issue95 第二次限时，55分钟

wallisUID: 111832

95 "People work more productively in teams than individually. Teamwork requires cooperation, which motivates people much more than individual competition does."                                         

The speaker states that it is more productive for people working in teams than as an individual, in that cooperation in teamwork just serves to motivate people much more than individual competition does. While in my opinion, the speaker overstates the effect of cooperation in the teamwork but ignores other essential elements that are vital for high productivity of people in the team. More over, teamwork does not always increase efficiency if not handling properly.

First, I must concede that, in some cases, teamwork does motivate people much more than individual. As is known, it is the natural inclination for people to work on a complex and tedious work alone. He might be defeated by the difficulties that appear during his work, if there is no one for him to refer to. If someone could give him a hand then he will surely be greatly encouraged and go on with his job. If, nevertheless, that onerous work is left for a group of people, it is very likely that the condition will be quite different, for with more people, there will come more ideas and methods.

Second, is only cooperation enough to ensure that people work more productively? Is the word "team" stand for a certain extent of cooperation? Emphatically, no! It appears to me that cooperation within a team is just something like the process of the trade between people. That is to say, you must first have something useful to exchange with others to obtain what you eagerly need. To be more exact, if most of the people in a team come up with nothing particular in cooperation, does the so-called cooperation exist? In china about two decades ago, for instance, it seems that the whole country is devoted in the national cause, while there are huge amount of people in the factory owned by the country got almost the constant salary even if many of them have nothing to do. The effect of this "cooperation" is obviously. Of course, this example just serves to illustrate what cooperation depends on. In fact, we must suppose humans are inherently lazy, and thus to eliminate this foible, some sense of crisis should be imposed on them. The mechanism of competition just serves this end. It is just through competition in a team that guarantees meaningful cooperation within the team. Without competition, people in the team might have even poorer performance than that of them as an individual.

On the other hand, humans all intrinsically have a strong desire to exceed others in some field. The winners always enjoy their success over others. Given certain competition in a team, everyone does utilize all he could access to establish and maintain his position in the team, to gain dignity and sense of honor. In this way, the whole team will operate at a better state and the productivity of everyone is significantly raised.

Finally, how do people in a team work more productively than individually? From the above analysis, I strongly believe that it is the interlay between cooperation and competition within a team that makes the higher productivity possible. Meaningful cooperation calls for competition, whereas cooperation is necessary and indispensable for everyone to establish his own individual part of the job to compete with others.

libbyUID: 151455

What time do u take AWA? U wrote so many! pfpf

so猫UID: 148633

95 "People work more productively in teams than individually. Teamwork requires cooperation, which motivates people much more than individual competition does."

The speaker states that it is more productive for people working in teams than as an individual, in that 这个in that 是干什么的？不懂结构的说~ cooperation in teamwork just serves to motivate people much more than individual competition does. While in my opinion, the speaker overstates the effect of cooperation in the teamwork but 用but吗？ignores other essential elements that are vital for high productivity of people in the team. More over moreover是一个词, teamwork does not always increase efficiency if not handling properly.

Firstfirstly，下同, I must concede that, in some cases, teamwork does motivate people much more than individual这个你主谓错了 teamwork可以motivate，individual怎么motivate啊？还people~~~. As is known, it is the natural inclination for people to work on a complex and tedious work alone. He might be defeated by the difficulties that appear during his work, if there is no one for him to refer to. If someone could give him a hand then he will surely be greatly encouraged and go on with his job. If, nevertheless 郁闷我 大家都知道怎么放这个nevertheless~~~继续学习ing~~, that onerous work is left for a group of people, it is very likely that the condition will be quite different, for with more people, there will come more ideas and methods.

Second, is only cooperation enough to ensure that people work more productively? Is the word "team" stand for a certain extent of cooperation? Emphatically, no! It appears to me that cooperation within a team is just something like the process of the trade between people. That is to say,还不如变成-加i.e.呢~两句变一句 而且更职业~~ you must first have something useful to exchange with others to obtain what you eagerly need. To be more exact, if most of the people in a team come up with nothing particular in cooperation, does the so-called cooperation exist? In china大写都忘了 汗~~ about two decades ago, for instance, it seems that the whole country is devoted in the national cause, while there are huge amount of people in the factory owned by the country got almost the constant salary even if many of them have nothing to do. The effect of this "cooperation" is obviously. Of course, this example just serves to illustrate what cooperation depends on. In fact, we must suppose humans are inherently lazy, and thus to eliminate this foible, some sense of crisis should be imposed on them. The mechanism of competition just serves this end. It is just through competition in a team that guarantees meaningful cooperation within the team. Without competition, people in the team might have even poorer performance than that of them as an individual.

On the other hand, humans all intrinsically have a strong desire to exceed others in some field. The winners always enjoy their success over others. Given certain competition in a team, everyone does utilize all he could access to establish and maintain his position in the team, to gain dignity and sense of honor. In this way, the whole team will operate at a better state and the productivity of everyone is significantly raised. 这段~~~也太简单了吧~~~还没说清楚怎么回事呢~~~例证也没有~~~

Finally别用这个词 让人以为这还是一个分论点 而不是结尾~~~, how do people in a team work more productively than individually? From the above analysis, I strongly believe that it is the interlay between cooperation and competition within a team that makes the higher productivity possible. Meaningful cooperation calls for competition, whereas cooperation is necessary and indispensable for everyone to establish his own individual part of the job to compete with others.

wallis好久不见你啦~ 你好象跟我差不多时间考吧~~~
这篇写了多久啊~~~
段落间严重的比例失调 看你的second 和on the other hand就知道了~~~
有头重脚清的嫌疑 中间那段精简一点 后一段充实一点就好了
一起加油啦~~~~~~~

galaxysongUID: 152834

55 minutes... You wrote far faster than did I.

wallisUID: 111832

谢谢，so mao, 喵喵喵：）
那一段写的是少了，是因为不打住，我可能就严重超时啦！没有结尾比段落失调严重阿！
我是晚上题了一会球，洗了一把澡写的，可能精神比较好，可是考试时还不知是什么状态呢？担心ing，我立足点4分，够了就行。