【Daily Writing】可他媽學點習吧，謝謝大家

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Lz, 看了3号的作文 写的不错哦 一点愚见 见附件啦

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LzApril 8见附件

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1# 可他媽學點習吧

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非常感谢lz的批改，今天有点事就迟了，Sorry，现已回改。

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已改

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42# wuyahao159

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最近事多，见谅见谅！你写的真不错，每次都在学习~~

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最近幾天貌似都是之前做過的題誒，我就隨便挑了一個幫別人改過但是我沒寫過的寫了。101211 do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People think it is more enjoyable to work three days a week for long time than work five days a week for shorter time. April.9.可他媽學點習吧(JJ20101211).doc (23.5 KB, 下载次数: 9)

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P.S. 最近幾天都是先寫當天的再幫別人改之前一天的，原因是這樣，之前有兩天連改7篇文章之後頓時覺得頭昏腦脹，之後自己寫的時候也狀態極差，所以就顛倒了一下，而且有時候疏忽大意忘記改有些同學的文章，如果注意到的話麻煩站內信提醒我，抱歉。


P.P.S 昨天有朋友說從我寫的東西中看出我是理工科的，之前還又一次不小心因為別人舉得例子有感而發就在給別人改文章過程中聊到文革，然後人家問我是什麼專業的，哈哈，其實我是學商科的。。。。。。。。。

有時候時間太趕來不及每個人的留言都回覆，就把想和大家講的話都在這里講好了。

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4.6已改。sorry for late

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53# 可他媽學點習吧

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4.9



After so many years that we have beenworking 8 hours a day and five days a week, finally, someone proposed (proposes)another choice of working hours which is working three days a week with longhours. In my personal opinion, this new plan is awesome. I would totally votefor this plan for the following reasons.


First, working long hours is not as hard asit seems. Maybe it sounds a little tough to most of the (去掉) people who work with a constant schedule,but to people who have the working overtime experiences (experiences ofworking overtime), the new plan did (does) not add a lot of extraworking time on (to) each day. Let us do the calculation, the normalschedule that we are using now is 40 hours a week, if we keep that total hours,it will be 13.3 hours each day. So it is just working (it just means towork) from 7:30 am to 9 pm which still provides (leaves) you enough timeto have a good dinner and even have a nice chat with your family.


Second, long breaks every week in the newplan allows us to have more chances to do long distance travelling. Comparingto the old five-day schedule which contains only two days break between workdays, the new one has a four days long vacation (four-day weekend) inevery week. Please think about it, how many times in your past life that youhave given up your dreamt trip because of not having enough time (limitedshort weekend). And to me, the eternal meaning of life is definitely notworking without (with) being too tired; it is working just to support medoing whatever I want in my life (这句话的表达好像不太准确，有点中文直译的感觉) [参考To me, the eternal meaning of life is definitely not to work wearily/tiredly but to make a living by working and enjoy my own life]. With thenew plan, I got (can get) both money and enough free time from working.


Third, working longer time everyday thanbefore makes it easier to schedule the tasks. Everyone has their own way toschedule their tasks based on the different personal habit. So, longercontinuous working time will bring us more choices of the use of time. Forinstance, under the new plan, if there is a task that takes 10 hours to finish,instead of having to divide it into two parts, we can easily finish it in oneday and than make some preparation for the next day’s works while you canstill do many tasks that require shorter time (这个从句和前面的名词不搭配). In another word, longer working time makes the company runningmore efficiency(run more efficiently; make sb do sth).
(这一段的观点好像不是很有说服力。最好抓住为何more efficient为观点为说明三天工作日的好处)
In conclusion, through any perspectivethat has been mentioned above (among these perspectives that have beenmentioned above), working three days a week for long time is physically andmentally perfect to me.


(个人认为
用to work 更好，至少可以两者间或着用，增加句子结构的多样性)



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这里是我的作业。多谢

https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=1354824&page=1&extra=#pid1775878114

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已改，加油。

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其实我觉得楼主是南京人。。。;P

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干巴爹~

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已改
蛮好的~