issue74

marshalUID: 142398

兄弟我还有一星期就要上考场了， 麻烦大家多给点意见，谢谢！
74"The most effective way to communicate an idea or value to large groups of people is through the use of images, not language."

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Along with the expeditious social change in this epoch, communication complexity and intricacy are increasing from day to day. Much debate over the issue about the main method of communication has come into vogue. Different people have diverse views due to various personal experiences and distinct backgrounds. Some people advocate that it is through the use of images not language that one communicate an idea or value to large groups of people most effectively, while others sustain the opposition. In my point of view, I would like to hold the standpoint that both images and language plays important a role in communication.

First of all, it is obvious that language is very useful and convenient in our life. In most situations we communicate with others through the use of language. Freud, a famous German psychiatrist, once said (and I paraphrase):" Words have a magical power. They can bring either the greatest happiness or deepest despair, can transfer knowledge from teachers to students. Words enable the orator to sway his audience and dictate its decisions. Words are capable of arousing the strongest emotions and prompting all men's actions..." One can express his or her ideas with language much easier than images. For example, when one goes to a shop to buy a cup, he or she just need to say one word-- cup. On the contrary, if he or she wants to express his or her requirement by the use of images, he or she has to take some pictures with him or her. Clearly, language makes our life facile.

On the other hand, sometimes it is easy for people to understand an idea by vision which is not so abstract as language. Just think of the glyph which some of our ancestors invented and used. Why did they invent and use glyph? One of the reasons is that it is more visual and easier to understand. Another example demonstrates this point, too. When a football coacher deploys a game, he or she usually turn to images for letting every team member know his strategy clearly.

Furthermore, the two approaches-- language and images-- can promote the role, efficiency and effectiveness of each other. Again take the coacher above for example, we hardly see a coacher who merely use images without language when deploying a match. After all, language is briefer. Similarly, we could not see such one that he or she does not use images. Each means is necessary while one communicates with others.

As a result, based on the expatiation and reasons presented above, which can be combined together and thus become more persuasive than any one of them, we can easily draw the conclusion that both language and images are necessary in communication with others. Language makes communication brief, while images make it visual and easy to understand.

imongUID: 140258

第一段用了模版……自己考虑吧

第二段我觉得相当不错，Freud的话虽然多了点，但是等同于在阐述自己的观点，效果还是不错的，很牛啊，记住那么一大串

三四和二比起来就差远了，第三段并没有支持得很好，显得单薄，第四段就更不用说了，balance写起来不是简简单单扯到一起就行了，感觉上效果并不好。这样一来感觉并没有说什么似的。

参见一下木耳，happyman关于position的一些讨论，会有启发的。你的3，4两段完全可以向2段学习一下，会好一些。

treesUID: 82785

感觉不同段落不向一个人写的。还是改进一下吧

marshalUID: 142398

嗯
谢谢

luao-99UID: 133006

将二者联系作一下阐释，作用会更好吧。

marshalUID: 142398

还有一个问题，我有个同学说这篇文章有跑题的嫌疑。
她说里面有个关键词是large groups of people.
到底是不是呢？？？