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151.High-speed electronic communications media, such as electronic mail and
television, tend to prevent meaningful and thoughtful communication."

The technology is seducive:the global networks transparently transisting megabytes of information in fractions of a second;client/server softwares supporting fabulous real-time multimedia presentations on PC and MAC workstations;effortless visits to the virtual reality words.As a result, the interpersonal communication become increasingly meaningful and thoughtful in that the appearance of high-speed electronic communications media such as electronic mail and television accumulates more people in different geographicla places to a conference and facilitate their communication.

No field benefits more than business in terms of commercial intercourse  from the electronic comunicaition, which can save the  engaged businessmen plenty of time , energy and money, in other words, make profits for them.Instead of taking several flights one day to make trades with people, now the businessman  just need  sit down in front of the computer screen , and click the keys. While it is expensive to call in a large number of people to a definit place to hold a meeting, by utilizing electronic television, electronic conference presently goes on in the internet,ecnomically and effeciently.Thereby  electronic media facilitate our meaningful communcation, which contributes to the prosperity of business in reality.

On an individual level, electronic communications media shorten the distance of people to such a degree that  every and each one, regardless of sex, nationality, and race, can talk with each other in the global villege through internet. When people of different backgrounds participate in a specific talk toward a special topic, motley assortments of opinions and views bear their heads and in the mean time we share our sparks of thoughts,we can obtain the more profound and through understanding of the matter around us. Further , the implements based on the internet offer us a another way to communicate with our familiar friends.Unlike talking to them in true life, where we have to conceal some of our inner expression when faceing to facing, we are able to free our mask and  interact with each other without restrictions of the mind, and thus carry a deep talk.


Yet some people may argue that the internet renders people no thoughtful and meaningful communication, since they contrive misleading information and play evil jokes to others .Nontheless, this has,  in my oponion,  nothing to do with the internet itself.Rather, if we are honest and sincere enough behind the screen,  the problem will not exist and thus we can  make most use of the electronic means to foster our life.

In sum , I disagree with the statement in that from our empirical experience, the electronic media makes  our communication increasingly meaningful and thoughtful.As long as we  adopt a genuien and candid attitude towards people in the global networks, no matter in many social feild such as the business area or from a personal perspective, electronic communications media will serve as a powerful and serviceable implement aided in our quotidian life.

木耳UID: 123036

写得不错!结果很清晰.
第一段电话会议的例子很好.不过我觉得不只是商业领域,科技艺术都可以说.
建议在每段中再着重点一下meaningful and thoughtful显得切中主题.

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需要提醒一下的是这篇文章的用词并未臻于化境，有些地方需要继续推敲，尤其是前两段。例如：
transparently transisting （need revision）
accumulates more people 似乎不搭配

但是总体来说不失为一篇好文章。论述很清晰朴实，可以借鉴。