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fortitudesagUID: 139374

201. "The purpose of education should be to provide students with a value system, a standard, a set of ideas--not to prepare them for a specific job."

12:04

Throughout the history of human history, countless examples substantiate the key role played by education in promoting the development of our society. However, problems such as what are the purposes of the education and which one is the most important among them - value system or qualified workers - have been put in front of us. In my opinion, educators should recognize the possibility and necessity to combine them together well instead of determine which is more important.

On the one hand, in any society, educators should take the survival of individuals as the most important item, which would give prominence to job-related purpose of education. We would look no further than the example of Northern Korea several years ago. Owing to some special reasons, which would have to be discussed here, Northern Korea has experienced the toughest stage during its foundation and its people suffered from starvation for several years. The people in Northern Korea, tormented by starvation, need something to eat and how to plant potatoes instead of a value system. Therefore, when the survival of people has been threatened, job-related training would be more important than other purposes of education.

On the other hand, education also should take into account the necessity of providing students a value system, a standard, a set of ideas. Only through this, education would orient the learners in order lest they would be misled in this complex society. Therefore, they would see a full picture of the society and be careful of the influence of their actions on themselves and others around them.

Simply put, without the consideration of the latter purpose, individuals and the society as a whole would suffer from countless moral problems due to the shortage of personal responsibility. Even in the advanced countries, crimes of all sorts, from robbery to murder, from thievery to those high-tech crimes, and so forth, would not just be owed to the mistreatment of their government or their laws. In this point, as far as I am concerned, personal responsibility, one part of personal value system, which would be shaped by education, whenever from the beginning of their formation or after their formation, plays a quite important role in those crimes. From the criminal cases, everyone who would like to live in a peaceful circumstance would jump to a conclusion: to education our citizens to a right direction - a value system on the right way.

Furthermore, without the attention of the long-term purpose of education, the human beings as a whole would suffer from some catastrophes. With the development of urbanization and globalization, while people within the scope of the whole world have enjoyed the advanced civilization, some of them and their offspring would suffer from the catastrophes brought by modern civilizations, such as air pollution, desertification, deforestation, shortage of fossil energy, and so on. To all intents and purposes, solution of those problems would call for the ideas of sustaining development and the ability to master the whole picture, which could be incubated to the modern people, especially those in power.

To conclusion, I would claim that, though education would have to take into consideration job-related purpose, educators should pay more attention to provide the learners with a value system, a standard, a set of ideas, which would benefit themselves and the society as a whole, even our offspring.

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12:49
写第三段没时间，只好仓皇结束。
全局观的英文谁知道啊？金山上查不到。

提纲：观点：两种教育都应注意。
1、技能培训为生存提供保障。
2、价值观教育更重要。
3、忽略后者导致道德问题。
4、忽略后者导致全社会问题。

fortitudesagUID: 139374

谢谢你！！
1、我觉得把item改为thing是不是更合适-------------我怎么感觉和你不一样，我再想想。
2、引用:which would give prominence to job-related purpose of education  
prominence是“突出, 显著, 突出物”的意思，你这里是这个意思吗
-----------------------------------------give prominence to 是词组，“突出”的意思
3、 look no further是什么意思------------------------We would look no further than the example of 好像是举例子的一种模式。
4、in order 和 lest不能连用--------------下面是我从网上查到的，我的校园网链不上，你可以自己看一看：
If you were to die today
... troubles. Because of the nature of his troubles, I discovered that he had no preparations
towards his death. I told him because of the nature of his dilemma, I advised him to
get his finances in order lest he hand over a disaster to his family. I ...
www.momof9splace.com/dietoday.html - 12k - 网页快照 - 类似网页
5、那个例子只想说明生存的必要性，确实有点不合适。

Anyway, thank you again!!!

fortitudesagUID: 139374

谢谢l-sunshine！！
我对你的建议都给出了例子，是从网上查到的，未必准确，有链接，你可以看一看。
1、the key role played by education (education playing) in promoting the development of our society-------------我的结构是在NCE4 关于custom那篇Dewey观点使用的，没错。
2、(such problems have been put in front of us that what…and among these purposes which one is of most importance—providing a decent value system or specific skills.这么安排是不是好点？)-------------------我认为把重点部分放在前面合适。
3、combine them （the two） together------------------为什么这么改？我没体会出来。
4、which (one) is more important------------------------------两种方法都行，下面是例子。

motivation in personal career? As a boss or manager, how can you repair and restore
of your employee’s motivation? 2. Which is more important: work or money? Would you
quit your job if you made a fortune or had a lot of money? In a 1995 poll ...
www.popbook.com/jinping/tp006.htm - 19k - 网页快照 - 类似网页

Intelligence and diligence , which one is more important ? (08/12). ...
www.ttvnol.com/forum/t_129418/3 - 39k - 补充材料 - 网页快照 - 类似网页

5、(and) a set of ideas----------------题目里就没有and。
6、others around them (them不要)-------------------------下面是例句。

This means children do not learn a language by copying their parents or others around them.
76. Which children learn to speak a language?
A. All children with parents. B. Children who go to school. C. Children who are clever. ...
zxjy.edu.xm.fj.cn/article3/ ShowArticle.asp?ArticleID=370 - 85k - 网页快照 - 类似网页

7、influence of their actions on(their actions’ influence on)---------------看下面例句。

Such an influence has indeed been observed in the simulations. Individuals of all generations learned to predict the influence of their actions on the position of the nearest food. If we examine how the ability ...
www.cs.tau.ac.il/~ruppin/ALseminar/oren.ps - 类似网页

8、 without the (不要)consideration of the latter purpose-----------------例句：

Unlike, Traditional terminal application which just imitate
desktop terminal version without the consideration of mobile device special requirements. ...
www.asiacorp.net/acn/1_3_2_1.asp - 22k - 网页快照 - 类似网页

9、（如果没时间even…可以不写,因为你已经交待了问题，而且重点在教育）--------------我是先写的后面，我习惯先挑容易的写。

10、 the（不要） human beings （society 或as a whole不要）as a whole----------------------

However the world at large has undergone transformation of various kinds
but the human beings as a whole need inner transformation so as to be able to see
and venture into purpose of our being what we are and what we are not. For one ...
www.geocities.com/lusseno/Pa4.htm - 13k - 补充材料 - 网页快照 - 类似网页

11、怎么都不扯教育？！总结一下。---------------------确实扯的少了一点。总结句：which could be incubated to the modern people, especially those in power 还是扯了一点。

12、是太迟了,好晕。---------------------什么太迟了，我没懂？

13、说字数在20内最易于传达信息-------------------是指一整句话，还是指一个分句。

Anyway, thank you again!!

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fortitudesagUID: 139374

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fortitudesagUID: 139374

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