【独立写作】小弟写了两篇作文 求指导

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1   why do people go to colege or university?


  In China, no matter people in rural areas or urban areas are increasingly aware of that if
someone wants to be successful, he must attend college or university. Most people have the idea
that only people in college or university can acquire the basic things such as career
preparation, increased knowledge and so on, for the  realization  of their dream. Though the
advantages of the  acquirement  of career preparation and increased knowledge enjoys are
considerable, they can't not compete the benefits that the harvest of new experiences, when the
ability of people's social communication is taken into consideration.
  
   
     First of all, receiving new experiences, during college or university time, will remarkably
decrease the faults which people would make in their future life. For example, without this new
experiences, people  have an ample possibility in developing an inappropriately relationship with
their workmates and leader unconsciously, such as they don't understand how to do team work and how to take care of others. To the already familiar facts, a great deal of further evidence may be added. All striking proof lends support to the view that attending college or university for gaining new experiences such as social communication is definitely correct.

  Second, with new experiences accumulated in college or university, people is more capable than others. For instances, college or university graduated people is full of skills handling problems. A person, who graduated from engineering, is well-known how to devise a construction for certain use, such as a theater for showing movie, and how to built it safely and quickly. If people do not attend college or university , these special experience would never be available. Without these experiences, people may not have a perfect salary when they just come into a company.It reveals the important fact that new experiences acquired from college or university make people more competitive in society.

  When people are in college or university, some other aspects also should be regarded, such as  career preparation and increased knowledge. Considerable career preparation could greatly increase the opportunity for people's success. Furthermore, as a result of increased knowledge, people would solve the working problems much easier, such as making up of a computer for a person majored computer during college or university time.

  Judging from all evidence offered , we could safely draw the conclusion that as a reason for why people attend college or university ,the acquirement of new experiences is better than the accumulation of career preparation and increased knowledge, although all of them have their own advantages. As far as I see, people should mainly accumulate new experiences and also should pay some attention on career preparation and increased knowledge.


2  parents are the best teachers


　　   Last summer, an extraordinarily wonderful thing happened in my brother's family, which is his first son was born . However, only one as my brother's son was, he sent him to a school because of his exactly wrong idea that children's best teachers are  in schools and children should be send into school as early as possible. In my opinion, it is the parents who can only be selected to be children's best teachers. Parents can teach numerous lessons that other teachers are not capable of.
　　  
　　  Common sense tell us teachers is made up of parents and teachers at school. Some people insist that parents are lack of professional knowledge for chidren's study.For example, in China, many parents are not good at English, so that children can only acquire it from teachers at school. According to this , they arbitrary conclude that  teachers at school are best teachers.   
　　
　　
　　  Does anyone have the idea that other teachers could describe the knowledge --how to love-- to their students? No, it is over their absolutely limited abilities. Love is the most valuable and beautiful knowledge for students to obtain. If our world is lack of love, how terrible it is! For instance, people would not care about each other when someone is in trouble such as a large flair in career. Without the parent's and friends' encourage, the failed man would be hard to relief his despair feeling.The instance is not isolated, it is one of many examples I have read. From my point of view, children should gain the knowledge of how to love through their life. Except their parents, I can barely find anyone who can achieve this.
　　
　　  What else? Home-education is the other most important lesson, which children accumulate from their parents. It is also far beyond other teacher's capability. Home-education directly determines  both children's psychology development and physical development. Children is so small that they can't distinguish what should do and what should not do. For example, so young the children are, that they are short of the realization of the importance of physical development. As a result of this, parents are responsible for encouraging their children doing exercise, such as jogging, playing football, basketball and so on, twice a week which is suggested by physical scientists. Notwithstanding, psychological development should be pay attention, too. If the children are parental laxity, such as always paly and recreation, children would not be successful in their future, surely. Examples I read of lead me to realize that hard-working is the key to success. Parents are the  best teachers to teach this particular lesson.
　　
　　  In sum, my view point is that not only are parents the first teachers but also the best teachers. Though the advantages that other teachers hold a more professional knowledge than parents enjoys are considerable, they can not compete the benefits that parents can impart more significant knowledge such as how to love and home-education, which are beyond other teacher's capability brings about, when children's whole life development is taken into consideration.


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