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发表于 2012-6-14 11:18:21 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
6月13 独立作文题目:
People should know about events happening around world even if they have little influence
on their daily lives.

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Some people think that they do not need to care about what happens all around the world since it has nothing to do with him/her.However,I do not think that way while I find it rather essential to keep pace with the world and get to know the world news.I will demonstate three of  the most important reasons next.

First,the world news is a large knowledge source.Our world is chaging rapidly,if one do not want be left behind and being think as an old antique,he/she should be concernd about the event happending aroung world.Not only can it bring ue new knowledge and conceptions but also fullfills our curiority.It may appears that those knowledge is useless for us normal people,but no one can assert it  useless during all our life.According to one piece of technolidge news,for instance,you would know some fancy new inventions you never saw.Maybe one day you saw it,you would not be surpriced.

In addition,knowing the event helps you get along with people.Imagine when you are walking with your friends,they suddenly mention a intersting story happend on the other side of the world form TV which you never heard of .That would be embaressing.On the contrary,if you know some events happening around world they do not know,that would give others an impression that you are a widely known person which helps you improve your personal image.

Finally,as we know,not all the world event do have only little influence on our daily lives.Economy ressesion,for instance,do have a immense influence on people.Millions and millions of people lost their jobs during the economy crisis in 2008.Therefore,it's crucial for us to know what really happens when we found our salary decreasing and our jobs are gone.Only in this way can we learn the lesson and be come wiser on spending our money.

In a nutshell,knowing events aroung the world is essential for us to have a higher quality of life.What listed above strongly suggested that we should know about events happening around world even if they seemlly have nothing to do with us.

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发表于 2012-6-14 16:43:27 |只看该作者
6月14日 独立作文题目:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Recently,we have so many sources of news and information, so that we can not tell which one is the real one or who is telling the truth.

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We are living in an ocean of information.Although some say that they can tell which one is real based on their life experience,we are always getting confused.After all,there is too much information for us to handle,it is really hard to know the truth. I will investigate this phenomenon form three aspects.

Frist,we do encounter lots of information every second.Forthermore,some information could evolve into several different versions when people spreading them.Thus makes it even more difficult to tell the truth.What is worse,we cannot experience most of the scene in our real life.So we can hardly make the right dicision.Likewise,we cannot go back to the past to indicate things,that leads the whole incident into a mystery.

In addition,some orgnizations and media do alter the truth or hide some details deliberately.In most cases,media are among the very first group of people who can touch the truth and others can obtain these information only through their description.In this kind of paraphrase,they tend to alter some detail for their own benefit and the technique is really good that we can barely notice anything.Government,for instance,are more likely to show people a much lower financial expenditure which is fake to make tax payers feel convnient.However,people do not know how this numbers and figures come out even if these data have already being changed by those accountant.But this kind of misleading is the very first step.

The last reason I want to say is people's incapacity to resist the misleading.That is,people are easily being fooled around.They really do not know much about things except their expertise.For example,we all know transgenosis food.At the very begining,people are so happy to eat them because of the wonderful advertisement.Years later,some research conducted to look deeper into the technique shows that transgenosis food may be harmful.And people are shocked.But soon cames the advocaters.After all,yet we do not know who is right.

As it is demonstrated above,information nowedays is way too complicated for people to handle.That is why I believe that we can not easilly pick the truth out of the information ocean we are living in now.

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6月15日 独立作文题目:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The main purpose for people
who have jobs is for money rather than social status.

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I believe that most people would agree with me that we work for living or money in another word.If we can not support our living,then what is the job's purpose. So my idea is clear:we work for money rather than social status.I will examine this point of view from three aspects as follows.

First,this is a very practical problem,we can not live with out money.We are not saint or god,we can not make our living only by a high social status.We need money to do everthing form eating to traveling.Especially in this economy slump period,status is not that important when we cannot afford a basic living expense.

In addition,status comes after money.That is,if one have enuogh money,he will gain social status automatically.We do not have to work to improve social status on purpose.People with a lot of money all have a good social status and money proves their arduous work.However,people with high social status do not necessarily have a good income.Writers,for instance,have very good reputation.People appreciate their work and discuss about their livelihood.But they do not know many writers can barely support their basic living.

Finally,we all know that working is what we do to improve our living quality and standard and to make us feel more convenient and happier.Money is the very substance that can provides those happiness.We can buy bigger houses with charming view of our city and share some great time with our family in this wonderful pool back in our yard.Nevertheless,all of these should be earned by ourselves.Without money,we sometimes can not get what we want to make a better life.

