【daily writing 作业】Flyingfie2012作文贴

秋雨荆州UID：2903781

已改 30# FlyingFie

eileen73UID：3256364

3.27独立已改。

IgoonUID：3186152

30# FlyingFie

IgoonUID：3186152

30# FlyingFie 有个文档叫《写作佳句300句》，我背了里面几个句子。论坛有的下，如果你要给我邮箱发给你。
其他的就是平时抄抄写写，用的材料是我现在用的英语教材。。。。

Arthur2012UID：3275426

3.29已改

FlyingFieUID：3251779

3.30 独立

yyyforUID：3283701

36# FlyingFie

新人第一次改作文..只能按自己的见解稍微改了改...但是我不会添加附件诶..怎么添加的?..

yyyforUID：3283701

Since the single child policy was introduced to China in 1980, the size of an ordinary family has been shrinking. Up till now, most of the families have one child, regarded as prince or princess, as they are the only one that under the spot light for the entire family. Parents (and) even grandparents wish all the best to their little beloved ones by fulfilling all their demands, including helping them to do their work, in order to be praised at school. A good (will) does not necessarily help children to grow up, in my eyes, this does far more damage than good.
1.        and是不是可以去掉?
2.        被称赞是父母还是孩子?..如果是孩子的话感觉主语有点问题
3.        Will是不是可以去掉?

Let children do their work independently will make them well prepared for the unforeseeable future. Children are talented; they have the ability to complete their own tasks without parents' interfering. Once parents stepped in, they consequently interrupt the normal development of the child; hence child will either react to it anxiously or simply give up to try anything, as mom and dad can take good care of everything. In addition, parents are unable to assist their children through their lives, thus it is better to make them ready for their future as early as possible.

Allowing children to finish their job alone can also free parents for other things, which they may ignore for a long time, such as enjoying time with each other, going out and visit some family friends or just sitting in front of television and relax. Take my cousin as an example, he recently turned to ten, and his parents, that is, my uncle and ante just went through a hard time, as they spent so much time on supporting my cousin doing excellent at school, they rarely had time to each other, eventually, as time draw them apart, the couple went to a pair therapist for some advices. They were told that giving child enough room for his own development is the best prescription for their relationship. Since then, my cousin was free from control, and surprisingly he did a even better job at school than those with his parents. Moreover, my uncle and ante also strengthen the link between each other.
1.        ante?..aunt?
2.        in 是不是好点?
3.        To accompany with会不会好点?
4.        就用 even better?
5.        Link改为relationship会不会好点?

To sum up, it is better for children to do their work independently, as it is not only the best for themselves, but also giving more time for their parents. So for children’s own sake, parents shall by all means let them to accomplish the work alone.

The best改为better是不是好点?

以上也全部是我的个人观点..因为我水平比你差..语法句型也不好多做改写了..

自己改的也不知道是不是对的.反正是自己的感觉改的..希望可以供你参考参考
语法就有待高人吧..

yyyforUID：3283701

添加不了附件..只能这样发出来了..也算是认真改了..虽然自己水平很烂...希望LZ不要笑话....

顺便请教如何发附件的问题?..

DoristoUID：3278884

:)

秋雨荆州UID：2903781

36# FlyingFie

Arthur2012UID：3275426

恩恩，写的不错，加油！

IgoonUID：3186152

36# FlyingFie 今天事情很多，比较忙，改的比较晚，非常抱歉！

SJoyyyUID：3283034

我也还不能贴attachment，只能这样改了哦~
Since the single child policy was introduced to China in 1980, the size of an ordinary family has been shrinking. Up till now, most of the families have one child, (加being) regarded as prince or princess, as they are the only one that under the spot light for the entire family. Parents and even grandparents wish all the best to their little beloved ones by fulfilling all their demands, including helping them to do their work, in order to be praised at school.(此处指代不明，可改为thereby making child being praised at school.^ ^) A good will does not necessarily help children to grow up, in my eyes, this does far more damage than good.(in my eyes不是linker，我认为不能连接两个句子使得双动词)

Let children do their work independently will make them well prepared for the unforeseeable future. (这个句子有两个动词哦= =)Children are talented; they have the ability to complete their own tasks without parents' interfering(interfering没有名词词性). Once parents stepped in, they consequently interrupt the normal development of the child; hence child will either react to it anxiously or simply give up to try(删掉to，改为trying，即使不删to，to为介词也该接trying) anything, as mom and dad can take good care of everything. In addition, parents are unable to assist their children through their lives, thus it is better to make them ready for their future as early as possible.

Allowing children to finish their job alone can also free parents for other things, which they may ignore for a long time, such as enjoying time with each other, going out and visit(visiting) some family friends or just sitting in front of television and relax(relaxing). Take my cousin as an example, he recently turned to ten, and his parents, that is, my uncle and ante(可用my uncle and his spouse替换^ ^) just went through a hard time, as they spent so much time on supporting my cousin doing excellent(应该用doing excellently，或替换为well-behaved ) at school, they rarely had time to each other, eventually, as time draw them apart, the couple went to a pair therapist(一对治疗专家？) for some advices.(此句中draw和went的时态不符)They were told that giving child enough room for his own development is the best prescription for their relationship. Since then, my cousin was free from control, and surprisingly he did a even better job at school than those with his parents. Moreover, my uncle and ante also strengthen the link between each other.

To sum up, it is better for children to do their work independently, as it is not only the best for themselves, but also giving more time for their parents. So for children\s own sake, parents shall by all means let them to accomplish the work alone(此处不用加the较好吧，不是特指的work，或用their替换).

第一次帮人修改作文，不知改得如何^ ^ btw，我有个疑惑的地方，你的长句子里用很多逗号隔开，但是中间很多都不是Linker而只是noun，我的概念里这样等于一个句子有很多谓语。另外句法有些不够严谨。Whatever，你的时间比我控制得好多了T T，一起继续加油！

FlyingFieUID：3251779

3.31独立

写到今天，怎么感觉写这写着就把我自己都绕进去了，说的云里雾里的，到最后有点儿不知所云。 哎，还是放上来等拍吧。。