【独立写作】 Teeny 作业贴

teenylUID：3459749

yzy0704 发表于 2013-12-13 10:56
你好，这是上周五本该给你改的作文。。so sorry我延误了，我以为修改铺活动停了来着~~~

非常感谢！

oceanflying2013UID：3486877

为什么你的文档我下载不下来啊。。。

oceanflying2013UID：3486877

貌似我被安排修改你的16号的作业，可否直接把文章发在这里啊。。

不知道什么原因，你上传的文件，我下载不下来。。

我和中国有7个小时时差，大概最快要18号修改给你了

teenylUID：3459749

oceanflying2013 发表于 2013-12-18 01:45
貌似我被安排修改你的16号的作业，可否直接把文章发在这里啊。。

不知道什么原因，你上传的文件，我下载 ...

好，谢谢！

teenylUID：3459749

oceanflying2013 发表于 2013-12-18 01:43
为什么你的文档我下载不下来啊。。。

你好，我试了直接贴上来，但总是提示系统错误，试过几次都不可以。。。
我把我的作业上传到网盘了，您再试试，麻烦了。
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1go1D5

teenylUID：3459749

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should give school-age children money as a reward for getting a high mark (grade) in school.

In this day and age, increasing number of people would like to pay more attention to their children's education. In order to let them get a higher mark in school, some parents give their children money as a reward. On the contrary, others hold an opposite opinion; they regard this action as a misleading education for students. I prefer the second view and think that parents should not give school-age children money as a reward for getting a high mark in school.

Admittedly, maybe this action will stimulate students' passion of learning in some degree. In a short term students would like to take a lot of time to study and prepare examinations carefully in order to get a high mark and the reward. Apparently, maybe you can see your children become harder than before. But for a long term, you will find fatal defects of this action.

Firstly, it will mislead students and make them form a wrong objective, even let them become greedy. For instance, when I was in my university, I took the private teacher as a part time job in my spare time. I remember there was a boy who I taught; his father always gave him 200 Yuan as a reward when he got a high mark, and besides, if his rank rose, he could get additional 100 Yuan. At the beginning, this way was useful for this boy, and he got twice high marks continuously, but then he asked his father to raise the reward. Later, this reward became higher and higher. When his father recognized that he was wrong. Everything was too late, because once he put forward that he would cut this reward, the boy would threaten his father that he would stop studying and deny attending the exam. Thus, giving money to students as a reward is not a wise choice.

Besides, this action also will kill students' curiosities. If parents just reward their children when they get a high mark, they will let students think that the score is the most important thing in their study. They will focus on the examination, but do not think why do they study and which subject is attractive to them. Even some of them loose the curiosities for new knowledge. Thus, it's not hard to imagine that once they leave school and enter to the society, they would find they has lost their passion for new things.

From what has been discussed above, giving school-age children money as a reward for getting a high mark in school not only cannot stimulate students to study harder for a long time, but also can cause some adverse effects to children. Thus, we can safely draw the conclusion that parents should not encourage their children through this way.

teenylUID：3459749

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should give school-age children money as a reward for getting a high mark (grade) in school.

In this day and age, increasing number of people would like to pay more attention to their children's education. In order to let them get a higher mark in school, some parents give their children money as a reward. On the contrary, others hold an opposite opinion; they regard this action as a misleading education for students. I prefer the second view and think that parents should not give school-age children money as a reward for getting a high mark in school.

Admittedly, maybe this action will stimulate students' passion of learning in some degree. In a short term students would like to take a lot of time to study and prepare examinations carefully in order to get a high mark and the reward. Apparently, maybe you can see your children become harder than before. But for a long term, you will find fatal defects of this action.

Firstly, it will mislead students and make them form a wrong objective, even let them become greedy. For instance, when I was in my university, I took the private teacher as a part time job in my spare time. I remember there was a boy who I taught; his father always gave him 200 Yuan as a reward when he got a high mark, and besides, if his rank rose, he could get additional 100 Yuan. At the beginning, this way was useful for this boy, and he got twice high marks continuously, but then he asked his father to raise the reward. Later, this reward became higher and higher. When his father recognized that he was wrong. Everything was too late, because once he put forward that he would cut this reward, the boy would threaten his father that he would stop studying and deny attending the exam. Thus, giving money to students as a reward is not a wise choice.

teenylUID：3459749

Besides, this action also will kill students' curiosities. If parents just reward their children when they get a high mark, they will let students think that the score is the most important thing in their study. They will focus on the examination, but do not think why do they study and which subject is attractive to them. Even some of them loose the curiosities for new knowledge. Thus, it's not hard to imagine that once they leave school and enter to the society, they would find they has lost their passion for new things.

From what has been discussed above, giving school-age children money as a reward for getting a high mark in school not only cannot stimulate students to study harder for a long time, but also can cause some adverse effects to children. Thus, we can safely draw the conclusion that parents should not encourage their children through this way.

teenylUID：3459749

oceanflying2013 发表于 2013-12-18 01:43
为什么你的文档我下载不下来啊。。。

貌似因为一次上传有字数要求，我在上面分两部分上传了，供参考。

oceanflying2013UID：3486877

ok了。。我开始改了。。一会儿给你。。

不好意思，我因为不在国内，有时差。。。

oceanflying2013UID：3486877

修改的时候感觉很舒服。。学习了！

希望可以再次交流

teenylUID：3459749

oceanflying2013 发表于 2013-12-18 17:24
修改的时候感觉很舒服。。学习了！

希望可以再次交流

修改的非常细致，感谢！

maomao1771UID：3489712

不好意思，这么就久才给你改完作文~~~抱歉~~~

文章思路、举例说明都超级好~~赞一个~~~

oceanflying2013UID：3486877

这个。。希望不是好为人师哈。。也请楼上的同学不要介意。。本来是想学习的。。于是在学习的同时稍微修改了一下。。

teenylUID：3459749

oceanflying2013 发表于 2013-12-18 22:27
这个。。希望不是好为人师哈。。也请楼上的同学不要介意。。本来是想学习的。。于是在学习的同时稍微修改了 ...

不会~~非常感谢！是我意外的收获~
关于pressure的用法很受用，我也刚刚查了一下，确实是我没注意过的问题。