What was demonstrated above illustrated the main purpose to work for people is for money rather than for social status.We can not deny that a good social status makes people more confident and thus have several advantages.Whereas,money should always in the first place to be considered.Even so,we should only take what we deserve to have,money is good when it comes from the right path.And we should not work only for money,too much money is not necessary.After all,we have so many other aspect to consider except money as we work.In a nutshell,we should work for money rather social status,but not only for money.

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发表于 2012-6-16 13:09:37 |只看该作者
6月16日 独立作文题目:
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

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It's common nowadays that many people consider movies and televison to have a bad influence no teenagers and may cause delinquency. They argues that young people imitate the violence behaviour thus sometime lead to tragedy. However I think we can never ignore the positive side of these recreation,it undoubtedly plays an very important role in our daily life. In the same time,I can hardy live without them. So my idea is clear that movies and television do have more advantages for young people's behaviour.

First,the content on movies and televison are examined very strictly. That is ,no violence or bloody scene will be shown on the screen. Government and related orgnizations are increasingly concentrated on this kind of control to prevent more tragedy form happening when more and more teenager delinquency appeared. American TV, for instance, are all required to put a logo on the corner of the screen such as PG to illustrate that this program is suppose to be watched with the parents's accompany or this program is only for adults so parents can choose what to give their child to watch. This will directly decrease the number of young people who imitate the unhealth behaviour on screen.

In addtion,movies and televison have became a very importance way to recreate. Study shows that people constantly under great pressure are more likely to act weird or harm others. So as a very efficient way to relax,movies and televison is very essential eliminate the bad influence. For example,after a whole day's laborious study,I would like to watch a episode of The Desperate Housewives. When I was being attracted into the story I totally forget all the tired feeling and unhappy things. It make me feel so refreshed. Imagine if I did not have all these leisure,I think I could have gone mad already.

Finally,this kind of recreation can benefit the familly or friend affection. When we sit with our family or  friends,gossiping and laughing about the program. I think this improves people's feeling that he is very happy and has a very wonderful relationship with others. People with a good relationship are more likely to bahave himself and adequate. Meanwhile,a good relationship will also help teenagers form a sound personality which means they can distingush the right and wrong. Thus form a better bahaviour.

As what is demonstrated above,I believe we should not overlook the importance of movies and televison just because the unhealth image it gave out once. We should have confidence that the content on the screen will be more and more healther and beneficial for young people. Use it wise,the program can be very helpful. In a nutshell,there is not doubt that movies and television have more positive effects than negative ones on the way young people behave.

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已经修改好了。

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发表于 2012-6-17 15:02:00 |只看该作者
6月17日 作文题目:
All university students should be required to take history courses no matter what
field they study in. Do you agree with this statement?

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Recently,people talking more about whether we should add history classe as one of required courses in university. Some argues that history is important as it helps us memorize our mistakes and prevent us from doing the same wrong thing. I think that makes sense,but to add it as a required course is really not necessary. I will examine this point of view from three aspects as follows.

First,we university students already have a lot of classes to hanlde and we do not have extra energy to  study more. As we have chosen our major in university,we want to focus on what we are interested in. In another word, more required course result in more pressure which is news for us. I will take my examination soon,and I have several courses to prepare. In the same time,I made my schedule very full ,and any extra load would dirve me crazy.

In additon,history class is really boring form my point of view. I have history classes when I was in high  school and I never have any interest in it. And I can say this for almost of my classmates. Since we have not experienced those history times,we found it rather difficult for us to memorize those big event  and its meaning from Qin to Qing Dynasty. I have made my disicion that I would not take history lessons any more,so I choosen electronic engineering which I love. I do not want any more history classes.

Finally,we normal people do not need that much professional history knowledge. We have those historical common sense and it is enough for our daily life. When my friend mentioned Tang Dynasty once, we all know that is the most glory time in our country's history,and we can talk about something  a bit more deeper,and this is enough. We do not need to know the exact person's name and his theory which influenced the process. Which meas the common sense is just OK.

Maybe a elective class is just fine because some students would like to know more about history. Nevertheless I do not appreaciate the idea to push everyone to study history. As what is demonstrated above,I think we should not all requird to take history courses.

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6月18日作文题:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
It is better to spend money on traveling and vacation than to save money for the
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Money is important for everyone and we only have limited of it. So how to use it wise is a crucial question,if we can not handle it correctly, it is the same as wasting money which is equivalent to waste life. Though some conventional ones tend to save money for a raniy day,but from my point of view,I do think that we should invest them on recreations such as traveling and vacation.I have several points to make.

