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wallisUID: 111832

Issue 28"Students should memorize facts only after they have studied the ideas, trends, and concepts that help explain those facts. Students who have learned only facts have learned very little

    Due to the fact that this is an era with innovations in each branch of science every year, students are expected to learn a lot more than their forbears do to catch up with the paces of social progress. But every person has a limited time allocated for studying for the reason that recreation and entertainment are important and indispensable element of one's life. It is clear that it is vital to everyone to make good optimization of his or her time. So it is impossible for student to memorize all facts after they have studied all the ideas, trends, and concepts that help explain those facts. But that is not equal to abandoning grasping all the ideas, trends, and concepts of every knowledge they learn. We ought to alter our strategy according to different kind of knowledge to promote the real effect of our time.
     
    Among the wide scope of knowledge the students may find useful, what is the basis of it? Or, what is the dominant part of the knowledge? That the part of knowledge that serve as the building-up block of the other parts in the sense of logic or others is the dominant one is a generally accepted proposition. For instance, astronomy is constructed on the basis of math, physics, chemistry and some others. I am sure it is these basic parts that mainly influence the performance the students will show during their future career lives. For example, a student majoring in computer science may meet many problems they haven’t seen before during their practical work. The solution for it the student comes up with always has strong relationship with much basic knowledge he learned during college. The basic knowledge is the component of every related advanced knowledge that seems very appealing to people. We can't imagine that without basic concepts in physics how can we develop the advanced technology in electronic communication? So the student must pay much attention to the basic knowledge that is the necessary foundation for their future development in their major fields. Only in this way the students will have less unnecessary puzzling questions caused by lack of full mastery of the basic knowledge in the future, in other words they make a good optimization of their time.  

    Every student is destined to have challenges in their work! Many unfamiliar situations will inevitably emerge when they solve technical problems, so they must refer to different kind of resources to find an access to the answer. So consequently, if a person has a broad knowledge, he will have a good opportunity to excel in his career. Admittedly, students better have the ability to augment their knowledge, which is affected by their knowledge foundation. Good knowledge foundation is the prerequisite for a broad knowledge range in that the mastery of a wide range calls for a good comprehension capacity that is determined by the foundation to a great extent. Poor knowledge foundation will hamper the student’s knowledge accumulation process, which is because he will always be blocked by the difficulties originating from obscure concept of the basic. We cannot master the manipulation of multiply before the full understanding of addition.

    In sum, we can say that in the case of the knowledge that doesn't play a significantly basic role, the student may just memorize the fact without necessarily mastering the ideas, trends, and concepts that help explain those facts if they don't have adequate time. An extensive knowledge scope will undoubtedly help the student find the access to various practical problems, while basic knowledge is of significant importance in the solving process. We need to strike a proper balance between the two aspects of study.

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Issue 28"Students should memorize facts only after they have studied the ideas, trends, and concepts that help explain those facts. Students who have learned only facts have learned very little
这句话是说，学生如果能先去了解一些能解释某个事实的各方面资料（包括ideas, trends, concepts）再去记住这个事实，他学到的要比仅仅去记这个事实学到得要多。

Due to the fact that this is an era with innovations in each branch of science every year,(这句话有点别扭，是什么意思啊) students are expected to
learn a lot more(will "far more" do better?) than their forbears do to catch up with the paces of social progress. But every person has a limited time allocated for studying for(去掉for) the reason that recreation and entertainment are important and indispensable element(s) of one's life. It is clear that it is vital to(for) everyone to make good optimization of his or her time. So it is impossible for student to memorize all facts after they have studied all the ideas, trends, and concepts that help explain those facts. But that is not equal to abandoning grasping all the ideas, trends, and concepts of every knowledge they learn. We ought to alter our strategy according to different kind(s) of knowledge to promote the real effect of our time.
从这一段来看，作者的观点是：学生没有足够的时间在记所有事实前，去了解所有前面提到的东西，但是学生不应该都不去了解。

