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9.  In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
                                                      
Newton, a famous scientist, said:" If I have seen farther than others, that is because I stand on the shoulders of a giant." In the modern world, we have to admit that if individuals want to accomplish some new theories or inventions, the knowledge and experience of predecessor are the foundation and road sign, not only in scientific research but any aspect.

As the biggest software company in the world, Microsoft's productions change the word. About 35years ago, MC-DOS system devised by Microsoft was a mainstream in the operating system of PC. And with the development of technology, the biggest company, in the software industry, invents a new operating system-Windows system which depends on the MC-DOS as a foundation. And then they meliorate their production step by step with the foundation of pre-done. In fact as a common student we need more contribution by predecessor than others. Before you write your master thesis or operate your experiment you ought to finish a literature review, which can help you to indicate what is did by prior-researcher and what is your work in your research. You should construct a form field by reading the previous papers. So the endeavor by others before can help us a lot.

However, just like there is not only literature interview in your master thesis, you should add some new things which are your own experience and innovation. This production has less to with prior-accomplishment than do with your own speculation. Because if we just accumulate or iterate prior-harvest, our science and technology cannot forward one step. For instance Einstein, an outstanding scientist who has a range of classical physics knowledge and experience, but he did not confine himself by the opinion before, through precise observation and calculation he advances his own theory of time and space which changed people's opinion.

In conclusion, just like make stability groundwork before building a house, past achievements have strong influence on our future work. They are the foundation. However, if we cannot add new opinion or observation, the significant contribution is impossible.

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30 Teachers' salaries should be based on their students' academic performance.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
                                                      
1 we opposed that teachers’ salaries should be based on their students’ academic performance.
2.teacher, as the engineer of spirtit , their salaries cannot manage by the value and effect of their work. Such as
3. if we persevere that teachers’ salaries should be valued by their students’ academic performance, how could we measure teachers’ salaries who work in primary school and middle school. because their students are all young person they have little academic performance.
4. as a teacher no matter in college or in junior school they are deserved of respect. the pay out for their students cannot value by money.  

In modern society education is a ground work of a country’s booming. Because education can improve people’s diathesis, in the prosess teacher play a core role. They are the engineer of human’s spirit. I opposed that teacher’s salaries should be based on their students’ academic performance. In fact their salaries cannot manage the value and effect of their contribution.

On the one hand, teacher, as the engineer of human’s spirit, the final aim of their work is improving people’s diathesis and shaping them into a useful one for our society. In fact we cannot value their work by their salaries. for example. When works produce product in factory we can calculate their salaries by the number of the eligible one they producing. Because we can qunative the element of their work. Every day facing with the same material works produce the same products. Though our teacher faced the same students each of them is different. So a good teacher is one who understand how to effect the student according with their unique charactistics. In fact as a student, I feel that the precious what my teacher taught me is not special knowledge but their encouragement when I am in trouble time. This is invaluable.

On the other hand if we estimate teacher’s contribution by their students’ academic performance. We will find it is impossible. Firstly, how could we caclutate teachers’ salaries who work in primary school and middle school. because their students are all young person they have little academic performance. As I said above the most valuable help of students by their teachers is not only special knowledge but the experience of life when they are in trouble. Every person has his own dream not everyone want to be a scientist as their profession. Second though in college the academic performance of postgraduate students is a prime aspacts of professor’s achievement, different subject has different research area, some of them (e.g. engineering) can obtain success quickly but the other( e.g. mathematics) is not. There is no unique rule to manage teacher’s salaries.

In conclusion as a teacher no matter in college or in junior school they are deserved of respect. Their contribution cannot value by their salaries. Maybe they have no famous success in their own area but the effect of their students is unconsciously.

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15 Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
                                                      
1. An investigate indicated that people who gets a higher degree, have more income. In modern society, every young man realized that knowledge can change their life and skills is money. I opposed the issue that
2.Interesting is the best teacher.
3. though some fields may have a fine jobs market at present but how to attest it will be also good in future.
4. In conlusion education institutions should set up more subjects, which fit for the development of society.

An investigation indicates that people who get a higher degree, have more income. In modern society, every young man realized that knowledge can change their life and skills are money. On the one hand, more and more people applied PHD in order to improve their degree. On the other hand, we can choose different kinds of professional skills training, which can help us to hunt a better job.So some people have a consideration that educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers. But I opposed the issue above, because the aim of education is not only for lucrative careers.
Just as an old saying, interesting is the best teacher. Everyone has his own dream and favourite, teachers and educational institutions should play a role that can help students to find their own advantages. A person who can get a final success depending the directing of his or her interesting. For example, if Einstein have no interesting of physical what will happen. If bill gates abandon his dream of making a company instead of finishing his degree in harvard what will happen. We cannot deny college should set up new majors with the development of our society, because our economy and industry need more and more professionals who can use their knowledge and skills to resolve new problems. But in my opinion if a person has little interesting with his job he cannot make a contribution to our society.
The second reason I opposed the issue above is though some fields may have a fine job market and how to attest it will be also good for the future. For example, when you choose major in university you think Kinesiology has a golden future, because there are few professionals in the market but have lots of job about the major. But there are not only you but. Millions of people have the same thought with you. So when you complete your degree of Kinesiology and hunt a job, you will find the fierce competition on your face.
In conclusion, one side education institution should set up more subjects, which fit for the development of society. On the other side, their duty is to discover and encourage student's interesting but not lucrative careers.


写了7,8篇了吧。从一开始用一天时间写一篇issue到现在差不多一个小时写一篇，用了大概两个星期。感觉已经到了一个瓶颈，之前看OG上的例文简直是对牛弹琴，无法理解他们的行文思路。现在差不多可以知道其中的套路了。我觉得接下来的工作是在保证写作量的基础上，将更复杂的思想表述出来。如果只是满足于现在的行文思路，无疑写四，六级作文。量的积累是前提，但质的飞跃才是目的。

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liliudodo 发表于 2012-11-25 23:20
15 Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that  ...

共同加油啦，我的已经上传了，虽然没有提纲...因为写一个作文实在太费时间了...请指教。

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11月27日作业

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liliudodo 发表于 2012-11-27 21:43
11月27日作业

我issue写得不好 ，我都不想写它。怎么办。

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1130改你的1127 不好意思迟了点哈！我觉得我们俩想法出入挺大的，再交流哦！