First,as an old Chinese saying goes,our time is limited,so make yourself happy when it is not too late. I believe this saying is rather reasonable.We do not know what will happen tomorrow,and we could have lose the ability to enjoy trip and the beauty of the world.So when it is not too late,we must take advantage of our exist conditions to maximize the happiness. A very famous Chinese antient poet LiBai  says,get drunk if we have wine tonight why leave it tomorrow when the fragrance is gone and we do not have the excitement emotion any more. He is telling the same thing.

In addition,vacation can benefits us a lot whether physically or mentally.I still remember last year,after summer examination,I went to QingDao city with two of my classmates.To be honest,I have never see the real ocean with my eyes.When I cover my feet in the sand and listen to the wave,I fell amazing that my whole body seems refreshed and I am absorbing new air at every pore.Losing all the unhappy feelings,I become a part of nature.As time goes by,this became the memory of my life.I think it is all worth it.What are money for?It is the very tool that we use to make us feel happy.Then why not use it?

In the same time,we really do not know what is gonna happen tomorrow and maybe we earn a lot of money which turned out to be useless when we can never go travel or do what we want any more for various reasons.Some friends of my father says they have planned so many wonderful trips but all went up in flame at last because he always can not made up his mind to go.And life's pressure came in ,with more burden and responsibility like chains locking their freedom,he think he can never go on a pure trip like what he planned any more.

As what is demonstrated above ,I really think that we should choose to travel rather then just saving it and doing nothing.We make money to spend!From another aspect, we should have some basic savings for sure.Not spend out all of the incomes otherwise one will have no feeling of safety.What I am tring to illustrate is that we can have saving but only in a reasonable scale.In a nutshell,I stronglly suggest spending money on traveling and vacation instead of saving.

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Money is important (变化一些,essential) for everyone and we only have limited of it(?,没明白). So how to use it wise(wisely) is a crucial question,if we can not handle it correctly, it is the same as wasting money which is equivalent to waste(wasting) life. Though some conventional ones tend to save money for a raniy day,but from my point of view,I do think that we should invest them on recreations such as traveling and vacation.I have several points to make.(应该有更好的表达方法,这个能明白,但不好)

First,(分论点在前,老外都是先说结论,然后给理由)as an old Chinese saying goes,our time is limited,so make yourself happy when it is not too late. I believe this saying is rather reasonable.We do not know what will happen tomorrow,and we could have lose the ability to enjoy trip and the beauty of the world.So when it is not too late,we must take advantages of our exist conditions to maximize the happiness. A very famous Chinese antient poet LiBai  says,getting drunk if we have wine tonight why leave it tomorrow when the fragrance is gone and we do not have the excitement emotion any more. He is telling the same thing.

In addition,vacation can benefits us a lot whether physically or mentally.(文章是需要确定花钱在t和v上面更好,分论点应结合写,而不是引出v的好处,这应是接下来的解释里面的东西,不应作分论点)I still remember last year,after summer examination,I went to QingDao city with two of my classmates.To be honest,I have never see the real ocean with my eyes.When I cover my feet in the sand and listen to the wave,I fell amazing that my whole body seems refreshed and I am absorbing new air at every pore.Losing all the unhappy feelings,I become a part of nature.As time goes by,this became the (得有个修饰词,如precious)memory of my life.I think it is all worth it.What are money for?It is the very tool that we use to make us feel happy.Then why not use it?(例子太长,几个问题后面没下文了,我觉得判分者应不是自己想这些问题,而应顺着你的问题看到你的观点)

In the same time,(还是上面的问题,分论点在哪里)we really do not know what is gonna happen tomorrow and maybe we earn a lot of money which turned out to be useless when we can never go traveling or do what we want any more for various reasons.Some friends of my father says they have planned so many wonderful trips but all went up in flame at last because he always can not made(make) up his mind to go.And life's pressure came in ,with more burden and responsibility like chains locking their freedom,he think he can never go on a pure trip like what he planned any more.(这段看不出要抒情还是论理)

As what is demonstrated above ,I really think that we should choose to travel rather then just saving (不平行)it and doing nothing.We make money to spend!From another aspect, we should have some basic savings for sure.Not spend out all of the incomes otherwise one will have no feeling of safety.What I am tring to illustrate is that we can have saving but only( restricted) in a reasonable scale.In a nutshell,I stronglly suggest spending money on traveling and vacation instead of saving.

头次改作文,请多包涵,文章分论点不是很清晰。

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Money is important (变化一些,essential) for everyone and we only have limited of it(?,没明白).  ...

恩,学习了!!!

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