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As technology develops, more shopping and business is done through the internet while communication face to face becomes less frequent. Is this a positive or a negative development?

With the boom in recent decades of web-technology, e-commerce, as a new mean of trading, is becomingincreasingly popular in our life. Doing shopping and business online is one kind of tendency. Though such changes towards our lifestyle seemed to make us losing many chances to communicate with each other face to face, with every aspect taken into consideration, I still believe that more business activities on the Internet is positive.
To begin with, online-business is of great convenience and efficiency. Unlike the traditional ways to do shopping, which is time-consuming on the way to the market or shopping mall, what we should do is just to open a Web browser, log into Amazon.com and then click the goods which we like. Usually, it is evenunnecessary for us to bargain with the seller, since nearly all the price are reasonable on the Internet. With the aid of the Internet, we can effortlesslybuy almost everything we want in front of the computer.
Additionally, for something we want to buy, e-commerce gives us more choices. Much larger variety of goods are displayed online because there are more brands joining in the e-commerce while one supermarket or shopping mall has merelyseveral ones selling the same things. It is not surprising that something unavailable in the real market can be easily found on the Internet.
Furthermore, business is generallymore trustworthy online. Cottages are not allowed in the e-commerce and any activities on cheating will be qualified for severe punishment, resulting in being kicked out in the e-commerce forever, but in the real market, such is not the case. Therefore, it is more reliable to do shopping online.
Admittedly, online shopping and business do reduce the chance of communication face to face among people.People may do these things through the Internet staying at home. However, the Internet also provides more ways of contacting, such as the facebook, twitter, weibo and act, through whichpeople can have more communications with each other to a certain degree. I therefore reinforce my standpoint to consider the emergence of e-commerce is positive.