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fortitudesagUID: 139374

51. "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."

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In this era of rapid social and technological development, education among different fields, especially in college and university, acts as a compelling important strength in promoting the progress of the whole society. However, the statement above launches a puzzling question in front of us: must education be designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student. In my opinion, education should take into account the general demands, such as critical thinking, creativity as well as originality, and the individual needs, especially referring to those ideas and opinions on special domain.

In the first place, fostering the ability of creativity and originality, as well as critical thinking would be the fundamental purpose of modern education and in this way, learners share education without any distinction. Several centuries ago, knowledge was not so much as that of today and communication between different civilizations was not as efficient as that of our time, as a result of this case, scientists in that time would spare no effort to master the entire knowledge. In this case, Aristotle, the ancient Greece scientist, is considered having mastered the entire knowledge. However, today knowledge explosion has been regarded as the symbol of this time and people find it necessary for them to explore the new methods in the exploration. Therefore, creativity and originality, as well as critical thinking are necessary for everyone who would success in this complex society. Moreover, most colleges in diverse countries, especially in advanced countries, like the United States, have accepted these methods in their common education.

In the second place, in this advanced society, another function of education which is endued by the characteristic of this time, which is that the progress of society need enormous amount of specialists who would promote the entire development eventually, is to incubate a large amount of qualified workers and citizens instead of pedants. As we know, the first business of any person would be to survive in his or her society. Furthermore, citizens should master relevant ability which would be necessary to at least part of the society and education is necessarily oriented in the direction of diverse career. In this case, individual needs and interests would be met by education.

Finally, the best way to solve this problem is to combine these two purposes because they do not have conflict with each other to all intents and purposes. For example, in medical school, students would elect many courses on their fundamental technique and knowledge, such as the physics, biochemistry, pharmacology, pathology, and so on, which would be acquired by all students, and other courses on their special direction, like internal medicine, surgery, pediatric, and so forth, which would be acquired to some students who are interested in these subjects instead of all. This arrangement on their courses would economize the time and energy and funds in all.

In conclusion, I total agree with that education should take into account both the general demands and special needs and combine them to make education more effective and efficient。
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genie05UID: 30358

51. "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."

In this era of rapid social and technological development, education among different fields, especially in college and university, acts as a compelling important strength in promoting the progress of the whole society. However, the statement above launches a puzzling question in front of us: must education be designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student. In my opinion, education should take into account（总觉得这个语序不舒服） the general demands, such as critical thinking, creativity as well as originality, and the individual needs, （前后AS WELL AS 和 AND 的使用感觉不是很恰当，直接后面用AND就可以了吧）especially referring to those ideas and opinions on special domain.（如果能说明是哪些最好，严谨）开头不错。^_^

In the first place, fostering the ability of creativity and originality, as well as critical thinking would be the fundamental purpose of modern education（，加逗号分开吧） and in this way, learners share education without any distinction. Several centuries ago, knowledge was not so much as that of today and communication between different civilizations was not as efficient as that of our time, as a result（ of this case不用说的就不要罗嗦）, scientists in that time would spare no effort to master the entire knowledge. In this case, Aristotle, the ancient Greece scientist, is considered having mastered the entire knowledge. （总觉得你这个表达不对，具体又说不出来。再商量一下？）However, today knowledge explosion has been regarded as the symbol of this time and people find it necessary for them to explore the new methods in the exploration. Therefore, creativity and originality, as well as critical thinking are necessary for everyone who would success in this complex society. Moreover, most colleges in diverse countries, especially in advanced countries, like the United States, have accepted these methods in their common education.（例子的选用对于论点的证明的意义不大，建议你对后面现代的部分考虑深入的说理论证。而且这个时候建议在段落结尾有一个类似于总结性的句子）

In the second place, in this advanced society, another function of education which is endued by the characteristic of this time, which is that the progress of society need enormous amount of specialists who would promote the entire development eventually, is to incubate a large amount of qualified workers and citizens(这里将WORKER 和CITIZEN 用来并列是否恰当，个人认为后面你是和PEDANT相对比，这里就强调一下是有实际劳动运用等能力的人吧) instead of pedants. As we know, the first business of any person would be to survive in his or her society. Furthermore, citizens should （must ,have to ….will be much better）master relevant ability which would be necessary to at least part of the society and education is necessarily oriented in the direction of diverse career. In this case, individual needs and interests would be met by education.

