暂停改作文

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writing101 发表于 2013-9-23 23:18
你好！
可以直接跟贴。如果不想公开，也可以发我邮箱

hi, 发了一份俺的陋作到你邮箱，谢谢了啊

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mr.ace 发表于 2013-9-24 21:19
hi, 发了一份俺的陋作到你邮箱，谢谢了啊

好的，明天就改

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Satiephilia 发表于 2013-9-24 20:43
请问一下tesol之前也是需要考G的吧

不知道现在什么情况，当年我申请时是不要求G成绩的，非常出人意料吧。
但我在申请的同时还是考了

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writing101 发表于 2013-9-24 22:20
不知道现在什么情况，当年我申请时是不要求G成绩的，非常出人意料吧。
但我在申请的同时还是考了

感谢LZ前来改作文啦=]
送楼主一朵小花

Leon-WangUID：2772364

赞楼主！
不过马上要考了，来不及了。
顺便请教一下楼主：你觉得argument里面evidence，assumption和question这几类的写法上有什么区别吗？

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HardyNibor 发表于 2013-9-25 14:07
受累看看吧，一直想找个没有阅读障碍的

你一下给我三篇，我可能得花点时间才能回复哦。
“一直想找个没有阅读障碍的”是什么意思？

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Satiephilia 发表于 2013-9-24 23:01
感谢LZ前来改作文啦=]
送楼主一朵小花

谢谢斑竹

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Leon-Wang 发表于 2013-9-25 15:13
赞楼主！
不过马上要考了，来不及了。
顺便请教一下楼主：你觉得argument里面evidence，assumption和ques ...

无论指引怎么问，实际考察的内容都一样，即你是否能辨别argument逻辑链条上的问题，但在写的时候，你需要紧扣指引中的要求。比如evidence, 可以是逻辑链条中缺少的一环，也可以是某个assumption需要进一步证据来证明，关键是你要强调需要evidence, 而不是仅仅指出某个assumption有问题。

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writing101 发表于 2013-9-25 21:42
无论指引怎么问，实际考察的内容都一样，即你是否能辨别argument逻辑链条上的问题，但在写的时候，你需要 ...

非常感谢！我一般都是先指出作者的assumption，然后里面有什么问题（比如我们不知道什么情况，如果缺少这种考量会有什么implication），最后指出作者应该提供的证据。一般都是这样的套路，所以我想通过这个来涵盖所有的情况。

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楼主，帮我改下这篇作文吧，写了好久，觉得逻辑很乱
狠批就是了！

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独语斜阑526 发表于 2013-9-27 21:09
楼主，帮我改下这篇作文吧，写了好久，觉得逻辑很乱
狠批就是了！

可能需要等两天才能回复你哦，手里还有好几篇需要先批改。

先问一下，你对AW的目标是几分？

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writing101 发表于 2013-9-27 22:07
可能需要等两天才能回复你哦，手里还有好几篇需要先批改。

先问一下，你对AW的目标是几分？

好的，谢谢咯
我的目标是4分

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楼主你好，我10.13日考，刚开始写，参考书是李建林issue5.5,只看了前3章。
下面是我写的第一批issue，题目编号是03，希望你帮我看看，万分感谢。

For most students, studying in a famous educational institution is necessary for them to lead a ideal life. Of course the educational institution plays an important role for the students to prepare for their future, but responsibility of that institution is only limited to the students' academic performance. As for the perspective of students future success in their major, there is no need for the school to involve. If any necessary moderate advise is enough instead of dissuade.

First of all, the major purpose of education is to pass on knowledge and cultivate the youth for the society. Any goal unrelated to this final purpose of a educational institution is improper and unnecessary. The students go to school to obtain knowledge, what they expect the school to offer is the information that can help them improve their head. So any school that can provide the best teaching facilities is regarded as good school. Nobody will blame the school if it doesn't point out that the student can't success in that major. Obviously, this responsibility has nothing to do with the educational institution's instinct function.

Further more, naturally the school can care for the students about whether they can achieve success, it doesn't mean that the student should study for their success. For instance, many students study art just because they want to enjoy and appreciate artworks. And it is absurd that a school should dissuade all the students that are not talented enough to be an artist. So that dissuading a student from his/her fields of study should never be the school's responsibility, though it can server as a measure to improve the records about the graduated students of the school.

However, the school should give advise to the students who are serious about their study and pursuit for remarkable achievement in their filed. For these students, the school is able to give the most objective appraise about their future career perspective. In this case, the school's advise is valuable but it is still not its responsibility.

All in all, the educational institutions should focus on their academic teaching, as for their students future success, they should not take these issues too seriously and regard it as part of their responsibility, although for some students their advise are directive.
   

   

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mz31098 发表于 2013-9-28 15:28
楼主你好，我10.13日考，刚开始写，参考书是李建林issue5.5,只看了前3章。
下面是我写的第一批issue，题目 ...

这两天尽快回复你
不过实话实说，还有两周考试，现在才开始写第一篇有点晚。请问你目标分数是多少呢？

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writing101 发表于 2013-9-28 22:48
这两天尽快回复你
不过实话实说，还有两周考试，现在才开始写第一篇有点晚。请问你目标分数是多少 ...

我希望能拿到issue3.5分，可能3分更实际一点吧，多谢大神提点
还有，我打字慢，25分钟内只能打400字的样子