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jxkingUID: 141801

161. "In this age of intensive media coverage, it is no longer possible for  
a society to regard any woman or man as a hero. The reputation of anyone  
who is subjected to media scrutiny will eventually be diminished."  
在今天这个媒体铺天盖地的社会中，人们已经很难把任何人当作英雄了。任何人只要是沦为 媒体的话题

，那么他注定会名声扫地。

This is a information age, although many of things that we have almost no chance to learn the truth in the relatively secretive society, now have been easily attained through media and the relevant attitudes have been drastically refreshed, that our criteria of judging hero still remain the same. Hero is regarded and recognized as a result of one's behavior that must be largely contributed to society and country, rather than is determined by few people or media. In this sense, hero does exist, regardless of what influence media would impose on.

Many people may sincerely believe that it is difficult for a society to regard anyone as a hero due to effect
of media, however we do not have to go very far to see the invalidity of this judgment. Generally speaking, the function of media is mainly to report a incident. If it were a incident that is harmful to society, we together object and despise it. Inversely, it were a event that is beneficial to most people in society, we praise and learn from it. Thereby, those who act as protagonists in the public-benefited activities would naturally be regard as heroes and acquire positive report by media. For example, a young pioneer who actively provides his seat to the pregnant and the old in bus is regarded as a hero of politeness and love; a young man who saves a drowning child in the river is regarded as a hero of kindness and oldness; a thoughtful scientist who solves out the main problem are regard as hero of wisdom and devotion. In all, heroes is objectively heroes, it is what he perform rather than media that makes him to be our hero.

Another misconception that many people may hold is that hero is necessarily connected with reputation. But they fail to notice that there are numerous heroes in our society that their names and stories are volunteer or passively concealed. This is simple principle, even one can not deduce it oneself, that we can easily draw from the concrete fact of Anti-flood battle in 1998. It was reported through media that there are nearly twenty thousand soldiers who joined this incident, and they functioned as main force of anti-flood and devoted themselves even precious lives in token of affection and fearlessness. Therefore the media profoundly reported their anecdotes and people cast vast gratitude and adoration. However, almost individuals are not solitarily reported. Do not we think they are hero? And where is their reputation?

Some people may also take for granted that the reputation of any hero is destined to be ruined due to the intervention of media. Yet, a careful examination would reveal this is not the case. Take SARS for example, as we know, SARS is fiercely infective disease cause by Coronvirus. It is easily transmitted by air and inhaled through respiratory tract. As one of my anesthesiology professor told us in class, "Here are several pictures of my college classmates and friends in our hospital, in the dangerous battle against SARS, they all unluckily get infected and now had died. they are our heroes, we should learn from their spirit and keep them in the bottom of heart forever." I can still remember that out professor spoke with tears as well as passion. Definitely, to save lives of patients is doctors' obligation, while they have no obligation of sacrificing themselves. Nevertheless, they devoted their precious lives.  And we can not think out any reason that the media could use to deteriorate these heroes' reputation, because hero is after all hero, and they should receive nothing but gratitude and respect.

In sum, one of the fundamental functions of media is to disinter heroes, while heroes are not necessarily those who share specific reputation. In the promise of another tomorrow, we will never let heroes be diminished, because they are always served as paradigm in our heart.



后记：
1. 本文一如上回说得“拨洋葱皮” 写作方法。那道题目先找出三个意群：媒体，英雄， 名声。

2. 在第一段， 我主要写媒体有发掘英雄的作用。第二段， 我写英雄不一定都有名声， 第三段，我写名声是有客观性和稳定性的，不是媒体想败坏就能败坏的。

3. 不知道有没有同学会说我这么写会跑题。个人认为： issue写作其实可以这么写。 我们几乎所有的关于issue的写作和评判标准， 好像都是来自于新东方的老师，孙元等人，可他们毕竟还是国人， ETS的思维未必就是他们想得那样的， 而且好像我的标准都是来自于“通才与专才”那一篇文的分析。我读了ETS公布另外的几篇例文， 虽然还是读不懂，但能感觉到风格与“通才与专才”迥异。诚然，“通才与专才”是一篇在结构，内容，语言上都值得高度评价与模仿的文章， 但是，或许我们太模仿它了，以至于思维定势，其他的写作思路的灵感被屏蔽了。不知有人认同我的观点吗？