Finally, the best way to solve this problem is to combine these two purposes because they do not have conflict with each other to all intents and purposes. For example, in medical school, students would elect many courses on their fundamental technique and knowledge, such as the physics, biochemistry, pharmacology, pathology, and so on, which would be acquired by all students, and other courses on their special direction, like internal medicine, surgery, pediatric, and so forth, which would be acquired to some students who are interested in these subjects instead of all.（学医的？？？以上那些我们除了PHYSICS一个都不学。 所以建议在前面作为FUNDAMENTAL的部分换一些科目，注意准确和严谨，也不要局限在一个范围里面）This arrangement on their courses would economize the time and energy and funds in all.如果说能够更进一步，说它们实际在本质上是相互促进的那就更好了。

In conclusion, I total agree with that education should take into account both the general demands and special needs and combine them to make education more effective and efficient。（关于结尾建议看看精华里的帖子，你每篇文章的结尾几乎都是这个格式，其实不错，但是我觉得应该可以更精彩的）
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感觉比上一个限时好多了，不错^_^

fortitudesagUID: 139374

谢谢！！
1、 In this case, Aristotle, the ancient Greece scientist, is considered having mastered the entire knowledge. （总觉得你这个表达不对，具体又说不出来。再商量一下？）-----------------In this case, Aristotle, the ancient Greece scientist, is known as having mastered the entire knowledge. ------------better?
2、除了PHYSICS一个都不学----------------我在句子开头提到了in medical school, 当然要学生化，药理，病理，即使是考USMLE,也要求的。
3。每次结尾时间都不够，所以仓皇结束。

谢谢！！

genie05UID: 30358

1,除了那个以外还有就是用的ENTIRE KNOWLEDGE总觉得不是很合适。
2。我就是说的这样的例子对于不是in medical school的，就不会很了解。或者说至少我不是很了解。如果可以换一换比如说所有的公共课程会不会好些呢。当然我不是说你这个有问题。

fortitudesagUID: 139374

谢谢：）

imongUID: 140258

In my opinion, education should take into account the general demands, such as critical thinking, creativity as well as originality, and the individual needs, especially referring to those ideas and opinions on special domain. 我觉得individual need和这些你提到的其它方面的关系似乎一下看不太明白，怎么说呢，有种感觉，这些东西和individual need不矛盾而且好像有重复。所以，建议界定清楚一点比较上算。

In the first place, fostering the ability of creativity and originality, as well as critical thinking would be the fundamental purpose of modern education and in this way, （这样断句有点奇怪，把逗号放在and前面好一点。）learners share education without any distinction. Several centuries ago, knowledge was not so much（much？有没有其他好的形容词？） as that of today and communication between different（individual，divergent） civilizations was not as efficient as that（好像that多余了） of our time, as a result of this case（of this case多余）, scientists in that time would spare no effort to master the entire knowledge.（这个句子不爽） In this case, Aristotle, the ancient Greece scientist, is（was/was once/had been/...） considered having mastered the entire knowledge. However, today（'s） knowledge explosion has been regarded as the symbol of this time（前半句这样写，However, the modern time has been symbolized by knowledge explosion and...） and people find it necessary for them to explore the new methods in the exploration.（explore in exploration，这样的情况尽量避免的好） Therefore, creativity and originality, as well as critical thinking are（become？） necessary for everyone who would（want to） success（succeed） in this complex society（in this society with everincreasing complexity）. Moreover, most colleges in diverse countries, especially in advanced countries, like（, like改成 such as，连续用两个逗号却表达的信息很少，相对的体现就是停顿太多了） the United States, have accepted（apply？accept在语境里要表达什么呢） these methods in their common education.

In the second place, in this advanced society, another function of education which is endued by the characteristic of this time, which is that（which is that，再加上前面的一堆逗号，不好，这个句子需要调整） the progress of society need enormous amount of specialists who（这里又来了个who） would promote the entire development eventually, is to incubate a large amount of qualified workers and citizens instead of pedants.看完这个句子会很晕的说。 As we know, the first business（first business?） of any person would be to survive in his or her society. Furthermore, citizens should master relevant ability which would be necessary to at least part of the society and education is necessarily oriented in the direction of diverse career. In this case, individual needs and interests would be met by education. 这段里面提出了观点，但是缺少supporting evidence.

Finally, the best way to solve this problem is to combine these two purposes because they do not have conflict with each other to all intents and purposes. For example, in medical school, students would elect（select？） many courses on（on? 没看懂，什么意思？） their fundamental technique and knowledge, such as the physics, biochemistry, pharmacology, pathology, and so on, which would be acquired by all students, and other courses on their special direction, like internal medicine, surgery, pediatric, and so forth, which would be acquired to（acquire和to都值得再推敲） some students who are interested in these subjects instead of all. This arrangement on their courses would economize the time and energy and funds in all.

