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20120526 考T!多谢大家帮忙指点修改!!!
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本帖最后由 立夏小卓 于 2012-5-5 17:56 编辑

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20101210 NA  你觉得是完全做完一个project再开始做另一个比较好,还是同时进行两个或者更多的project?


Some,holding this idea that running more than one project at the same time is better than finishing projects one by one, claim that they could save some time to some extent. Nevertheless, from my perspective, dealing with one project at a time is more efficient for the following reasons.

Initially, one issue which encourages me to hold this opinion is that doing one project at a time contributes to a high-quality result. Take myself as an example, engaging just one project means devoting myself wholeheartedly to it. To the contrary, taking responsibility of several projects once means distracted attention, great pressure and tight schedule. As the result, the feeling of overburden will trigger my anxiety which will bring about my memory and initiative in decline. Therefore, the rate of mistakes will increase in my report.

A second reason to support my viewpoint is that dealing just one project rather than doing several ones at the same time promotes the possibility of finishing it more quickly. Because of the limitation of the manpower and material resources, running several projects once always costs more time compared with doing just one project. In order to finish tasks as soon as possible, it is a better choice for people to concentrate on just one project at a time.

On the other hand, it is very important not to take this assertion too far. In most situations, though doing projects one by one indisputably seems a wise choice, the choice is not suitable to doing some relevant projects. Doing the relevant projects together will save time and energy for there are some similar preparations for these project. So we should make decisions depending on the types of projects.

From all the evidence mentioned above comes this natural summary that doing just one project once is usually superior to dealing some projects together. Despite the benefit of the later choice, finishing the projects in turn will be more efficient.
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发表于 2012-5-7 17:09:41 |只看该作者
楼主握爪~我5月20号考,今天才写第一篇作文,,惨不忍睹。
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Some,holding this idea that running more than one project at the same time is better than finishing projects one by one, claiming that they could save some time to some extent. Nevertheless, from my perspective, dealing with one project at a time is more efficient for the following reasons.5 p, H* Z! h% k! L6 ~6 ]3 H

Initially, one issue which encourages me to hold this opinion is that doing one project at a time contributes to a high-quality result. Take myself as an example, engaging just one project means devoting myself wholeheartedly to it. To the contrary, taking responsibility of several projects once means distracted attention, great pressure and tight schedule. As the result, the feeling of overburden will trigger my anxiety which will bring about my memory and initiative in decline. Therefore, the rate of mistakes will increase in my report.
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A second reason to support my viewpoint is that dealing just one project rather than doing several ones at the same time promotes the possibility of finishing it more quickly(形容possibility应该用large?). Because of the limitation of the manpower and material resources, running several projects once always costs more time compared with doing just one project. In order to finish tasks as soon as possible, it is a better choice for people to concentrate on just one project at a time.( R9 W; W1 B7 t" N9 @# ~8 U
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On the other hand, it is very important not to take this assertion too far. In most situations, though doing projects one by one indisputably seems a wise choice, the choice is not suitable to doing some relevant projects. Doing the relevant projects together will save time and energy for there are some similar preparations for these project. So we should make decisions depending on the types of projects.
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From all the evidence mentioned above comes this natural summary that doing just one project once is usually superior to dealing some projects together. Despite the benefit of the later choice, finishing the projects in turn will be more efficient.

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我都不好意思贴我的了。。。

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发表于 2012-5-7 18:52:57 |只看该作者
Should universities finance students’ sports activities equally as libraries?

School’s main responsibility is developing students’ academic ability. Although a health body is a prerequisite to a student’s learning and academic research, not meaning that universities should spend as much money as libraries on sports activities.

First of all, for students who occupying lots of time to study, a quiet and comfortable study environment would promote their efficiencies undoubtedly. As we know, a campus dorm room usually accommodate up to eight students in a little room, so we can image that how tough is it for students to study in their dorm room. Taking me as an example, it usually takes more than 3 hours to further study after class. A large library is hugely helpful for me to study more efficiently and more enjoyably. On the other hand, students just spend little time on physical exercises every day. It would be a waste to spend so much money on sports activities.

In addition to the costs of building appropriate faculties, a university must also pay every year to keep its collection well organized and up-to-date. The goal of every university library should be to have the most current materials and books need in order to study and do cutting edge research. The larger the student’s population, the larger the library should be built and the more comprehensive the collection should be. Furthermore, it must be necessary to employ several experienced people to answer students’ questions about the collection and other stuffs. Well, continuing costs for sports, on the other hand, is pretty much smaller. It just needs some part-time job employees to do the maintenance routines.

Finally, although a healthy body is required for study, the investment to ensure a physical health is small. And a university‘s main job is to develop their students’ mind not their body, so it is visible to spend more money on library.

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发表于 2012-5-10 15:19:55 |只看该作者
School’s main responsibility is developing students’ academic ability. Although a health body is a prerequisite to a student’s learning and academic research, not meaning that universities should spend as much money as libraries on sports activities.
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, z+ o* `1 `# e5 S, l5 v: }First of all, for students who occupying (occupy的用法不对 这里用spend sb. some time to do sth. 比较好哈)lots of time to study, a quiet and comfortable study environment would promote their efficiencies undoubtedly. As we know, a campus dorm room usually accommodate up to eight students in a little room, so we can image that how tough is it(it is) for students to study in their dorm room.(可以不要room 啰嗦嘞~) Taking(Take) me as an example, it usually takes me  more than 3 hours to further study after class. A large library is hugely(really) helpful for me to study more efficiently and more enjoyably. On the other hand, students just spend little time on physical exercises every day. It would be a waste to spend so much money on sports activities.2 a8 m4 ]* j3 a7 N8 N
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In addition to the costs of building appropriate faculties, a university must also pay every year to keep its collection well organized and up-to-date. The goal of every university library should be to have the most current materials and books need in order to study and do cutting edge research. The larger the student’s population, the larger the library should be built and the more comprehensive the collection should be. Furthermore, it must be necessary to employ several experienced people to answer students’ questions about the collection and other stuffs. Well, continuing costs for sports, on the other hand, is pretty much smaller. It just needs some part-time job employees to do the maintenance routines.
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Finally, although a healthy body is required for study(students), the investment to ensureing (to是介词吧)a physical health is small. And a university‘s main job is to develop their students’ mind not their body, so it is visible to spend more money on library.  

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