issue90 请赐教！

ylyhahaUID: 147021

90. "College students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them rather than seek programs that promise entry into the job market."

我的观点是：两者都不能忽视。
1、教育的目的是培养各领域的人才，为社会和全人类做贡献，而兴趣是最好的老师，它能促使学生实现理想。
2、光靠兴趣还不行，物质是其基本保障（可以举马斯洛的需求理论）
3、to some extent，两者并不矛盾，问题的关键在于如何寻求他们的平衡点。

Whether college students should be encouraged to pursue subjects which they are interested in or those that promise entry into the job market is a difficult question. People have different ideas from different aspects. Some assert that interests of subjects is important while others argue that chances of job should be put in the first place. From my point of view, both the factors should be attached important to because they are, to a larger degree, equally and reconcilably useful for a student .

It is known to all that “Interest is the best teacher”. Concerning the purpose of education----foster qualified person who can contribute for the whole society and the whole human being, one can see that such a “best teacher” will effectively lead students to the way to this purpose as well as achievement of their own objectives. For supporting examples one need look no further than these person, from different field and different countries: with the strong interest of science, Thomas Edison invented the first bulb and then the digital and electronic era started; with the strong interest of literature, Goethe had willpower to spend nearly sixty years on the works of Faust; with the strong interest of music, Beethoven composed one of the most glorious and outstanding symphonies---- Fate, overcoming a larger obstacle. All of the success, to some extent, should owe to this great “teacher”, interest. Only do the students pursue the subjects that interested them can they find the way towards success.(这个倒装对吗？)

While the interest is very important, the entry to the job market should not be ignored. Understandably, nobody can survive in such a competitive society without certain income. Can an individual just bend his or her head over what he or she interested in and disregard the real-life problems of survival?  Of course not.  This reason can be easily explained by Abraham H.Maslow’s  Hierarchy of Needs. This theory suggested that “Body Needs”, nowadays, finding a job to support oneself is a content of which, is the basic need of a people. Because once a people are deprived from food or something necessary, he or she will no longer live, let alone devote to the society or reach success. And “Self Actualization” is a higher need, based on the other lower hierarchies. Accordingly, when crossing the forest towards one’s ideality, a job with certain incoming is just like a gun to hunt for food.         

As mentioned above, subjects connecting with either interest or job hunting should be emphasized. The important thing is how to find a balance between the two factors. In my observation, a college should allow students select subjects in which they are interested freely, and at the same time, the college can introduce the students some courses  and skills that are advantageous for finding jobs, but not compulsively.

To sum up, without interest, students would lose impetus and they would accomplish nothing in the end; without subjects that promise entry into the job market, they would have nothing to live on or ,at least, live uncomfortably. Thus, it is colleges’ responsibility to assort with them, although it may be a difficult process.
这是我第二篇，帮忙看看，指出不足，谢谢！！

dawnspeakerUID: 152586

1.词法语法的错误太多，强烈建议作者改好以后再放上来，第一个词便是明显的错误，这有点出格。
2、那个倒装很对。
3、interesting怎么可以当名词用呢？建议改成Interests
4、文章写得很稳，没有跑题...好了，我就只提不足了：
从总体逻辑上说，这片ISSUE没有什么大的问题，但恐怕这是因为它没有涉及到什么大的问题:P
第一个body讲interest有用，嗯，我们应当鼓励兴趣。第二个body讲面包也是必需的，嗯，我们因此得出结论：我们应当鼓励学生搞又有兴趣又好找好工作的subject.这完全没有问题。但是作者完全避开了这个ISSUE的矛盾：如果这两者出现了冲突呢？如果是好找工作的subject没有兴趣呢。。。。我认为如果没有涉及到这个比较尖锐也比较难讲清楚地问题，这个ISSUE是很难得高分的。

我感觉这篇文章逻辑还是比较严密的。但是好像没用费什么脑子——这样写显然比较顺手，但是仔细想一想这样写好像根本没表达什么思想:D

ylyhahaUID: 147021

楼上说得很有道理！但语法词法方面我自己发现不了错误了，能稍微提一下吗（那个interesting实在是低级错误～）？
这样的思路确实不怎么好，能否指点一下，感谢！

ylyhahaUID: 147021

改了一下低级错误

yelinannanUID: 141405

People have different ideas from different aspects-->People from different aspects have different ideas好些
bend his or her head "over" ?
This reason can be easily explain,搭配有问题
food or something necessary.累赘了一点-->some necessities of life
a job with certain "incoming"?比喻不错
我觉得分析中规中矩,应该没大问题,不过思想不太出彩,几个例子排比还不错
还有一点:兴趣不是一成不变的,随着时境改变

dawnspeakerUID: 152586

嗯，写一个提纲吧。个人观点，仅供参考。
"College students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them rather than seek programs that promise entry into the job market."
Position: disagree
Subjects that interest us are good, and those that promise good jobs aren't bad indeed. Woo! Subjects that are both interesting and job promising seem the best things in the world!! But what about subjects that are interesting but do means bad job opportunities, and would you take a subject that you hate it because you hate it yet like it because it may help you in your job hunting? Apparently you have to chose between and that also means you sometimes cannot have both.
Such a dilemma is the subject of my essay.


1、        兴趣是可以培养的。是可以在学习的过程中改变的。而这个学科能不能帮助增强就业竞争力则不是个人能改变的事情。从这个意义上说，兴趣应当迁就后者
2、        工作是生存的基础。如果仅能满足兴趣而使工作不好找，这样的program还是不应当建议来选。否则～～失业了再有兴趣也没有经济基础和心情来搞自己喜欢的东西
3、        从更高的层面上讲，这个冲突体现了社会和个人的关系。就业市场的需求旺衰代表了社会对各类人才和技能的需求。而个人兴趣则是纯粹个人的事情。至于两者谁应当服从谁。我们中国人都讲社会主义，而西人皆看重个人主义。。不过没关系，坚持社会至上一样能说的很清楚
至于例子组织，没有做。
估计有的忙活

1.兴趣是可以培养的

dawnspeakerUID: 152586

最初由 dawnspeaker 发布
[B]第一个词便是明显的错误，这有点出格。
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还没有改

ylyhahaUID: 147021

丢人，马上改了！
yelinannan那个bend his or her head over……是固定搭配，埋头苦干的意思。最后那句话给我启发了，谢谢！
dawnspeaker你的分析有一点我很喜欢，就是列出几种情况，找出真正存在矛盾的那一种（But what about subjects that are interesting but do means bad job opportunities, and would you take a subject that you hate it because you hate it yet like it because it may help you in your job hunting?）
要想到这点也许会深刻些
现在出现一种矛盾，思想与语言很难同时照顾到