好)

In brief, obtaining help from me which ismore convenient and useful and time after time my classmates are satisfied withmy responses.


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24# originalsin 十分感谢！我马上回改。

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23# Arthur2012

寄托，太傻都看了，可能是因为2010年ETS抓版权，几乎都删没了。 于是我就华丽丽的“被“听不见了。。

我待会儿有事要出去，回来会晚。 不过我回来就来看你的文哈。

FlyingFieUID: 3251779

已改，写作有进步，加油。。

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还有，多谢你给的连接，正在下载。辛苦了！！！

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22# Arthur2012 已改，水平有限，仅供参考。怎么添加附件的。。。。

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22# Arthur2012 实在不知道怎么上传附件，可能是权限问题，只能粘上来了。
What we have been debating here about the way to find help with some assignments
in school will affect the efficiency of learning for considerable pupils all across the world. This debate over a bunch of schools, colleges or universities is about more than just numbers on a page; it's about more than just a few easy questions. It is about the road to the sky of knowledge what
we really want(where we really want to go?). It is
about the truth of skills that we believe in. And that is what I desire to spend time insisting in the essay. I, a common student who is hard-working, am the first choice for classmates to help them finish schoolwork.

Unlike the out-of-date teaching skills coming from some old tutors or endless
specific terms which we fail to follow, I, the closest
friend who gets the same
classes with my classmates, enable them to get easily access to the mountain of
knowledge. When it comes to schoolwork about coding programs, I would like to
talk with my friends in school about the difficulties in this task at first , and then teach them the solutions with my real coding experience about the assignments that the tutor fail to have. Due to the same mistakes students might make and the same(similar?) problems
pupils might confront, my experience could play positive roles in this issue.
(similar or even same experience in school assignment is more beneficial to the classmates, compared with the outdated teaching techniques)


In addition, regardless of the region, country, and the distinct dissimilarities
among cultures, some tutors are busy forever. They have to teach numerous students, work for hundreds of family(organizations?)
and drive car from one house(place?)
to another all the time. Therefore it is hard to imagine how much time they
could spend with us about some really easy
questions. In the contrary, I, a simple student in the college who have a few chance to
rescue the whole world, have lots of time with my classmates to tackle the problems in
the learning.(发现很多这种句式的I, ......,有时可以改成as....,I can....纯粹个人建议。。。)
(unlike the busy tutors, I have more time to spend with my classmates)

Admittedly, because I might not know the exact answers of the questions, my classmates and I have opportunities to think by ourselves and discuss carefully. At the same time, some brilliant ideas might
come to life with (觉得这里用with不太好，什么意思不太懂）our hard work. There is no doubt that the professional tutors know the precise questions,
yet they also steal our joy to find or search knowledge by our own hands. As for mathematic schoolwork, the tutors
might tell students only one way to cope with it, but after they discuss with me, we might be able to find two or more approaches to get the answers that is more
significant in our future life.(more significant 是指多出来的approaches吗？)
(opposite to the stiff training of the tutors, we are engaged in solving problems by ourselves.)

In brief, obtaining help from me which
is more convenient and useful and time after time my classmates are satisfied with my responses.
(觉得后半部分总结得怪怪的。。。）


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PS：学到很多东西，感谢楼主。个人水平有限，建议仅供参考。