Issue133，第一篇全的，求拍！保证回拍！ 【已批改 by 版友sitting-dog】

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这篇写了3个小时，呃，写到最后都快疯了。自己断断续续改了两天。实在是不知道咋改了。贴上来求大家给指导指导！我保证回拍哒！！
谢谢大家！

Issue 133：Claim: Knowing about the past cannot help people to make important decisions today. Reason: Theworld today is significantly more complex than it was even in the relativelyrecent past.

提纲：

让步同意：社会确实在不停变化，当今世界上出现了前所未有的一些复杂局面。

反对观点：
1、今天所面临的状况和过去相较未必更复杂，事实上并不存在一个客观标准比较两者的复杂程度。
2、尽管出现了前所未有的一些问题，但其实今天和过去所面临的事情和事物实质是相同的。
3、实践证明，我们从过去的实践中学到很多：一方面借鉴经验，一方面吸取教训。


The speaker contends that history is of limited use for us to decidebecause we are facing a much more complex world than ever before. I concede thatour society never ceases to change, and many unprecedented complexities havebeen generated nowadays such as the problem of internet security, the danger ofnuclear leakage and the ethical dilemma of cloning technology. Beyond thisconcession, however, I find the speaker’s contention indefensible from bothnormative and empirical standpoint.

To begin with, there isnecessity to give a clear definition of complexity we are discussing here. There are two vital characteristics for a complex situation: Firstly,there are various objects involved and the inner relationship among them looksconfused. Secondly, the time and energy required to address the complication ismuch greater than usual. Unless this base line endorsed, in my view, the issuecan come to terms.

Indeed, compared with theancients, modern human have embraced some distinctive and novelexperiences just as I mentioned above. Therefore, time and energy should berequired to figure out the inner relationships of new objects or the freshrelations among old things and facts. Yet, difference doesn’t necessarily leadto an increase in complexity degree. And solving those new problems we arefacing today doesn’t necessarily require more time and energy than everbefore. In fact, there is no objective measurementto definite complexity mankind face with. You can never say the new objects andrelationships we are confronting with today must trouble more, or the amount oftime and energy our ancients devoted into addressing problems is much less beyonddoubt. So, it is unreasonable for the speaker to compare the complication ofthe world today with it was in the past.

Moreover, even though thesuperficial aspects of facts are various, the nature and inner relationshipbehind keep on sharing the same features no matter how time changes. A case inpoint is that Confucius, one famous educator in China 2500 years ago, put forwardhis most significant education idea as teaching with individual differences. Despitetime changes and people change, the essence of education is still the same. Andeducators nowadays have always got spirit for Confucius’ theory. Therefore, I would like to point out that what happened inthe past is valuable for us, so it’s unjustifiable to outlook history.

In reality, history servicesas a mirror, through which we could observe what we are supposed to do. In thesense of the same nature behind divergent appearances, history offers usbackground information and proper thinking directions for problem solving. Inthis way, we could understand causes of a fact easily and thus we can analyzeseveral aspects before we make decisions. Moreover, history can distract usfrom making same mistakes our ancestors made：Damage brought by ancient warswarns us to defend peace, Desertification of reclaimed land in the past remindsus to keep forest conservation, and extinction of species alarms us to shareharmony with nature. As a result, the difficulties of judgment and problemsolving could be lowed. Besides, our time and energy spent on the complexproblems could be saved as well.

In sum, I find indefensiblethe speaker’s assertion that situation we are facing today is much morecomplicated than it was yesterday and resulting history futile to be referencefor our decision making. The suggestion runs contrary to the overwhelming evidencethat many perfect judgments is based on past cases and it wrongly regards thecomplexity of today’s problems ahead of it was in the past.
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1# yuyu7yaya
The speaker contendsthat history is of limited use for us to decide because we are facing a muchmore complex world than ever before. I concede that our society never ceases tochange, and many unprecedented complexities have been generated nowadays suchas the problem of internet security, the danger of nuclear leakage and theethical dilemma of cloning technology. Beyond this concession, however, I findthe speaker’s contention indefensible from both normative and empiricalstandpoint. (我觉得这个开头挺规范的，三句话引入正题，第一句复述题干，第二句举例子，第三句提出自己的观点。而且用词也不叫多变，学习了~)

To begin with, there is necessity to give a clear definition of complexity weare discussing here. There are two vital characteristics for a complexsituation: Firstly, there are various objects involved and the innerrelationship among them looks confused. Secondly, the time and energy requiredto address the complication is much greater than usual. Unless this base lineendorsed, in my view, the issue can come to terms.