4. 我又陷入一个迷惘， 大家看看有没有同感。 有一位G友看了我的文章后说用词太浅，他还说一般让别人读不懂的文章往往能得高分， 就像我们读不太懂ETS给的5，6分的范文一样。我刚开始练习写作，写来的文章我的同学都读不懂，我还觉得感觉不错， 现在我上GTER看大家的文章， 有几位同学，词汇的确丰富，也有话写， 但是我就是读不太懂， 有的版主还点评说好。难道是我的阅读能力太差劲， 还是欣赏品位变化了，觉得因改写浅一点，让别人读懂一点， 因为写过20多篇文章， 有的常用句式和文章得谋篇看多用多了， 尤其是开头结尾， 就那么几句， 我看都想吐了！

5. 我现在离考试还有20天，但写作时间还是远远超标（>100min）,  我想除了真是牛人外，我们很难单位时间里完成五六百字的写作。题目还有可能晦涩难懂，怎么还能写得既不跑题有很深刻了。虽然古人有明知不可而为之， 但我们还是要有一个最坏的打算， 在那样的情形下，不如写浅一些。有人同意我的观点吗？

6。 写道正文第三段，我举了SARS的例子，因为深有体会就有感而发，个人认为：医生有救死扶伤的义务，但是他们没有送死的义务。SARS这场灾难中，天津医科大学，天津医科大学总医院及其他各附属医院，也受到了重创。不少资历较深的大夫，教授，研究生，本科生们奔赴红区前线，他们其中有不少人已经牺牲，非身临其境者，恐怕难感受到到生命的脆弱与凝重。我想借此机会呼吁社会能理解关心医务工作者的艰难，呼吁我们改善一下紧张的医患关系， 呼吁政府能够采取具体行动保护医生。 最后，让我们永远记住2003年的春天，面对SARS之矛袭来，避之不及的时刻，恐惧与退缩相伴，却有一群普普通通的人，用自己的身体和意志筑成一道无形的盾牌，前仆后继，无私无畏，他（她）们就是我们的博士、硕士、医生、护士以及所有的医务工作者。

libbyUID: 151455

This is a information age, although many of things that we have almost no chance to learn the truth in the relatively secretive society, now have been easily attained through media and the relevant attitudes have been drastically refreshed, that our criteria of judging hero still remain the same. (This sentence make me confused,I don't know which is the subject.我想although是引导让步状语从句的，但后面的主语我不知道是那个了，that our criteria of judging hero still remain the same中的that引导的是什么句子啊？）)Hero is regarded and recognized as a result of one's behavior that must be largely contributed to society and country, rather than is determined by few people or media. In this sense, hero does exist, regardless of what （regardless of what 是不是可以用whatever代替）influence media would impose on.

Many people may sincerely believe that it is difficult for a society to regard anyone as a hero due to effect
of media, however we do not have to go very far to see the invalidity of this judgment. Generally speaking, the function of media is mainly to report a incident. If it were a incident that is harmful to society, we together（most of us  would）object and despise it. Inversely, it were a event that is beneficial to most people in society, we praise and learn from it. （谈人就谈人嘛，又在说事的好坏了，我感觉有点别扭）Thereby, those who act as protagonists in the public-benefited activities would naturally be regard as heroes and acquire positive report by media. For example, a young pioneer who actively provides his seat to the pregnant and the old in bus is regarded as a hero of politeness and love; a young man who saves a drowning child in the river is regarded as a hero of kindness and boldness; a
thoughtful scientist who solves out the main problem are regard as hero of wisdom and devotion. （regard as 这里用了3次，句式没有变化，能不能换成其它词语如：consider等）In all,heroes is objectively heroes, it is what he perform rather than media that makes him to be our hero.

