issue37 关于竞争，郑重重写的，应该读起来风格比较具体实在，望大侠们斧正

~白鸽~UID: 148401

37"In most societies, competition generally has more of a negative than a positive effect."

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Since resources in our world are always relatively limited for human desire, competition will turn out to be an eternal subject in any societies. Granted that it has both a negative and a positive effect, its positive aspect is bound to outweigh its negative one.

First of all, competition forces people to act actively. If someone have not worked hard enough,odds are that he or she will be defeated or eliminated through selection or contest.If so, one always can not obtain what he or she want. So everyone in competition must feel practical and potential pressure from others. This course forms a rigid incentive and constraint for people to try their best to avoid to be  losers. Just such situation make s our society  dynamic to advance. there is a case in point, before reform, China always shirk the subject of competition, so everyone had not enough power to work hard. China had suffered from a long distance low-efficency of production. However, its economy has come to be very powerful through the introduction of competition since reform because people 's activeness has been inspired immensely.


Futhermore, competition will be an appropriate discovery  mechanism. That is to say, some important signal of social evaluation can be feedbacked through competition mechanism. Especially in market economy, price as a kind of signal which reflects the social evaluation of a certain goods will be discoverd by competition under certain circumstances. A equilibrium price will be reached through the competition of demand and supply in the market. Such price is just the useful signal that we need. This priciple also appears in human resource election. Employers always design some kind of exam to test prospective employees for their own  purposes. And this is merely a competition. By such means, they will find the most desirable ones that can bring them the greatest returns.

Meanwhile, although competition also has some adverse effect to our society,fortunately, cooperation usually can make up those defects. It is likely that competition lead to excessive hostile sense between people and unnecessary wastage in a group. Therefore, human beings also can utilize cooperation to coordinate with each other and work for a common goal. In game theory, there is a famous case: "prisoners' dilema", which illustrates that
cooperation will be better than noncooperation---everyone just consider for their own interest.  

To sum up, people nowadays still must recognize the indispensable role of  competition. Even  if it has some negative effects, people should try to complement and improve its influence by some alternatives, such as cooperation, rather than focus eyes on criticize it too much.

豌豆UID: 144569

hoho
养精蓄锐了再来改

mkathyUID: 149800

文中有一些语法错误，我想应该尽量避免吧！比如说
第一段第二行应该为any society 吧，
第二段第一行应该是someone has， 不能是have；第三行：one always can not obtain what he or she want很别扭， 应该写为：always one can not obtain what he or she wants,;.第五行， Just such situation make， mkae应为makes； 第七行so everyone had not 应为had no 或者didnot have；
第三段：some important signal ，signal应该为复数；feedback应该只能做名词用，要表示其动词意思，可以用短语feed back， 分词就应该是 be fed bac；some kind of exam 说的很不地道，我想直接说some exams就可以了，应该这里用kind不合适，
第四段：to our society 应该为on our society；competition lead to 应为leads to ；between people 应为among people；everyone just consider 应为considers；
最后一段：rather than focus eyes on criticize it too much. rather than focus their eyes on criticizing it too much.
]另外，文章的那几个段落之间的过渡词用的不是很合适（个人意见：）
小女不才，这是我第一次在版上欣赏别人的大作，有不当之处，望见谅！另，由于今天的时间关系，没有仔细研究 文章的构思，只是匆匆看了两遍，等名天有时间了再来拜读！

~白鸽~UID: 148401

文章的那几个段落之间的过渡词用的不是很合适??
怎么不合适？ 请说具体
关于some，我想说主要是指某种的意思，而不是一些的意思。所以有的地方用的是动词单数形式。
谢谢先：）


btw：怎么尽是mm来看我的文章？

feier521UID: 109747

最初由 ~白鸽~ 发布
[B]btw：怎么尽是mm来看我的文章？[/B]

:)

Since resources in our world are always relatively（always 和relatively 两个副词放在一起有点矛盾，可以删掉always） limited for human(‘s) desire, competition will turn out to be an eternal subject in any societies(society). Granted that it has both a negative and a positive effect, its positive aspect is bound to outweigh its negative one.(最后一句是你的topic，下面的论证完了两段competition 的好处，应该多少提点outweigh negative effects吧)

First of all, competition forces people to act actively. If someone have（has） not worked hard enough,odds are that he or she will be defeated or eliminated through selection or contest. If so, one always can not obtain what he or she want. So everyone in competition must feel practical and potential pressure from others. This course forms a rigid incentive and constraint（删掉好些，incentive 和constraint反义） for people to try their best to avoid to be losers（to avoid losing是不是简洁点）. (Just删掉) such situation makes our society dynamic to advance. there is a case in point, before reform, China always shirk(ed) the subject of competition, so everyone had not enough power(power是内在的力量，改为动力较好motivation) to work hard. China had suffered from a long distance low-efficency of production（suffer from long-term low efficiency）. However, its economy has come to be (become) very powerful through the introduction of competition since reform because people 's activeness has been inspired immensely.

Futhermore, competition will be an appropriate discovery mechanism. That is to say, some important signal(s) of social evaluation can be feedbacked (feedback是名词，fed back) through competition mechanism. Especially in market economy, price as a kind of signal which reflects the social evaluation of a certain goods will be discovered by competition under certain circumstances. A equilibrium price will be reached through the competition of demand and supply in the market（意思是供需之间的竞争。through market competition）. Such price is just the useful signal that we need（较虚，可以具体论证一下，市场竞争对消费者的好处，物美价廉，优质的服务等）. This priciple(principle) also appears in human resource election. Employers always design some kind of exam(s) to test prospective employees for their own purposes. And this is merely（不恰当also） a competition. By such means, they will find the most desirable ones that can bring them the greatest returns.

Meanwhile, although competition also has some adverse effect to our society,fortunately, cooperation usually can make up those defects.（此段没有说negative effects, 也没有说如何outweight，却加了个cooperation？如果这样写，不如在topic加上。） It is likely that competition lead(s) to excessive hostile sense (hostility)between people and unnecessary wastage in a group. Therefore, human beings also can（can also） utilize cooperation to coordinate with each other and work for a common goal. In game theory, there is a famous case: "prisoners' dilemma(dilemma)", which illustrates that cooperation will be better than noncooperation---everyone just consider(s) for their(his or her) own interest.

To sum up, people nowadays still must recognize the indispensable role of competition. Even if it has some negative effects, people should try to complement and improve its influence by some alternatives, such as cooperation, rather than focus (eyes) on criticize(focus on criticizing) it too much.

写的还不错，加油。

~白鸽~UID: 148401

此段没有说negative effects, 也没有说如何outweight，却加了个cooperation？如果这样写，不如在topic加上。  
关于这个问题，我想我确实写的不够紧。  我想要从侧面反映尽管竞争也有缺点，但这些缺点是可以被弥补的。  所以总的来说 竞争是有积极意义的。也许是文字驾驭能力还不够强。

anyway  谢谢你们：）