写了篇作文，麻烦大家帮忙看看批评指正

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第一篇，字数320. 感觉没有什么可以写的，还是断了的太少了，麻烦大家帮忙看看，我的问题在哪儿，刚刚写肯定有大把的问题，大胆的批吧，没有关系，我承受的了。谢谢了. 放在word里，它也没有显示我哪儿单词错了什么的。。。:L
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are as important as classes and libraries should receive equal financial support at universities and colleges.

At university and colleges, sports and activities play a growing important role in our daily life. I completly agree with the point that they should be as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.

Life in university and colleges is a neceesity being ready for the life in social life after graduaiton. As we grow up, social activities are most part of our life. When attend a party, we meet different person and make friends with them. Who can see that we do not need any friends in our life and work? The ability to communicate with other people is fundimental and this kind skill is also neccessary in our unviersity life. Play ground and social activities is a wonderfull place for us to learn the communicating lessons. When we are still a student, we should learn more knowlege about people relationship by attending more students acitivities, such as a school party, a sports meeting.

A university or college focus on knowlege and classes is not really a place for students to grow up. Being a students, learning class knowlege is important and our responsibility. However, a student who spend his/her whole time in studying the chapters in books is a stupid and ridiculous one. We need relex and leisure time when we are tired. The balance between study and socila activities is desirable, because good relax can enhance study efficiency. If a unifversity realizes the relationship between study and social activities, it will supply equal financial support for sports, social activities and classes,, libriries.

Stop here, we can understand importance of both activities and knowlege. The balance of activies and knowlege is responsible for a perfect student, and can make the student to be the right person society need. Thus, I agree with the statement that sports and social activities are as important as classes and libraries should receive equal financial support at universities and colleges.

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我的建议，第一段略短，且不要copy上面的语句，这样印象会很不好

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lz这里看~~~~
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1450941-1-1.html