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10.6作文：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person's job has more effects on his or her happiness than this person's social life does. Use specific reasons to support your answer. （Happiness)

Which has more effects on a people life, the job or the social life? Some people holds that the social life can be more influential when it comes to the fact that the individual network can play a positive role in our lives, while some people think our happiness are more determined on the job we have. Despite wide spectrum of opinion, I have an inclination to the last opinion.

Admittedly, it's no denying fact that the social life can exerts some helpful effects on our lives. First, through the social life we can make more friends. The friend may give us constructive advice when we are in trouble or just lend some money to us to solve our financial problems. Besides, we can learn more knowledge and experience more colorful lives by staying with them.

However, there are some reasons where job is more compelling than social life. For one thing, the job can provide us money which we can use to buy lots of things we want. It's undoubtedly to me that the happiest day in one month is when I get my salary. Then, I can buy the goods which I have already wanted to buy for a long time. When I buy goods, the process can really enable me feel I was the happiest man in the world.  Some people may argue that the friends can lend money to us, but they should keep in mind that the money you friend lend to you should be repaid on time. If not, your friend will not lend you anymore.

In addition to the money which job can provide, another important thing the job can provide you is that it can make you feel fulfilled. Several months ago, I quitted my job, just played in my house and wandered on the street. At first, I feel happy because I finally had enough time to relax. But after a while I realized that I was not happy actually. One day, I watched a lecture online about the happiness and the lecturer said the most important method to feel happy is working hard. So, I soon find another job. Though it's very hard and sort of boring, but every evening when I returned home, I feel my heart was fulfilled and every night when I was going to sleep I would said to myself you were the happiest man in the world.

To sum up, after all factors being taken into consideration, we might come to a conlusion that our job can play a more crucial role in our happiness than our social life.

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改了，改得不是很细，能力有限。:)

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:dizzy:。10.6号作文改完了，但是我是新手，积分不够，无法传附件，恳请楼主留邮箱，我给你发过去！

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改好了，楼主写得很不错！能改得点很少！

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10.8独立做完呢.doc (28 KB, 下载次数: 2)

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具体例子是在说不出来了，多指教

是在是想不到合适的例子了

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抱歉啊，我还没有上传附件的权限，只能直接贴这了：


Now, are people easier to become educated than in the past? Some people agree with it when it comes to the positive effects that technology and economy exert on education, while some people disagree with it. For me, I have an inclination to the former viewpoint.

Admittedly, nowadays lots of items draw our attention which should be paid to study studying. A survey suggests now it takes more time than before for children to play games in the world. For instance, after school, the first thing my litter brother will do is boosting 其常见意思是提高、推动，这里用不太合适？ the computer and playing CF, a shooting on-line game. Sometimes, he even plays it all day long and doesn't eat meal, let alone spend time on studying and becoming educated.

However, there are some compelling reasons why people are more accessible to be educated. First, with the rapid development of technology, people can be easier to become educated through the Internet. For example, when I played a JapanJapanese game in my university, in order to understand some words in the game, I wanted to learn Japanese. So, I just surfed the internet and found some videos about how to learn Japanese. Meanwhile, I can join some Japanese study groups on line where lots of people share their experience which can play a positive role in my learning.连接两个从句感觉有点别扭，不太好，个人意见～ So, with the Internet which not existed in the past, I can easily learn Japanese and become more educated.

In addition to the Internet which can be helpful for our education, today, more and more people can easily get the most advanced education in the world. For example, my major is Animal science which is advanced in some courtierscountries?, such as News land这是什么地方？, Netherland rather than China. So, after graduate I can apply for the university in these countries. But in the past, before Chinese Reform and Opening, studying in western countries is impossible for Chinese students.

To sum up, after all factors being taken into consideration, we might come to conclusion that people now are easier to become educated than in the past.

1. 文章主要用亲身经历来论证，感觉比较单一。可以尝试其他方法来论证。
2. 可以感觉到作者有意识地使词汇更加丰富，但是有些词感觉运用得不太合理。
纯属个人建议哈～

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独立作文+10.18

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改好啦~~~
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April181 发表于 2012-10-19 21:57
改好啦~~~

谢谢

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April181 发表于 2012-10-19 21:57
改好啦~~~

谢谢

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10.21独立作文

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