Among the wide scope of knowledge the students may find useful, what is the basis (of it)? Or, what is the dominant part of the knowledge? That the part of knowledge that serve as the building-up block of the other parts in the sense of logic or others is the dominant one is a generally accepted proposition. For instance, astronomy is constructed on the basis of math, physics, chemistry and some others. I am sure it is these basic parts that mainly influence the performance the students will show during their future career lives. For example, a student majoring in computer science may meet many problems they haven’t seen before during their practical work. The solution for it the student comes up with always has strong relationship with much basic knowledge he learned during college. The basic knowledge is the component of every related advanced knowledge that seems very appealing to people. We can't imagine that without basic concepts in physics how can we develop the advanced technology in electronic communication? So the student must pay much attention to the basic knowledge that is the necessary foundation for their future development in their major fields. Only in this way the students will have less unnecessary puzzling questions caused by lack of full mastery of the basic knowledge in the future, in other words they make a good optimization of their time.
(这段说要重视基础知识的积累，但这和中心有关系吗？)
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Every student is destined to have challenges in their work! Many unfamiliar situations will inevitably emerge when they solve technical problems, so they must refer to different kind(s) of resources to find an access to the answer. So consequently, if a person has a broad knowledge, he will have a good opportunity to excel in his career. Admittedly, students better have the ability to augment their knowledge, which is affected by their knowledge foundation. Good knowledge foundation is the prerequisite for a broad knowledge range in that the mastery of a wide range calls for a good comprehension capacity that is determined by the foundation to a great extent. Poor knowledge foundation will hamper the student’s knowledge accumulation process, which is because he will always be blocked by the difficulties originating from obscure concept of the basic. We cannot master the manipulation of multiply before the full understanding of addition.
(这段在说学生要有增加自己的知识面，对吧?，好像和中心也没什么关系)

In sum, we can say that in the case of the knowledge that doesn't play a significantly basic role, the student may just memorize the fact without necessarily mastering the ideas, trends, and concepts that help explain those facts if they don't have adequate time. An extensive knowledge scope will undoubtedly help the student find the access to various practical problems, while basic knowledge is of significant importance in the solving process. We need to strike a proper balance between the two aspects of study.
看完之后，有点不太明白作者的意图是什么，能不能解释一下。

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词语拼写还好，在word里改了一下，全文612字
Because this is an era with innovations in each branch of science every year, students are expected to learn a lot more than their forbears do (have done) to catch up with the pace of social progress. However, every person has a limited time allocated for studying for the reason that recreation and entertainment are important and indispensable element(s) of one's life. It is clear that it is vital to everyone to make good optimization of his or her time. Therefore, it is impossible for student to memorize all facts after they have studied all the ideas, trends, and concepts that help explain those facts. That is not equal to abandoning grasping all (any of否定句) the ideas, trends, and concepts of every knowledge they learn. We ought to alter our strategy according to different kind(s) of knowledge to promote the real effect of our time.

Among the wide scope of knowledge the students may find useful, what is the basis of it? (改为What is the basis of the wide scope of knowledge the students may find useful?) Alternatively, what is the dominant part of the knowledge? That the part of knowledge that serves as the building-up block of the other parts in the sense of logic or others is the dominant one is a generally accepted proposition.(这么长的句子) For instance, astronomy is constructed on the basis of math, physics, chemistry and some others (some other disciplines). 两个例子之间跳得太快了I am sure it is these basic parts that mainly influence the performance the students will show (看着吃亏，改为the performance of the students好了，虽然我知道你本意就在于写长句子^_^) during their future career lives. For example, a student majoring in computer science may meet many problems they have not seen before during their practical work. The solution for it (for it is not necessary here) the student comes up with always has strong relationship (有很紧密的联系，I am not sure which is the best way to say so) with much (those basic knowledge) basic knowledge he (has learnt) learned during (at) college. The basic knowledge is the component of every related advanced knowledge that seems very appealing to people. We cannot imagine that without (the) basic concepts in physics how we can develop the advanced technology in electronic communication. Therefore, the student must pay much attention to the basic knowledge that is the necessary foundation for their future development in their major fields. Only in this way the students will have less unnecessary puzzling questions caused by (the) lack of full mastery of the basic knowledge in the future. In other words, they make a good optimization of their time. 基础知识组成advanced知识，学生需掌握基础，你该把同一类意思放到一起说，前后有点散。

