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The influence from classmates is more important than that from parents.



Whenever it comes to the issue that whether  children are impacted more by their parents or their classmates, discussions and arguments are never found in shortage. Followers of both views are enthusiastic to present convincing reasons and instances. However ,in my point of view ,it is reasonable to endorse that influence from parents should always take the first place.
   Admittedly, appropriate education from parents in children’s young age is vital for ones to succeed. In order for children to be excellent ,parents are always enthusiastic to educate them as carefully as possible .That is the key for ones to develop good characters. On the contrary ,although it seems that classmates communicate with each other more often ,actually unlike their parents , classmates will not , or in other words ,are not willing to figure out which conduct is mistaken since it is none of their business .Instead ,classmates are more likely to talk about basketball , games and other kind of entertainments .An example sheds light on this point. My brother Jack ,who is now 26 years old ,has carved out a career for himself that he has successfully become a well known engineer . Jack ‘s success is built up on the basis of the education from his parents at his early age which enable him to be generous and ambitious . This definitely demonstrates how effects exerted by parents is of importance.
Moreover, the influence from classmates is relatively ineffective . Parents’ words are more likely to be deeply remembered by children as the early years are the golden time for children to imitate parent’s behavior . However, for instance , one who has ambition can still acquire surprising achievements even though he is in a infamous school where students prefer anything except studying .
For the above reasons ,it is not difficult to give a conclusion that influence from parents is always more of significance than that from classmates.
  

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ALL_RIGHT 发表于 2012-7-10 19:41
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秋雨荆州 发表于 2012-7-10 19:42
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