Indeed, compared with the ancients, modern human have embraced some distinctiveand novel experiences just as I mentioned above. Therefore, time and energyshould be required to figure out the inner relationships of new objects or thefresh relations among old things and facts. Yet, difference doesn’t necessarilylead to an increase in complexity degree. And solving those new problems we are facingtoday doesn’t necessarily require more time and energy than ever before. Infact, there is no objective measurement to definite complexity mankind facewith.（作者说现在的问题在复杂度上与以往的问题的相比并没有提高，但是仅仅提出了论断而缺乏必要的支持。比如说其实
’internet security’
其实古已有之，以前在通信的时候人们为了能够加强保密性，于是诞生了各种加密方式，反应的现在就是电脑信息的不同的编码方式，可能我这个例子也举得不恰当，楼主可以再思考些） You can never say the new objects and relationships weare confronting with today must trouble more, or the amount of time and energyour ancients devoted into addressing problems is much less beyond doubt.(虽然，说的没错，但是“you can never”有指着阅卷人的鼻子教训的感觉，可能会引起阅卷人的不爽，改成“one can never”比较容易残忍接受。) So,it is unreasonable for the speaker to compare the complication of the worldtoday with it was in the past.

Moreover, even though the superficial aspects of facts are various, the natureand inner relationship(innate character,避免用词重复) behindkeep on sharing the same features no matter how time changes. A case in pointis that Confucius, one famous educator in China 2500 years ago, put forward hismost significant education idea as teaching with individual differences.Despite
time changes and people change（the changes of circumstances withthe passage of time,这样表达会不会好些？）, the essence of education is still the same.And educators nowadays have always got spirit for Confucius’ theory. Therefore,I would like to point out that（it has been proved that,这样表的的说服力会强些吧，我觉得虽然是issue，还是应该避免表达过于个人化的观点，重点是在体现逻辑思维的合理推导） what happened in the past is valuable for us,so it’s（it is，正式文体避免缩写） unjustifiable to outlook history.

In reality, history services as a mirror, through which we could observe whatwe are supposed to do. In the sense of the same nature behind divergentappearances, history offers us background information and proper thinkingdirections for problem solving. In this way, we could understand causes of afact easily and thus we can analyze several aspects before we make decisions.Moreover, history can distract us from making same mistakes our ancestors made：Damage brought by ancient wars warns us to defend peace, desertificationof reclaimed land in the past reminds us to keep forest conservation, andextinction of species alarms us to share harmony with nature. As a result, thedifficulties of judgment and problem solving could be lowed. Besides, our timeand energy spent on the complex problems could be saved as well.

In sum, I find indefensible the speaker’s assertion that situation we arefacing today is much more complicated than it was yesterday and resultinghistory futile to be reference for our decision making. The suggestion runscontrary to the overwhelming evidence that many perfect judgments is based onpast cases and it wrongly regards the complexity of today’s problems ahead ofit was in the past.


1.
在论证上本文还是比较中肯的，就是在一些论点上缺乏必要的示例来支持

2.
楼主用词蛮丰富的，学习了

3.
可以稍微注意一些正式文体的书写方式

在下才疏学浅，能力有限，研究issue也没有几天，说的不对的地方还请楼主海涵~~

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1# yuyu7yaya
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=1365686&extra=page%3D1%26amp%3Bfilter%3Dtype%26amp%3Btypeid%3D101
楼主，有时间请很拍之，没几天就考试了，还请大家多多指点

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2# sitting-dog
灰常感谢！
第一段反驳确实缺乏事例支持，我就是写到最后也想到啥合适的例子，就偷偷的省略了。结果还是被揪出来了，哈哈！