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coolwitsUID: 149150

142. "The well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority."
当很多人都质疑权威的时候社会才会繁荣昌盛。
We mankind are the lord of the earth, who have the power, the intelligence, especially the will to solve all the problems that encumber our search of truth. While there is obvious need of the authority to set certain examples, disciplines, rules that can prevent the beginners from deviating from the right path, the analytical challenge towards it, on the other hand, leads to progress in all fields and the development of the society.
Challenging political authority forces politicians and the government to be more democratic, efficient, responsible and honest. The political authority is entitled the power to manage the machine of country, which can be used to confine the behavior of people and distribute the limited sources. The machine can of course run smoothly if the operator has the fidelity towards the people, however, while every sword has two blades, any self-interest involved can cause malfunction and probably the collapse of the architecture. As a result, the inquiry institution or organization must try its utmost to monitor the operation of the political authority and question it if necessary, more important never succumb to the pressure of it.  Richard Nixon's Watergate controversy is a good example. The president did something inappropriate, spying the behavior of his political rival, and this was unfolded harshly, finally leading to the historic resignation under the pressure of the public. The resignation is not only the end of an unfair competition or of the political life of Nixon, but also the termination of abuse of privilege towards private interest, what’s more, a start of a purified political circumstance as well as the glorified guard of fairness, justice, and the honor of American.
Challenging academic authority promotes academic progress. In the era of so much knowledge exploding as ours, the academic field all the time emphasizes as essential the revolution of knowledge structure which can revise even totally uproot the out-dated information and entrench the sound position of the vital, much the way metabolism works .If the out-dated authority keeps defending the out-dated discipline, there will be no stage for the new canon to perform and consequently no possibility of academic progress. In that case, here comes the need of not only questioning but oversetting the authority, so as to clear the obstacle of the academic development. As Aristotle once said, ”I love my teacher, but I love the truth more ”, it is the truth that deserves our worship, not the authority. I think Aristotle will not be unhappy if he last long enough to watch the famous Pisa tower experiment of Galieo that was devised to disabuse his wrong but authority-regarded assertion about the speed of two equal-quantity objects which fall from the same height, because the truth clarified is what he loves the best.
However, a society that exerts exaction rather than respect on any forms of authority will get trapped into the swamp of misleading. The authorities are not entrenched by the others, rather, they are set by themselves—by their beautiful mind, their erudition, and their lofty morality. The virtues of them, which can transmit to us the truth towards which there is no easy way, are the great wealth of the society. Of course, we should question them when them make mistakes that hamper the steps of society, however, while they are directing the right way, which is usually of more occurrence, we should follow them with veneration. It is unfair to put exaction on the authorities, if we don’t appreciate what they have done for us, we should at least treat them justly. If they have make minor mistakes that is of no harm or totally out of the major, we should forgive them just as forgive a common person, rather than censure them only because they are authorities. Because exaction can destroy authorities that act as beacons for us, without which misunderstanding spreads. Bill Clinton, who acted as the president of American for two periods during which the economy developed at high speed and society stabilized, should not be scolded as a irresponsible president as a result of the complex relationship between him and miss 来温斯基, which is related to nothing but his private life. After all, nobody is perfect.
In conclusion, we should question the authorities with analytical attitude, just how we accept them. By this method, we can further our knowledge as well as defend the truth, behind which comes the prosperity of the society.

lemonlikeUID: 139588

We mankind are the lord（这个字用的不是很合适） of the earth, who have the power, the intelligence, especially the will to solve all the problems that encumber our search of（for） truth. While there is obvious need of the authority to set certain examples, disciplines, rules that can prevent the beginners from deviating from the right path, the analytical challenge towards it, on the other hand, leads to progress in all fields and the development of the society.

