各位觉得我study plan这样写可以吗？

foliage0166UID: 3126987

专业是 Interdisciplinary Design（跨学科设计） 主要是教设计思维方法，目的是将设计和商业结合两年 Master of Fine Arts 学位

我没用网上给的小标题格式，因为我觉得段与段之间用逻辑来衔接更好，文章也更整体。
麻烦有空的童鞋给点建议喽~
我5月28面签~

先谢过！

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After graduated from XX University, I decided to pursue further study in America. I chose the two years’MFA program of College for Creative Studies.


When I was in Tianjin University, I majored in Industrial Design. Thiscollege education experience helped me build firm foundation of both engineeringknowledge and aesthetic skills related to design, and intensified my interestin product design as well. Since I planned to be a product designer for mywhole life, I grabbed every opportunity to get real-world experience frominternship. I had three internship experiences in three different cities, and Ilearn a lot from them. But one important thing I realized after internships isthat design and business are separated in China. Businessmen don’t understandthe process and the value of design, and designers don’t know how to makeproducts easy to sell. This gap has caused communication difficulty or even conflictsbetween businessmen and designers. But neither professors in famed universitieslike XX University, nor leading companies like the one I took my thirdinternship in, knows how to solve this problem. There are no theories, and nopractice experience. So I feel there’s not much left for me to learn in China, whereproduct design has a history of only about twenty years.


Thinking about learning something related to business, America is nodoubt the first choice. The product design in America is advanced, too. It hasa long history, and many well-designed products are worldwide popular, likeiphone. So I believe that I can learn what I want in America. After chattingwith students and design teachers in America on the internet, I found that theMFA design program of College for Creative Studies had a great reputation. Itteaches students not only design skills, but also thinking methods. It locatesin Detroit, the auto city, and many courses are taught by designers from famousauto companies like Ford or GM. These experienced designers can tell students whatdesign methods works the best in real companies, and also make students able tocatch up with the most advanced technology and market trend. When the dean ofCollege for Creative Studies came to China, I met him and talked about the MFAInterdisciplinary Design program with him. He told me that the origin purposeto start this program is to combine design and business, so students can becomestrategic thinkers and innovators, then take leader roles in today’s globalbusiness environment. I think the focus of this program perfectly meets my need,and I’m also awarded a scholarship of 8,000 dollars a year, so I finallydecided to learn at College for Creative Studies.


Another reason that I want to learn how to combine business anddesign is that, I plan to found my own design studio after about 5 years. Beforethat, I still need to work as a designer in big companies to gain more experience.But in order to communicate with businessmen equally, I have to cooperate withthem, other than be employed by them. Having my own studio, I can refuse thefast but low-quality design cases, and also choose design fields freely. I’vealways been interested in keeping Chinese traditional culture alive in modernsociety, when people today are caughtup in fast-paced environments whether at the office or in school, and abalanced life can hardly be seen anymore. I am hopeful that future generationswould still take advantage of their heritage , so I’llcreate a brand of products in daily use, combining Chinese traditions andmodern design. I hope thoselovingly designed items from my brand, which will be suitable for the modernChinese lifestyle, will encourage people to maintain useful traditions from thepast while building their own style and philosophy of life. Of course, mystudio will locate in China, where the product design market is almost blank,especially the culture oriented design field. The policy in China isencouraging innovation entrepreneurship, too, and many furniture design studioshave succeeded in combining Chinese culture and modern lifestyle. At the sametime, the whole design industry in China is in great need of person who’stalented in design thinking and design strategy, and I’ll be well prepared inthose fields after two years’ learning in College for Creative Studies. So I sincerelybelieve that my career has a bright future.

foliage0166UID: 3126987

自己顶一下~:loveliness:

hua11UID: 3027785

我水平有限，呵呵。看着觉得还行

foliage0166UID: 3126987

3# hua11 谢啦！！觉得还行就好啊~但愿水果哈

srai333UID: 3104819

原来是天大的，同在天大，帮顶！！

我21号已经签过了~相信楼主也能水果

我没看过网上学习计划的模板，因为没找到。。。

说一下个人的看法。既然是计划，就应该像个真正的计划，比如刚入学干嘛，第一年干嘛，第二年干嘛等等
觉得楼主写的太笼统了。

我的学习计划写的很简单，首先是自己的背景：目前在天大就读，马上毕业，专业是XX，毕业后去XX读博，专业是XX。
然后按照1、2、3列出来研究生期间将要干什么：去学校先选导师、研究课题，要修够XX学分，修的课程有XXX，研究生期间至少发XX篇论文，定期找导师探讨自己的课题，准备毕业答辩，最后毕业。这一部分我是参考学校的研究生手册写的，上面详细说明了研究生期间什么时间需要干什么。
最后简单写了一下毕业后的计划，当然是回国，而且必须回国，一定要说明，毕业后留在美国肯定活不下去，而回国就能过上幸福的生活。楼主在回国计划上写的没有说服力，你没能说明白你在美国没有前途这一“事实”。

另外感觉楼主的学习计划太泛了，缺少具体的东西，不是针对某个特定的学校的特定的方向写的，让签证官无法考证你的学习计划里的内容是真是假。学习计划里一定要有细节，让签证官可以很容易地确认，从而增加学习计划的可信度和说服力。我签证的时候签证官几乎只看了我的学习计划，几乎没问问题，一通狂敲键盘后就给过了。

又回头看了一下楼主的学习计划每一段的头一句，感觉楼主只是在说你为什么要去美国。

个人观点，仅供参考，不对之处还请指正~

祝楼主1000水果~

shiwarkUID: 2794760

应该详细些，具体哪年上哪些课做哪些研究。
因为是Plan，就要像个Plan的样子。

tabimaoyaohaoUID: 3317119

PLAN应该具体点，楼主的总体还行，但是略显笼统，稍微再加点具体内容就OK了