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发表于 2012-4-8 10:21:54 |显示全部楼层
15# 可他媽學點習吧 谢谢修改~不是你说的话都没发现离题了,果然是没仔细读题目啊~
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发表于 2012-4-8 12:05:13 |显示全部楼层
12# Arthur2012 我也突然发现跑题了。。。囧!
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发表于 2012-4-8 13:19:21 |显示全部楼层
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发表于 2012-4-8 15:44:07 |显示全部楼层
弱弱地完成了。。。

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发表于 2012-4-8 17:12:52 |显示全部楼层
写的真不错..加油

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发表于 2012-4-8 19:23:18 |显示全部楼层
真崩溃啊:mad:感觉自己没长进

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发表于 2012-4-8 20:47:54 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 dengweilin 于 2012-4-8 20:50 编辑

写得不错 继续加油啊

As we know,human beings are gregarious species which can live without accompaniment. Friendis essential to get rid of loneness, support each other to overcome difficulty.There is some discussion about whether two people can become intimate friendseven if one of them has more money than the other. I definitely agree with theview that they can build great friendship despite the unequal financialcondition.

First, thecriterion of making friends varies from different people, while true friendshipis based on sincerity. It’s common that snobbish man often take the financialcondition as prerequisite factor of making friends, but this kind of friendshipcan not lastlong because they care nothing but benefit. On the contrary, good friends carethe inner reality of each other which can not be distracted by the gapof wealth. Two people can make friends  only if both of them feel connected with each other. Nomatter how rich a man is, he needs someone to share common with and themotivation of being friends should be pure and hearty. No matter how poor a manis, he has his own advantages to attract appreciation.

Second, goodfriends always feel relax and confront honestly to each other which allow eachother to shape a better personality. Everyone is not perfect, good friendsalways are considerate to the other so they have no need to disguise or feelshamed. What’s more, they point out with your defect with kindness andhelp you to mollify it. Otherwise, profit-oriented/driven
friends friends of profit-drive will flatter each other withnice but usefulless words which can make do nothing but let you loseyourself. As everyone is imperfect, people need take someone as mirror to knowthe disadvantages and advantages. It is another reason why different people offinancial condition could be friends as well.

Last, goodfriends will spur each other to pursuit a better future and always feeldelightful to help. People will suffer from all kinds of difficulties and mostof which cannot be overcome by oneself. Good friends always stand by your sideand make efforts to help you. There is no doubt It is not doubt that the rich one will need help from the poorwhile the poor take it as honor to offer a hand, and vice versa. Only byhelping each other, they will lead a better life. (论点与主题不太相扣,可以从money can not make true friends来写)

Inconclusion, there’s not ban for different people of financial condition to makefriends. True friendships are based on sincerity instead of material condition.What’s more, people can shape a better characteristic and then lead a betterlife only by confronting to their friends and delight to offer help.

The recent film<Intouchables> is a good example.
Hope never abandons you; you abandon it.

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发表于 2012-4-8 21:36:49 |显示全部楼层
感觉已经很不错了..

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发表于 2012-4-8 22:23:47 |显示全部楼层
19# 青鱼 已改~好評~ 4.7.青鱼.doc (30 KB, 下载次数: 4)

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发表于 2012-4-8 23:06:30 |显示全部楼层
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发表于 2012-4-9 09:35:56 |显示全部楼层
21# 青鱼 谢谢lz的评改,已回改

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21# 青鱼 已改~ Apr.8.青魚.doc (32 KB, 下载次数: 1)

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发表于 2012-4-10 11:00:20 |显示全部楼层
昨天实在没时间,今儿补上。不过又是一次不计时各种查字典的写。。。楼主很绝望

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发表于 2012-4-10 11:08:11 |显示全部楼层
22# 秋雨荆州 哈哈~谢谢亲,听说亲不用考托福还自愿来改作文?赞一个!:handshake太感激了!
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