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发表于 2012-4-9 16:39:35 |显示全部楼层

102# Arthur2012 已改~寫的很好！

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发表于 2012-4-9 20:45:52 |显示全部楼层

102# Arthur2012

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发表于 2012-4-10 19:39:09 |显示全部楼层

谢谢大家的修改，这几天在忙写实验课留下的作业，所以有点忙，我只要有时间一定会回改的。

这是4.7作文的修改总结：

1 the experience with the limited time of famous teachers 改为 the experience with bustling famous teacher
2 坐飞机早上在某地参加会议，下午在另一地参加演讲
之前的表达：fly to one place to attend science meeting in the morning and fly to another city to give a important speech in the afternoon.
改后的表达：fly for a meeting the morning and a speech the same afternoon.
(谢谢秋雨老师，这样确实精简，地道多了)
3 as we all know(不是known)
4 第三段没有时间写就草草结束了，现在重写一遍：

Furthermore, as we all know, celebrated famous teachers, especially respectable professors, are always unavailable for common learners. These teachers enjoy the enviable wealth and fame but meanwhile heavy and burdensome tasks of study drive them work day and night. Therefore it is normal for them to become out of patience and unwilling to answer students’ questions carefully. However, it is not the same when it comes to facilities which never would be impatient with curious and questioning students. Consequently, well-known teachers pale when they are unable to make a win-win choice between heavy work and curious students. An illustrating example is my experience with a computer science professor who taught Database Management System Overview for our class. At first I enjoyed asking him questions which I failed to understand in class, however, two weeks later he had not answered my questions any more because of a new project he had to finish in a month.

5 science meeting 改为academic meeting 更好
6 在组织观点上，这三条，特别是第一条和第三条，其实有重复，还可以向学生生活方面拓展，这一点我真没想到（真心谢谢）

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发表于 2012-4-10 20:43:43 |显示全部楼层

谢谢大家的修改，这几天在忙写实验课留下的作业，所以有点忙，我只要有时间一定会回改的。

这是4.7作文的修改总结：

1 the experience with the limited time of famous teachers 改为 the experience with bu ...
Arthur2012 发表于 2012-4-10 19:39