Every student is destined to have challenges in (meet challenges from) their work! Many unfamiliar situations will inevitably emerge when they solve technical problems, so they must refer to different kind(s) of resources to find an access to the answer(s).注意句子意思与单复数 (ONLY use CONSEQUENTLY here!) So consequently, if a person has a broad(er) knowledge, he will have a good (better) opportunity to excel in his career. Admittedly, students had better have the ability to augment their knowledge, which is affected by their knowledge foundation. 这句不甚懂。(A) Good knowledge foundation is the prerequisite for a broad knowledge range in that the mastery of a wide range calls for a good comprehension capacity that is determined by the foundation largely. Poor knowledge foundation will hamper the student’s knowledge accumulation process, which is because he will always be blocked by the difficulties originating from (the) obscure concept(s) of the basic knowledge. We cannot master the manipulation of multiply before the full (before fully understanding) understanding of addition. 这段Chinglish比较多。最重要的是，你这段没有topic sentence，写法很是意识流，先写知识面广容易致胜，后写知识面广取决于基础扎实，那么到底说什么呢？不如分两段说清楚。

In sum, we can say that in the case of the knowledge that doesn't play a significantly basic role, the student may just memorize the fact without necessarily mastering the ideas, trends, and concepts that help explain those facts if they don't have adequate time. An extensive knowledge scope will undoubtedly help the student find the access to various practical problems, while basic knowledge is of significant importance in the solving process (in the process of solving problems). We need to strike a proper balance between the two aspects of study.

感觉你写文章比较喜欢想到什么写什么，没有怎么顾及段内，段间以及全文逻辑关系。另外感觉你全文主旨和你中间两段论述脱节，论述没有怎么证明你自己的观点。就是根据不同只是来寻找记忆和不记忆细节的balance，但是很可惜，你的论述在绕弯子，始终没有绕到上面来。多看几遍似乎可以看出你论述和主题的联系，但是不很明显，最好说清晰一些。

wallisUID: 111832

第一段我表明了自己的观点‘it is impossible for student to memorize all facts after they have studied all the ideas, trends, and concepts that help explain those facts. But that is not equal to abandoning grasping all the ideas, trends, and concepts of every knowledge they learn.’也就是：学生不可能有那么多时间去详细学习所有的知识，弄清楚来龙去脉，但是也不等于说都这样做。本段最后我认为要‘alter our strategy according to different kind(s) of knowledge’，来提高时间的利用率（因为时间is limitted)

第二段我指出了应该重视基础知识，对它们要study the ideas, trends, and concepts that help explain those facts.
原因是它们是‘building-up block of the other parts’，否则就要出现‘unnecessary puzzling questions caused by lack of full mastery of the basic knowledge in the future’。

第三段我说明了知识面的宽广对学生的成功非常重要，有同时指出知识面的增加要以基础知识的牢靠为前提的。
最后一段，我得出结论in the case of the knowledge that doesn't play a significantly basic role, the student may just memorize the fact without necessarily mastering the ideas, trends, and concepts that help explain those facts if they don't have adequate time，和第一段照应了一下，最后得出结论‘We need to strike a proper balance between the two aspects of study‘

个人感觉，自己心里面意思清楚，但是没有很好地完全表达出来，让人觉得论述结构不够紧密。要改进阿！

谢谢两位大虾的修改，多谢！！