大家拍拍我的PS呀！ 只有540字左右，不会是“臭裹脚布”的

catchboyUID: 2872779

Electromagnetics (E/M) has fascinated me years ago, because of a period of valuable experience of electronic design since I entered the university (UESTC). Serving as the chairman at Student Association of Science & Technology, I, together with my teammates, finished many projects in various fields: robotic, communication, RF circuits etc. At that time, I found E/M wave and field is so attractive because of its magic characteristics, concise form and ubiquity in electronic science.

To prepare myself for a career in E/M, I began with reading some of E/M reviews. I started designing micro-strip filter circuits with a postgraduate student. Improving the selectivity and miniaturization, I referred others’ structures; added extra folded branches and source-load coupling part and computed parameters with Matlab. From this project, I got to know micro-strip circuit deeply and handle HFSS well.   And my second project is derived from interest to Terahertz technology, designing a brand new overmoded confocal converter which could potentially bring a revolution to gyrotron! And through every time of simulation and computation, I collected bulks of first-hand simulation results, proposed several better structures than the raw model from Prof. Fu and improved the converting efficiency remarkably. Now, encouraged by his remarks, I am still working on this topic by deducing the structure’s transfer equation then optimizing the parameters and publishing my results as my graduate project.

In addition, from the course Computational Electromagnetics (CEM), lectured by Prof Lai, I understand the importance of algorithms and programming in E/M and got many chances for firsthand practice such as programing MoM, FDTD, and Monte Carlo Method with Matlab to tackle E/M problems. To apply my CEM experience to practical level and broad my outlook into more E/M area, I have pursued research in inverse scattering and nondestructive detection. Learning optimization and functional analysis theory through postgraduate class and even some interesting interactions with Prof. Chen (from National University of Singapore)in email, I got to understand many cutting-edge papers and algorithms, and located point-like scatterers with his method in Matlab programing.

I have carefully considered and evaluated whether or not I should further my spiritual journey to a Ph.D. in Iowa State University. I decide to do so because I have already dedicated most of my undergraduate years to the academic pursuits with excitement. To develop this excitement to even more boundless progress, I am eager to further explore the issues in electromagnetics. And the most significantly is the strong expectation of my future career which could be full of challenges and uncertainties, leading a productive and passionate life. And XXX Univ’s emphasis on interdisciplinary research and its long history of working with industry makes the program unrivaled. I have a yearning for a position in the ECE department of XXX University experiencing the vibrant research-oriented culture.

I have followed the research done in Computational E/M and NDE at XX Univ closely, having recently been excited by the recent work on numerical analysis of wave propagation in metamaterials because of its potential applications in THz technology and synthesis with my background in CEM. I have also been interested in NDE due to the strong ability and long history in XXX Univ and development of EM into more wide area such as XX,XX,XX…

求建议呀， 顺问一下， 这是500字版的，如果要减到500字以下（减掉40+字）从哪方面减？ 如果要加到800-1000，具体哪个部分加最有效呀（不废话）呀？ 谢谢各位大大的好心~~！！！
祝各位飘过的GTER都可以被offer雨砸晕，偶也！

mokpoUID: 2408505

倒数第二段太啰嗦 没有用的话
要加就加研究经历 感觉写得太笼统
写研究经历要回答几个问题：你做了什么？你充当了什么角色？你在研究的过程（实验的过程）学到了什么，遇到了什么困难，怎么解决？学到的东西对你的研究能力或者研究兴趣有没有帮助？这些研究怎样为你今后的研究做准备打基础？你的这些研究跟所要申的program的共通之处是什么？

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mokpo 发表于 2012-12-16 08:43
倒数第二段太啰嗦 没有用的话
要加就加研究经历 感觉写得太笼统
写研究经历要回答几个问题：你做了什么？ ...

谢谢建议！！
如果这样写研究经历的话，就要很多字了呀。 我经历比较杂，你说是不是删掉一两个经历，着重写一两个经历呢？

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mokpo 发表于 2012-12-16 08:43
倒数第二段太啰嗦 没有用的话
要加就加研究经历 感觉写得太笼统
写研究经历要回答几个问题：你做了什么？ ...

学习了，自己的ps貌似也存在这些问题，还要再修改

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catchboy 发表于 2012-12-16 05:20
谢谢建议！！
如果这样写研究经历的话，就要很多字了呀。 我经历比较杂，你说是不是删掉一两个经历，着重 ...

复杂的就选取有意义的 对你将来研究有帮助的 印象深刻的 可以反映你能力的来写 我们每天吃饭 但是好吃的菜总是印象深刻吧 家常菜你天天吃 多吃也就忘了 不是家常菜不好吃 你做的家常菜别人也做 大家都是一样的 不能体现个人特色

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mokpo 发表于 2012-12-17 01:08
复杂的就选取有意义的 对你将来研究有帮助的 印象深刻的 可以反映你能力的来写 我们每天吃饭 但是好吃的菜 ...

谢谢建议！！ 觉得你说的很对，特别是最后的比喻很有到位，决定对应着重写后两段经历了！

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haohao89 发表于 2012-12-17 22:58
PS就像自己的孩子，百看百爱，挑不出毛病，呵呵。
我记得，周围同学申请时候，是找淘宝上的思拓文书店给修 ...

呵呵~~ 同意！ 你挑出了我PS的什么毛病吗？最后一改呀，想最后广求建议啊~~

Esther.LiUID: 191003

加括号的缩写都删掉，语法错误要注意啊，读起来太难受了。希望这只是初稿。

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Esther.Li 发表于 2012-12-17 23:51
加括号的缩写都删掉，语法错误要注意啊，读起来太难受了。希望这只是初稿。

你是说括号里的缩写都去掉吗？  那后文的缩写怎么办呀？ 是不是最好不用缩写？
我去， 你第二点，把我打击惨了，这明晰不是初稿呀。。。。 怎么办？ 要跪的节奏·:mad::dizzy:
只有到处  跪  求帮改了，哇哇哇

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whr1130 发表于 2012-12-20 15:13
另外，我们中国人比较容易犯的问题就是，修饰词太多了。
譬如，你第一句话，valuable experience的这个val ...

非常感谢！！！修饰词我正在考虑着...
关于第一句，的确有问题，我正在想加because of feeling...上去呢，还是按照你说的改~ 谢谢！！
by the way, 你知道有什么表达可以替换got to understand 吗？ 一直想换掉它，但是苦于憋不出其他词了。。。

Lastly，ISU 那个我后来发现了，也懒得改了，呵呵，没什么~   ISU的NDE我还是听一个学长说的， 楼主是学长or飞友  哈哈~

thx again！！祝offer（顺利）