Challenging political authority forces politicians and the government to be more democratic, efficient, responsible and honest. The political authority is entitled the power to manage the machine（operate和machine搭配是否更好一些？） of country, which can be used to confine the behavior of people and distribute the limited sources. The machine can of course run smoothly if the operator has the fidelity towards the people, however, while every sword has two blades, any self-interest involved can cause malfunction and probably the collapse of the architecture. As a result, the inquiry institution or organization must try its utmost to monitor the operation of the political authority and question it if necessary, more important never succumb to the pressure of it. Richard Nixon's Watergate controversy is a good example. The president did something inappropriate, spying the behavior of his political rival, and this was unfolded harshly, finally leading to the historic resignation under the pressure of the public. The resignation is not only the end of an unfair competition or of the political life of Nixon（前半个分句表述不太清楚）, but also the termination of abuse of privilege towards（for？） private interest, what’s more, a start of a purified political circumstance as well as the glorified guard of fairness, justice, and the honor of American.
Challenging academic authority promotes academic progress. In the era of so much knowledge exploding as ours（改成in the era of knowledge explosion）, the academic field all the time emphasizes as essential the revolution of knowledge structure which can revise even totally uproot the out-dated information and entrench the sound position of the vital, much （＋like）the way metabolism works .If the out-dated authority（out-dated authority？感觉有点不妥） keeps defending the out-dated discipline, there will be no stage for the new canon to perform and consequently no possibility of academic progress. In that case, here comes the need of not only questioning but oversetting the authority, so as to clear the obstacle of the academic development. As Aristotle once said, ”I love my teacher, but I love the truth more ”, it is the truth that deserves our worship, not the authority. I think Aristotle will not be unhappy if he last long enough to watch the famous Pisa tower experiment of Galieo that was devised to disabuse his wrong but authority-regarded assertion about the speed of two equal-quantity objects which fall from the same height, because the truth clarified is what he loves the best（这个例子好像不相关）.
However, a society that exerts exaction（exerts exaction这个感觉有点过，太武断） rather than respect on any forms of authority will get trapped into the swamp of misleading. The authorities are not entrenched（究竟是容易还是不容易？） by the others, rather, they are set by themselves—by their beautiful mind, their erudition, and their lofty morality. The virtues of them, which can transmit to us the truth towards which there is no easy way, are the great wealth of the society. Of course, we should question them when them（they） make mistakes that hamper the steps of society, however, while they are directing the right way, which is usually of more occurrence, we should follow them with veneration. It is unfair to put exaction on the authorities, if we don’t appreciate what they have done for us, we should at least treat them justly. If they have make minor mistakes that is of no harm or totally out of the major, we should forgive them just as forgive a common person, rather than censure them only because they are authorities.（这一句好像没必要） Because exaction can destroy authorities that act as beacons for us, without which misunderstanding spreads. Bill Clinton, who acted as the president of American for two periods during which the economy developed at high speed and society stabilized, should not be scolded as a irresponsible president as a result of the complex relationship between him and miss 来温斯基, which is related to nothing but his private life. After all, nobody is perfect.（这个例子感觉不太好）
In conclusion, we should question the authorities with analytical attitude, just how we accept them（no matter how？）. By this method, we can further our knowledge as well as defend the truth, behind（following？） which comes the prosperity of the society.
通篇读下来比较费解，没有自习分析逻辑的合理性，仅仅纠正了一些个人认为不妥的语言问题
呵呵，响应木耳大哥的号召，尽自己的一份力，评的不好，见谅！
Btw：看看置顶，发文题目没按要求：）

coolwitsUID: 149150

不好意思，昨天刚刚注册，没看清置顶的帖子，今后会注意的

coolwitsUID: 149150

142. "The well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority."
当很多人都质疑权威的时候社会才会繁荣昌盛。
Authority means someone that has a comprehensive knowledge of certain field, who set the disciplines, rules, examples that can prevent the beginners from deviating the right path. While the authority helps us a lot to approach truth, the society enhances its well-being when many its people treat authority with case-by-case attitude, questioning it when it makes mistakes and following them with respect when they stand by the truth.
Challenging political authority forces politicians and the government to be more democratic, responsible and honest. The political authority is entitled the power to operate the machine of country, which can be used to confine the behavior of people and distribute the limited sources. With the challenge from the people, the politicians and the government can do the job more effectively and honestly, improving their methods and disabusing their mistakes, because they have to be responsible to the public. Richard Nixon's Watergate controversy is a good example. The president did something inappropriate, spying the behavior of his political rival. The fact finally leaded to the historic resignation after being unfolded. The resignation is not only the end of an unfair competition, but also the termination of abuse of privilege, what’s more, a beginning of a fairer political circumstance which assures the interests of the people.
Challenging academic authority promotes academic progress. In the era of knowledge explosion, the academic field all the time emphasizes as essential the revolution of knowledge structure which can revise or even totally uproot the out-dated information and entrench the vital, much the way metabolism works. If the authority regards the newly-developed knowledge structure as heresy and keeps defence of the out-dated one, here comes the need of not only questioning but persuading the authority, so as to clear the obstacle of the academic development. It is through the challenging and revising authority’s wrong or incomplete ideas we march towards the truth, and academic progress is made.
However, a society that puts exaction rather than respect on any forms of authority is not a fair one and will get trapped into the swamp of misleading. Actually, The virtues of authorities, (erudition, beautiful mind, and lofty morality), which can transmit to us the truth, are the great wealth of the society. Of course, when them have made mistakes that hamper the progress of the society, we should question them; however, while they are directing the right way, which is usually of more occurrence, we should follow them with veneration. Further more, if they do have made minor mistakes that do no harm to the well-being of the pubic, we should forgive them just as forgive common persons, rather than censure them only because they are authorities. If we don’t appreciate what they have done for us, we should at least treat them justly. For instance, Bill Clinton, who acted as the president of American for two periods during which the economy developed at high speed, should not be scolded as a irresponsible president as a result of the mistake related to nothing but his private life. In fact, he is really one of the greatest presidents in American’s history. While nobody is perfect, exaction can destroy authorities that act as beacons for us, without which misunderstanding spreads
In conclusion, we should question the authorities with analytical attitude, just how we accept them. By this method, we can further our knowledge as well as defend the truth, behind which comes the prosperity of the society.

