Issue94 不会举例，批批我！(3月10日考）

budlingUID: 148774

Issue94 : Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study because acquiring knowledge of various academic disciplines is the best way to become truly educated.

Do you contemplate consciously why university adopts the present way to fulfill its hallowed obligation to cultivate students who are the future hope of societies development and shouldering the significandt resposibilities? Many present that university should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study. In my opinion, it is ,at least, a superficial assessment which is ostensibly rational, but actually arbitrary.

This requirement of univesity on students may make them increasingly passive during their study experiences and fail to devote their energy and efforts to learning their favorite fields of study. On the one hand, since the saying "Interest is one's best teacher" has been recognized as an accredited axiom, requiring every student to take many irrelevant curricula to their beloved majors is sure to make students lose their activities to study. Even some courses, which are the very detestable fractions , can make this requirement turn out to be counterproductive.That is to say, the way acquring knowledge of various academic disciplines won't make students become truly educated, instead, students will lose their interests to acquire any fields of knowledge , even their original favorite majors. On the other hand, even if students remain their strong appetites to studying their key and preferred curricula successfully, they have had little redundent energy and time to care them for the sake of their time's being occupied by thoes varied courses outsidetheir fields of study. In a word, from the perspective of some students, detriment of the way outstripes benefit.

For different students, university should require them to take courses distinctively. This era, which is sometimes portayed as dominated by the experience of change at break-neck speed, increasingly needs both specialists and generalists. It is associated with the university's educational way tightly. For the students who are unambiguous to their majors they will pursue and engage in the future, university should allow them to choose the relevant and useful curricula self-directely. They should become the targets of college education to the specialists. And for the students who haven't decide what professions they want follow indeed hereafter, university should offer a variety of courses outsite their fields of study which are chosen temporarily or passively. Facing to so many diverse fields of study, I believe these students will find their beloved majors. What’s more, these varied curricula can broad the students' scope of knowledge unnotely, and make students touch on various academic realms thoughly. At the same time, it makes preparation for cultivating the future generalists.

In a summary, the way requiring every student to take a variety of courses prove impractial. Everything are different in the world, so students are not exception. There will be a better effect, provided university adopts different educational ways on different students.

怎样才能写得多点啊？多谢！

imongUID: 140258

You need some concrete examples...倒~不会举例子？看看别人的文章，模仿先！

全篇的用词都有种怪怪的感觉，不舒服。educational way tightly：tightly最好放到谓语旁边，educational？way-->approach？ 通篇从名词到动词，从介词使用到各种搭配，总是感觉有些别扭。

今天头晕得不行只能看这么多了。去给别人的文章提提意见同时学学怎么举例子，怎么更地道舒服的表达吧。也可以看看精华区的资料先。

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我2.19考！shanghai

budlingUID: 148774

我也觉得用词有生搬硬套的感觉，可不知道具体那些词不舒服。这是个人基本功问题，我觉得比跑题更要命。可否详细告知？

budlingUID: 148774

考完作文就只有三个月时间复习笔试内容，对之前没怎么复习过的人，还来得及吗？

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Do you contemplate consciously why university adopts the present way to fulfill its hallowed obligation to cultivate students who are the future hope(future可以不要，因为hope本身表示未来) of societies(societies’) development and shouldering the significandt(significant) resposibilities (responsibilities)? Many present that university should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study. In my opinion, it is ,at least, a superficial assessment which is ostensibly rational, but actually arbitrary.

This requirement of univesity (university)on students may make them increasingly passive during their study experiences and fail to devote their energy and efforts to learning their favorite fields of study. On the one hand(on one hand), since the saying "Interest is one's best teacher" has been recognized as an accredited axiom, requiring every student to take many irrelevant curricula to their beloved majors is sure to make students lose their activities to study. Even some courses, which are the very detestable fractions , can make this requirement turn out to be counterproductive.That is to say, the way acquring (acquiring)knowledge of various academic disciplines won't make students become truly educated, instead, students will lose their interests to acquire any fields of knowledge , even their original favorite majors. On the other hand, even if students remain their strong appetites to studying(study) their key and preferred curricula successfully, they have had little redundent (redundant)energy and time to care them for the sake of their time's being occupied by thoes (those)varied courses outside their fields of study. In a word, from the perspective of some students, detriment of the way outstripes (outstrips)benefit.

For different students, university should require them to take courses distinctively. This era, which is sometimes portayed (portrayed)as dominated by the experience of change at break-neck speed, increasingly needs both specialists and generalists. It is associated with the university's educational way tightly(closely). For the students who are unambiguous to their majors they will pursue and engage in the future, university should allow them to choose the relevant and useful curricula self-directely. They should become the targets of college education to the specialists. And for the students who haven't decide what professions they want follow indeed hereafter, university should offer a variety of courses outsite (outside)their fields of study which are chosen temporarily or passively(?). Facing to so many diverse fields of study, I believe these students will find their beloved majors. What’s more, these varied curricula can broad the students' scope of knowledge unnotely(?), and make students touch on various academic realms thoughly (thoroughly). At the same time, it makes preparation for cultivating the future generalists.

In a summary, the way requiring every student to take a variety of courses prove impractial (impractical). Everything are(is) different in the world, so students are not exception. There will be a better effect, provided university adopts different educational ways on different students.