Another misconception that many people may hold is that hero is necessarily connected with reputation.
But they fail to notice that there are numerous heroes in our society that their names and stories are volunteer or passively concealed. This is simple principle, even one can not deduce it oneself, that we can easily draw from the concrete fact of Anti-flood battle in 1998. It was reported through media that there are nearly twenty thousand soldiers who joined this incident, and they functioned as main force of anti-flood and devoted themselves even precious lives in token of affection and fearlessness. Therefore the media profoundly reported their anecdotes and people cast vast gratitude and adoration. However, almost individuals （什么意思啊？）are not solitarily reported. Do not we think they are hero（有没有复数哦？）? And where is their reputation?

Some people may also take for granted that the reputation of any hero is destined to be ruined due to the intervention of media. Yet, a careful examination would reveal this is not the case. Take SARS for xample, as we know, SARS is fiercely infective disease cause by Coronvirus. It is easily transmitted by air and haled through respiratory tract. As one of my anesthesiology professor told us in class, "Here are several pictures of my college classmates and friends in our hospital, in the dangerous battle against SARS, they all unluckily get infected and now had died. they are our heroes, we should learn from their spirit and keep them in the bottom of heart forever." I can still remember that out professor spoke with tears as well as passion. Definitely, to save lives of patients is doctors' obligation, while they have no obligation of acrificing themselves. Nevertheless, they devoted their precious lives. And we can not think out any reason that the media could use to deteriorate these heroes' reputation, because hero is after all hero, and they should receive nothing but gratitude and respect.

In sum, one of the fundamental functions of media is to disinter heroes, while heroes are not necessarily（needn't be) those who share specific reputation. In the promise of another tomorrow, we will never let heroes be
diminished, because they are always served as paradigm in our heart.

libbyUID: 151455

161. "In this age of intensive media coverage, it is no longer possible for
a society to regard any woman or man as a hero. The reputation of anyone
who is subjected to media scrutiny will eventually be diminished.
If I write this topic ,I will write following several points!
First paragraph,I will  assert my point of disagree with the opinion!
Second,I will define what is hero,and the actual function of the media including the relationship between them!
Third,I will substantiate the media make us know well of hero but not contempt them,although there are some negative influences!
Last ,I will draw a conclusion.The most important thing is the attitude of how do people consider the problem of the hero and the report!Any thinking man should has his own idea and know how to consider a hero,even if a hero is not perfect, so the media's influence is fewer.
我想举例子，多举一些大家都知道的，而且是老美也很熟悉的，要好些吧！如果都具自己身边的小事觉得没有说服力。呵呵！我也是新手，没有经验，大家多多指教哦！谢谢！

DeliaUID: 151415

When I first read this statement, I found it ridiculous:
1.Contemporary sociaty does not have heros?On the contrary, we have a lot. For example...
2.What will media do with the heros.
3.If one means to be a hero, and unwisely choose subjection to the media,  he will be diminished ultimately.

angel_naliUID: 148055

This is a information age,(表达过于直接，"technological advanced sciety" may be better)although many of things that we have almost no chance to learn the truth in the relatively secretive society(,) now have been easily attained through media and (缺乏连接词语）the relevant attitudes have been drastically refreshed, that our criteria of judging hero still remain the same. Hero is regarded and recognized as a result of one's behavior that must be largely contributed to society and country（直接表述by their great contribution或许好些） , rather than is determined by few （a few, 因为few表示否定，我想你是想表述少数的意思吧。）people or media. In this sense, hero does exist, regardless of what influence media would impose on.
不好意思。我只用心看了第一段，因为我感觉你的观察视角和我的有很大的差异，我无法理解你的一些例子的论证意义。还有，提一个小建议，尝试着让自己relax一些，不要刻意的去使用一些很复杂的句式，毕竟，写文章最主要的目的还是得到ETS的认可，而这主要建立在理解的基础上。
还有，很喜欢你关于医务工作人员的例子，无论和主体的关联性如何，我对他们的献身精神表示敬意。继续努力。加油！