issue39.（教育类）请指教

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请帮忙看看有无跑题？ 多谢1

39"The intellectual benefits of attending a university or college are vastly overrated: most people could learn more by studying and reading on their own for four years than by pursuing a university or college degree."

Could people learn more by studying and reading on their own for four years than by pursuing a university or college degree? I think this question does not have a general answer, since to various people, the results of self-study is various. Generally speaking, could a person learn more by attending a university than by self-study depend on if he/she has a strong ability of self-study.

First of all, we could not deny that the university or college is a suitable place for most people to pursue knowledge. Since the first university appeared hundreds of years ago, higher education has become more and more popular in many countries, and has cultivated millions of engineers or qualified workers in many fields. In China, most parents feel proud of their child if he/she could enter a university, for they believe the child can learn well in a university. In fact, studying in a university does have many advantages: a good faculty could guide students to master knowledge with less difficulty and more happiness, discussion with other students could spur and help a student to learn more comprehensively; numerous equipments and facilities in labs are the bridge to truly grasp some experimental skills. All these advantages are usually not available if the student stay at home and learn by himself/herself.

Second, there are also some disadvantages for a student who has a strong self-study ability to study in a university or college. University and college often educated students at a unit of class. When a teacher teaches lessons, he/she has to care about the majority of students and sometimes could not pay enough attention to those students, who is pretty wise, and has a strong self-study ability, such as understanding new knowledge very quickly, reciting something very firmly and so on. As a result, the excellent students often do not receive the education that they deserved. For example, if a clever student is having the class with other ordinary students, he/she usually feels bored for about what teacher says, because he/she may have already understand the knowledge when the teacher first describes it while the teacher just kept repeating it again and again. Unfortunately, he/she could do nothing else but continue listening, for he/she is attending classes with others, and has to obey the disciplines. Thus, the excellent students will learn little in most classes which are oriented to ordinary students.

Third, whether a student should learn by himself/herself or attending a university relies on whether he/she has a strong self-study ability. To some students, who is so clever and mature that he/she could teach him/herself and enjoy learning. If these students do not attending a university, they could learn more at home, because they have more free time to pursue his/her interests. Besides, the Internet and library can supply enough information that those students need. On the contrary, if a student is not mature enough and has weak ability in self-study, he/she will readily be distracted by other things when at home, or just could not find the right method for learning. To those, the university is a better choice.

All in all, although a university or college will facilitate many students' studying, they will also hamper some excellent students achievements. Hence, if a student has a strong ability in self-study, he or she would be better to learn by him/herself. Given that most students are ordinary ones, thus attending a university or college does not overrated. Moreover, in some developing counties, such as China, it is necessary to enlarge the scale of higher education and let more students have the chances to gain the benefit from it.

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大致看了一下，没有跑题。挑两段改一下，指出一些小毛病，有些句子需要大的调整，但是因为还算通顺，就不改了，留着你以后慢慢体会吧。
一个非常突出的问题，he/she类似的表达太多，老外一定烦死了，我也烦。一个比较好的改法，都用复数然后用THEY指代，另外也可以都用单数，统一用HE不会有问题的。

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比较通顺，虽然是CHINGLISH，但也暂时没必要再改了，考试要紧，但是时刻注意主谓一致。不要以为这是低级错误，在以后很长一段时间内，你还会继续犯。记住：这么高频率的出现这种错误的话，你不可能得好分数的


All in all, although a university or college改用复数 will去掉 facilitate many students' studying, they will去掉 also hamper some excellent students achievements不够具体，因此让人摸不着头脑hamper the development of those students excellent in self-study. Hence, if a student has a strong ability in self-study, he or she would be better to learn by him/herself. Given that most students are ordinary ones去掉, thus去掉 attending a university or college does not overrated. is necessaryMoreover, in some developing counties, such as China, it is necessary to enlarge the scale of higher education and let more students have the chances to gain the benefit from it.最后这句都不要了

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Could people learn more by studying and reading on their own for four years than by pursuing a university or college degree? I think this question does not have a general answer, since to various people, the results of self-study is various. Generally speaking, could a person learn more by attending a university than by self-study depend on if （应该是whether）he/she has a strong ability of self-study.

First of all, we could not deny (前面这部分好像用个undeniably就完了）that the university or college is a suitable place for most people to pursue knowledge. Since the first university appeared（学校能用appear?） hundreds of years ago, higher education has become more and more popular in many countries, and has cultivated millions of engineers or qualified workers in many fields. In China, most parents feel proud of their child （children，后面也有单复的问题）if he/she could enter a university, for they believe the child can learn well in a university. In fact, studying in a university does have many advantages: a good faculty could guide students to master knowledge with less difficulty and more happiness, discussion with other students could spur and help a student to learn more comprehensively; numerous equipments and facilities in labs are the bridge to truly grasp some experimental skills. All these advantages are usually not available if the student stay at home and learn by himself/herself.

Second, there are also some disadvantages for a student who has a strong self-study ability to study in a university or college. University and college often educated students at a unit of class. When a teacher teaches lessons, he/she has to care about the majority of students and sometimes could not pay enough attention to those students, who is （这里单复？）pretty wise, and has a strong self-study ability, such as understanding new knowledge very quickly, reciting something very firmly and so on. （不舒服，用quick understanding of knowledge这样的形式好像更好）As a result, the excellent students often do not receive the education that they deserved. For example, if a clever student is having the class with other ordinary students, he/she usually feels bored for about what teacher says, because he/she may have already understand the knowledge when the teacher first describes it while the teacher just kept repeating it again and again（when后又是while，头晕的说.） Unfortunately, he/she could do nothing else but continue listening, for he/she is attending classes with others, and has to obey the disciplines. Thus, the excellent students will learn little in most classes which are oriented to ordinary students.

Third, whether a student should learn by himself/herself or attending a university relies on whether he/she has a strong self-study ability. To some students, who is so clever and mature that he/she could teach him/herself and enjoy learning.（这句能用从句吗？读读是不是个破句，主干就是to some students） If these students do not attending （attend）a university, they could learn more at home, because they have more free time to pursue his/her interests. Besides, the Internet and library can supply enough information that those students need. On the contrary, if a student is not mature enough and has weak ability in self-study, he/she will readily be distracted by other things when at home, or just could not find the right method for learning. To those, the university is a better choice.

All in all, although a university or college will facilitate many students' studying, they will also hamper some excellent students achievements. Hence, if a student has a strong ability in self-study, he or she would be better to learn by him/herself. Given that most students are ordinary ones, thus attending a university or college does not overrated. Moreover, in some developing counties, such as China, it is necessary to enlarge the scale of higher education and let more students have the chances to gain the benefit from it.老兄真是念念不忘祖国啊，最后这句在本来已近句号的时候再兴波澜，有必要吗？
感觉上没有跑题，论证的也基本清楚，只是觉得body2与body3有重复的成分。是限时的吧，觉得低级错误不少，呵呵。另外同意wglxh大牛的看法，she/he用的太多，估计你是受了你自己zt的那篇贴子的影响吧？偶尔出现问题不大，但通篇到底就有感觉很坏了，建议你自己隔段时间读读，感觉真的不舒服。

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多谢2位指点。这篇是限时完成的，不过后来又改过半天。看来对主谓一致，单复数这些问题还是要好好练习。：）