In conclusion, I total（totally?） agree with（agree with sb？agree on some certain point？如果我没记错，自己make sure一下，就像上次的exist一样） that education should take into account both the general demands and special needs and combine them to make education more effective and efficient。

几天下来用词有进步，不过仍然需要努力的。我非常希望有一天我能够说“通篇用词很流畅，基本没有错误，很舒服”。继续写，同时找找别的资料，提高用词造句的感觉。适当做些总结，找出有时写句子别扭的问题到底出在那个环节，这样针对性会高，效率同样提高。

立意上，我觉得说的不明显。我的理解，似乎你找出来提干的对立面，但是你提出来的“对立面”似乎实际上并不对立的样子。所以我比较puzzled. 上次的文章也有这种问题的。建议你仔细考虑考虑。

fortitudesag是上榜的第一名，就先过来看了。继续努力。

fortitudesagUID: 139374

谢谢imong先！
response to imong:
1、many courses on（on? 没看懂，什么意思？） their fundamental technique and knowledge----------医学生教育讲三基教育，（基本知识、基本技能、基本原理）对每个疾病来说，都有病因、流行病学、病理生理、病理学、发病机制、检查（影像、血清学、其它辅助技术）诊断、治疗、预后诸多方面，而只有把握基础医学，才能从本质上把握一个疾病，光会诊断和治疗是不行的（蒙古大夫:)）。
2、从词霸：（你说的对）
agree
vi.  agreed, agreeing
同意； 赞成；答应
She agreed to my idea.
她同意我的想法。
I quite agree with what you say.
你所说的我很赞成。
意见相合
We agree on this count.
在这一点上,我们的意见一致。
致谢！！

fortitudesagUID: 139374

51. "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."

In this era of rapid social and technological development, education among different fields, especially in college and university, acts as a compelling important strength in promoting the progress of the whole society. However, the statement above launches a puzzling question in front of us: must education be designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student. In my opinion, education should take into account the general demands, such as critical thinking, creativity as well as originality, and the special needs, especially involving grasp to those ideas and opinions on special domain.

In the first place, fostering the ability of creativity, and originality, as well as critical thinking would be the fundamental purpose of modern education and in this way, learners share education without any distinction. Several centuries ago, knowledge was not as abundant as that of today and communication between divergent civilizations was not as efficient as of our time. In this case, Aristotle, the ancient Greece scientist, had been considered having mastered the entire knowledge. But in modern society, dramatic increase on knowledge promotes further specialization on certain realms and those abilities such as creativity, and originality, as well as critical thinking have become necessary for everyone who wants to succeed in this society with ever-increasing complexity. For example, most colleges in diverse countries have paid great attention to these methods in their common education. High attention on creativity and critical thinking in America would best illustrate this point, and in this case, their abundant achievements on economic and scientific fields have been far in the lead within range of whole world.

In the second place, in this advanced society, the complexity of the modern society would ask for people possessing different experiences and abilities in diverse domains. Furthermore, it is the development of global economy and specialization that make education have to consider the needs and interests of diverse individuals in different professions. For example, physicians in any hospital should learn that what countless diseases result from, and what their characteristics are, and how they could not be confused, and how they could be solved, as well as what is the outcome they would leave on patients. However, researchers in scientific or technological domains would have to grasp through what kind of methods the unknown world would be recognized, and what kind of biases and prejudices would be accompanied in the studying process, and what other items have not been taken into account in their experiment, and so on. Obviously, physicians need not know what obstacles would be encountered in experiment, while researchers would not have to understand what patients or their diseases are like, unless their researches are about medical items. From the two professions mentioned earlier, we would not have to go very far to see that, though the general abilities like creativity and critical thinking would benefit them, education should also be designed to meet the individual needs and interests of learners.

Finally, the best way to solve this problem is to combine these two purposes of education together because they do not have conflict with each other to all intents and purposes. For example, in medical school, students would accept many courses on their fundamental techniques and knowledge, such as the physics, biochemistry, pharmacology, pathology, and so on, which play a role as core of their thinking when making a diagnosis, and other courses on their special direction, like internal medicine, surgery, pediatric, and so forth, respectively. Consequently, the former courses would function as fixed courses and the latter courses would be selected to learn in a deeper degree according to one's interests and needs. Then the application of these methods would benefit the interests of learners and the society as a whole to the great extent because this style of arrangement on their courses would economize the time and energy and funds in all.

In conclusion, I would claim that, whether education is designed to general abilities like creativity or critical thinking or to special training according to different domains, it would equally benefit its learners effectively. As for the educational executives, they should be made aware of the complexity of this issue and try their best to benefit the learners and society as a whole - their responsibility.

fortitudesagUID: 139374

提纲：
position：education should take into account the general demands, such as critical thinking, creativity as well as originality, and the special needs, especially involving grasp to those ideas and opinions on special domain.
1、教育应注意基本能力教育（在大家是相同的）
2、教育还应有指向性（个人不同）
3、两个目的可以结合。