paisleyUID: 64183

我没有看过你的第一稿，就按着我现在看的说说意见了，不一定对，仅供参考。

第一呢，语言还是不错的，比较明白流畅，意思表达得很清楚，但是语法错误还是有一些，如

who set the disciplines,

keeps defence of the out-dated one

It is through the challenging and revising authority’s wrong or incomplete ideas we march towards the truth

the swamp of misleading


第二，你的立意虽然清楚，但是有问题。authority是多义词，指政治方面时是“当局”的意思，指学术方面才是“权威”的意思。我感觉题目更多的是倾向后者，当然你要把政治领袖写进来也没大关系，但是你开头的定义就有问题。要分开定义才可以。

第三，感觉写学术方面的弱了些，才几句话。

第四，最后举clinton的例子就偏了。这只是人们的批评和责难，态度是非常明显的，而不能说是question。这个词本身有不确定的含义，question的主体可能也对答案不确定，但是他们有权利提问、质疑。所以我认为你举学术上的例更合适，不要和道德牵涉到一起去。

总之你还是写的不错的，多多练习进步会更大。


你这篇文章，类似的和相关的文章已经有许多前人写过，或者还有范文。你可以搜索一下，对照一下这些文章。 或参照置顶的帖子。


希望你也能多多修改其他朋友的文章。尤其是提点结构上和想法上的建议。因为你不可能每个题目都练过来啊，看别人的题目，自己脑子过一遍,既可以给别人提建议，自己又多了一次训练的机会.为别人服务的人优先得到斑竹的修改哦！

midamidaUID: 137147

142. " The well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority."

当很多人质疑权威的时候，社会的繁荣会得以加强。

authority怎么理解
我原来以为是指那种学术上的泰斗级的人物,或着说是专家说的话
但是我现在查字典发现有点政治上和法律上的强制执行力的意思,有点迷惑......

feier521UID: 109747

authority 是指权力，政府职权。因为有个society，所以authority 指的不是学术界的权威。

so猫UID: 148633

midamidaJJ是我啦
这里的authority我觉得 专门说成专家 或者限定到政府职权都不好
应该就是一个范指吧 不过要更加贴近feierGG说的政府的 因为毕竟有一个society 在修饰~~

midamidaUID: 137147

55555
我哭我
先谢谢feierGG和猫猫了
看来是我理解错了
呼呼
我论证例子都想好了的(哭的昏天黑地的~~~~)
没关系
重来吧....

midamidaUID: 137147

https://bbs.gter.net/showthre ... ;highlight=issue142
大家请看5楼的贴子
里面说
authority是多义词，指政治方面时是“当局”的意思，指学术方面才是“权威”的意思。我感觉题目更多的是倾向后者，
我又晕了.......

so猫UID: 148633

就算是这样 解释成当局也应该没有问题吧
我觉得题目的意思当整个社会有这样一个意识去置疑权威的时候 社会的发展就会朝着一个繁荣的方向
那么 如果界定的好的话
在学术上的置疑泰斗 和 在政治上对当局执政者提出的疑问
这些应该还是可以反映到social authority的意思上来吧

这是我自己的观点
也希望大家一起拍之~~~~~~~

feier521UID: 109747

:rolleyes:
嗯～，authority 确实是泛指。我看指政治和学术领域都可以。不过这个well-being 也是很抽象的说。
你可以界定一个领域，然后再写；
比如说：政治领域
置疑权威体现了平等、民主，这样的政治氛围有利于社会的发展；
置疑权威可以使领导权受大众的监督，从而不会滥用职权，有利于形成一个廉明的政府；
置疑权威可以让大众表明自己的心声，可以使领导者明白自己政策的缺陷，看清大众的需要，从而制定合理的政策。
当然，你也可以让步一下：大众置疑权威应该采取合理和法的手段。
只有这样，才可以使一个社会well-being。

也可以一段一个领域的写（感觉也不错）。
比如说：
一段说：学术界：置疑地心说，Aristotle 自由落体，等等，推动了科学技术的发展，也可以make a society well-being
二段说：政治领域，如上
三段说：经济领域：置疑企业权威，有利于制定正确的经济政策，如按劳分配；促进企业间良性竞争，降低产品价格，提高产品质量，使消费者的到更好的服务，有利于经济繁荣。。。 同样使社会well-being。

呵呵，瞎想了这些。